Like a mini Black Mirror episode!

Well written and especially so given the timeline/alt reality aspect.

Best so far.

Holy shit. You came up with this in just a week? This is great. I'm almost embarrassed to have entered the same competition as you. Everything, from the characters, to the descriptions, and the story, is top notch. I really can't find anything to complain about. Okay, I'm gushing now. I'm gonna end this review. lol Fantastic job. WOW.

~Zack~

Fantastic piece with some strong themes at work. Compelling characters, nicely plotted (yes, Groundhog Day jumped to mind) and a believable sense of paranoia.

Great job!

Great work.

This one works on a lot of levels.  And it's true to the form.  

Kudos! I look forward to the reveal.

Thus far the comments have been pretty short, saying how much they like your story.  I on the other hand didn't... no, I'm messing around.  I thought this was great!  

I always write down every story on a binder and check them off when I read them.  For some strange reason I didn't write this one down, but when I was grading the stories I saw this and realized that I missed one.  It was nice to finish with this one.  I think it was fate that led me to exclude this from my list, only to realize it and read it at the very end!

This was my last read and hands down the best. Very well done. And in a week? Must've been brewing for some time. Great job!

I echo what Ashlie said.

When I was piecing things together, I thought maybe the other girl would be Emma II.

I love Twilight Zone-style scripts, and I actually wrote one a few OAC's back.

Excellent.

Oh wow, my first excellent!

Solid writing, smooth and very easy to follow. You ALMOST lost me with all the 'Edge of Tomorrow' stuff but this was handled so well I was able to keep going until it became clear what was going on. And then when it did, man that was an emotional punch.

What gives it extra points for me is this is a Sci-Fi and yet you don't make it super science fiction techno babble. You just boost technology up to a believable levels a few years down the line. Very creative, nice and inventive.

Kudos, this one is superb.

-Mark

Title's good
From my observations on logline, this is the strongest thus far
Only point: both reads like mystery/drama/thriller territory, not SF. So I expect a subgenre piece here, let's see:

Oh, well. I have not much to say. Very good, very thoughtful performance.

Not much for me to say on this one that hasn't been said.  Heads above the competition (not to say the others were bad, but this author is clearly on another playing field).

I can't wait to see who wrote this so I can read the rest of his work.  Also, I'd absolutely love to see this work actually produced.

Now I'm bummed, because I know I didn't win.  

Congratulations, Eric. Second, third time at the top and of course rightfullly. Your scipt was a great experience.

Congratulations on 1st place, Eric. This was an excellent script and feels well drafted and complete for a week's work.

I love sci-fi stories like this and it made the script even better that everything seemed plausible and natural. I agree with one comment I saw above that it wouldn't feel out of place in the series 'Black Mirror's.

Great work.

Ste