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I Can't Get No Satisfaction - 04C (currently 1364 views) |
Don |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 11:43am |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16381 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
I Can't Get No Satisfaction by Casey Kasem - Short, Comedy - A radio DJ tries his best to give away a cash prize over the air, but the listeners aren't having any part of it. - pdf format
Writer interested in feedback on this work |
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JEStaats |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 3:08pm |
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Old Timer No sh*t, there I was....
LocationTucson, AZ Posts1735 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
All I could think about while reading this was WKRP in Cincinnati. Man, I loved that show - especially the episode when they made a contest similar to this when they mixed the first couple notes of like ten songs. Funny stuff.
Anywho, some funny bits here. Very relevant and contemporary. Hard to believe so many younger generations don't know who the Beatles were. Yup, funny bits.
Nailed the parameters too. Not easy to do. Good work, writer. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 3:09pm |
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LocationUK Posts4319 Posts Per Day 1.14 |
Enjoyable fun, and I've certainly heard later night shows like that.
Good effort. |
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jayrex |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 3:56pm |
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Old Timer Cut to three weeks earlier
LocationLondon, UK Posts1420 Posts Per Day 0.22 |
I like this one. I can see this one play out well on radio. Hits all the right notes and tones.
I'm satisfied. |
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MarkD |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 4:05pm |
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I liked this one. I love AT40 and Classic Rock so this hit home for me. Good job. |
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eldave1 |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 6:18pm |
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LocationSouthern California Posts6874 Posts Per Day 1.95 |
Nails the parameters - nicely written and several chuckles. One of my favs so far. You squeezed a lot in 4 pages. |
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Geezis |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 6:38pm |
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January Project Group There's always a single malt waiting for you.
LocationGlasgow, Scotland Posts411 Posts Per Day 0.27 |
Well written. Funny. My hatred of local radio DJs is secured by this story. Very well done. |
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PKCardinal |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 8:57pm |
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LocationKansas Posts1447 Posts Per Day 0.63 |
Funny stuff. Worked for me. Nothing to add.
Except... can I get a FADE OUT? I feel incomplete without it. Thanks! |
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Zack |
Posted: April 17th, 2021, 9:15pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4487 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Ha! Funny stuff. Pretty much all dialog, and it works great. Only hang up I've got it... Ozzy or Ozzie. Pick one. Good work, writer. |
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MarkItZero |
Posted: April 18th, 2021, 5:12pm |
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That was an enjoyable enough little short. Don't really have anything to add. Fun idea, good execution. |
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Claudio |
Posted: April 18th, 2021, 5:41pm |
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LocationLos Angeles Posts102 Posts Per Day 0.06 |
This was SUPER up my alley. I love this type of humor.
Great execution, I like how you kept innovating with ways that the callers could annoy. The ramping anger was gold.
This was my favorite, awesome stuff~ |
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SAC |
Posted: April 18th, 2021, 8:31pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Writer,
Good job. Loved the DJ banter and the clueless callers. Rock aficionados are a bit arrogant in their knowledge of music, but these callers were stupid. Beginning, middle and end -- check. Entertaining -- yes. Nice work, but now totally wow'd.
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Warren |
Posted: April 18th, 2021, 10:24pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.36 |
Hi writer,
Very well written and top-notch dialogue.
I enjoyed this one, not much else to add.
All the best. |
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MarkRenshaw |
Posted: April 19th, 2021, 7:27am |
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LocationUK Posts2335 Posts Per Day 0.59 |
That was entertaining and yes, I've heard shows like that.
The only downside to it is how expensive it would be to get permission to use those songs. You'd probably pay more money than all of the other audio scripts in the OWC would cost to produce combined.
Meets the parameters and thanks for the ride!
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khamanna |
Posted: April 19th, 2021, 8:17am |
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Posts4194 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Fun piece and really funny dialog.
And don't we all know who wrote it) |
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