Thanks all for your input.

Ok - Seems the maiden voyage is the most popular. Since this is still early in the process, replotting that doesn't seem too bad. Plus, provides a lot more people to brutally kill off lol

Dave: Thanks for your input.

It's not me who has named it Gravity train. It was a theoretical means of transportation presented to Isaac Newton by Robert Hooke (It wasn't a serious proposal, more a brain exercise on the maths and physics behind it)
The basic idea being, the train is pulled to the Earths centre by gravity, reaching maximum velocity directly halfway - the second half of the journey has gravity acting against it, but the momentum should - theoretically - get the train to the other side stopping exactly as it reaches the surface (Ignoring other forces such as friction and air resistance)

Love the idea of the transplant though - much better than death bed. I am deffo having that lol not only does it add a ticking time bomb, but it also adds stakes - if she doesn't make it, neither does her daughter.

From a quick google search, I've found it takes about 32-40 days to get from England to Australia without flying - so I think that fits OK.

Zack - Thanks. Hope I don't make a complete utter mess of it.
It's not a portal to Hell - it's literally Hell because Hell is underground, right? seems silly but it's all I got lol

Quoted from Matthew Taylor Thanks all for your input. It's not me who has named it Gravity train. It was a theoretical means of transportation presented to Isaac Newton by Robert Hooke (It wasn't a serious proposal, more a brain exercise on the maths and physics behind it) The basic idea being, the train is pulled to the Earths centre by gravity, reaching maximum velocity directly halfway - the second half of the journey has gravity acting against it, but the momentum should - theoretically - get the train to the other side stopping exactly as it reaches the surface (Ignoring other forces such as friction and air resistance)

Fascinating - cool

Quoted from Hank She returns to the family she owe's home after murdering all her living relatives. Theresa is told she still must commit suicide for the contract to end.

Theresa is told that she's adopted and therefore not bound by the contract. The family apologizes for any inconvenience this oversight may have caused and bids her good day.

Quoted from Matthew Taylor (A) No, you won't. Stop trying to deceive your fellow writers and stop treating them like idiots. (B) Don't bother reviewing past OWC. They are done and dusted with many reviews already, I doubt anyone will care about an extra review so don't waste your time. (C) Personally I have no issue with you partaking in this challenge as it is not anonymous. I will simply ignore your entry unless I see you actually participating - Others will decide for themselves what to do.

Preach

That would be a more comical twist and less predictable, although I like it ending with audiences not knowing if her baby survives the c-section. If the baby lives future generations will be able to live free from the contract, and if the baby dies that brings an end to Theresa’s bloodline.

Quoted from Matthew Taylor Ok - my exam is over so now I can concentrate on this. Here is where I am at if anyone is interested Title: 42.2 Genre: Horror/Sci-fi World History (pre-movie): The year 2050 - Earth is covered in electrical storms grounding all flights indefinitely. Global travel now takes weeks instead of hours. To combat this, a gravity train is built connecting Europe to Australia reducing travel time between the two continents to 42.2 minutes. On its debut journey carrying 150 passengers, the train arrives in Australia with only one survivor. The others have either killed each other or killed themselves. The survivor recounts that the gravity train passes directly through Hell and drove everyone to madness. The gravity train still operates (mainly unmanned cargo) but is still open to passengers if they choose to - strangely, not many people take that option. Logline: When an absent mother learns of her daughter's imminent death, she decides to be by her side. But to get there in time, she must travel to Hell and back on the controversial gravity train.

I like the idea of this and although I may be largely unqualified to comment if you would allow me for a moment I'd like to add in a suggestion.

Instead of a gravity train have it run on thermal radiation, the closer it gets to the centre of the earth, the source of the heat and radiation, the faster it gets, downside is the possibility of radiation flooding the train, but in this instance, the radiation takes the form of demons.

Just a thought, thanks for indulging me.

Quoted from Geezis I like the idea of this and although I may be largely unqualified to comment if you would allow me for a moment I'd like to add in a suggestion. Instead of a gravity train have it run on thermal radiation, the closer it gets to the centre of the earth, the source of the heat and radiation, the faster it gets, downside is the possibility of radiation flooding the train, but in this instance, the radiation takes the form of demons. Just a thought, thanks for indulging me.

This sounds interesting

Quoted from Geezis I like the idea of this and although I may be largely unqualified to comment if you would allow me for a moment I'd like to add in a suggestion. Instead of a gravity train have it run on thermal radiation, the closer it gets to the centre of the earth, the source of the heat and radiation, the faster it gets, downside is the possibility of radiation flooding the train, but in this instance, the radiation takes the form of demons. Just a thought, thanks for indulging me.

Not a bad suggestion at all. But I don't know about the radiation taking on the form of demons.

In the spirit of sharing and getting some advise, here's my plan for my script and it's a topic that's been close to my heart for years.
Jack the Ripper. I know it's been done to death but I have my own theories on why Jack did what he did so I'm incorporating that into my story.
Basically, a woman survives an attack by Jack and is used by the police to lure him out. But the trauma of the attack causes PTSD, hallucinations, nightmares and grim desire for revenge.
I'm listing and creating backstories for my characters and I've already started on the script, but it's gonna be a grind  

Quoted from Zack Not a bad suggestion at all. But I don't know about the radiation taking on the form of demons.

Perhaps 'Hell Particles' that enter the body and infect the host, causing changes in character and bad deeds.
I've been watching far too much Dr Who recently, must be making me think irrationally  

Quoted from Hank I thought of the first dialogue exchange for my script last night, and edited it more this morning. There will be some actions to break up the lengthy dialogue of the lawyer in the actual script. LAWYER: It has been agreed upon by both parties that I now refer you to past noted instances in which your ancestors chose to convey information, be it through written text or speech, to anyone concerning this ancient pact, besides the opposite birth-giver of their first-born. Or myself and those I represent. Family member: Lucinda Falclair. Date of injury: seventeen-o-seven. Injury sustained: combustion of left hand. Family member: Vincent Falclair. Died: seventeen-o-eight. Cause of death: suffocation by swallowing of his tongue. Family member: Rosie Saunters. Died: nineteen-ninety-five. Cause of death: blood-loss by loss of teeth and jaw. THERESA: That's enough! How dare you say such things! You get out of here! You crazy bastard!

Just a couple of tips, Hank. Lawyer-speak or legalise is very specific lingo. Look up examples and incorporate it into the dialogue of your character. It'll read more professionally and differentiate your characters from each other.

Same with medical terminology, especially when writing a horror.

Example: blood loss by loss of teeth and jaw . Quite apart from the fact you repeat the word loss, a lawyer or medical person is unlikely to phrase it like that imho.

It wouldn't necessarily kill a person to have their jaw removed, it has happened before in procedures to remove tumors and bullfighting accidents, but possibly if the lower jaw is ripped off harshly, a major artery, such as the carotid, could be damaged or severed. That can cause almost instantaneous death.

So: The lawyer would more professionally relay the cause of death as severing of the carotid arteries and jugular veins

A naturally curious person on the opposite side of the table might then ask how that happened.
Her jaw was ripped off could then be the more shocking and plain English reply.

This is horror, so ramp up the minutiae is what I'm suggesting and pay attention to the authentic sound of different character voices. These days research is as easy as a click.

Quoted from Geezis Jack the Ripper. I know it's been done to death but...

Quoted from Geezis Basically, a woman survives an attack by Jack and is used by the police to lure him out. But the trauma of the attack causes PTSD, hallucinations, nightmares and grim desire for revenge. /

Could be an interesting spin. Did the woman maybe learn of Jack's identity during the attack? How did she survive? Was she saved?

Quoted from Geezis In the spirit of sharing and getting some advise, here's my plan for my script and it's a topic that's been close to my heart for years. Jack the Ripper. I know it's been done to death but I have my own theories on why Jack did what he did so I'm incorporating that into my story. Basically, a woman survives an attack by Jack and is used by the police to lure him out. But the trauma of the attack causes PTSD, hallucinations, nightmares and grim desire for revenge. I'm listing and creating backstories for my characters and I've already started on the script, but it's gonna be a grind

Wouldn't meet the criteria if I were a judge.

Quoted Text You will pick a relatively common, potentially stressful life event/life change and write a horror story incorporating that event.

I don't think being attacked by Jack the Ripper is a relatively common life event. But I am somewhat of a dick in these things.

Quoted from Zack Could be an interesting spin. Did the woman maybe learn of Jack's identity during the attack? How did she survive? Was she saved?

We learn of Jack's (fictional) identity towards the end of the story and the reasoning for his attacks.
She survived because she had a heavy object that she used to fight him off with, Jack's other real life victims didn't have that opportunity.
She isn't physically saved during the attack, but is she morally, psychologically and spiritually saved at the end? I don't know that.....yet.