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CALLER 1 (MALE V.O.)
Who are the Beatles?
JAMIE THE DJ (V.O.)
This isn’t Jeopardy.



I must be a crackhead btw. Aussies are big on pineapple on pizza, just in case you don't know.

Not bad.
Entertaining to read just not fully convinced it has quite enough laughs for a radio skit. Good observations and insights, just work in a couple more belly laughs.

Great premise.


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Hello writer

Pineapple on pizza should be a crime... I don't understand how it is not.

Nice and comedic, I can feel the DJ's pain. Not the most exciting of stories but entertaining none-the-less.

Best of luck

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Reminded me straight away of Alan Partridge, but with a bit of Larry David thrown in. Yeah I don't know about anyone else, but to me it has 'British Comedy' written all over it. Nice one. Thoroughly enjoyed it.
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Reminded me straight away of Alan Partridge, but with a bit of Larry David thrown in. To me this has 'British Comedy' written all over it. Thoroughly enjoyed it. Nice one.
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That was a fun read! The premise was simple but the 4 page story you created out of it was entertaining and fun to read.  


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Seems interesting to me that this is only script I've read in this "radio play" challenge that's actually set on the radio.  Seems like it is almost perfectly tailored to the challenge since everything is basically audio.  But it was very easy for me to visualize what was going on.  Thought it was pretty funny -- couple of clunkers in there but every comedy is going to have those.  Maybe would have liked a more bangup response at the end to the guy who asked him to play the song he was trying to get people to identify, but otherwise, really solid work here.  Liked it. Best of luck with it.

Gary


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A bit hit and miss for me.
Some nice moments.

Moron callers.

P.S. Kham, I'm pretty sure a certain person is not taking part so I think it's safe to say, nope.
This one's a Stones fan, after all.


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Well that was fun.

We all have a local station where every other caller is either drunk or stoned lol

I enjoyed this, nice use of the parameters

Good job on entering


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Very funny!
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Quoted from JEStaats
All I could think about while reading this was WKRP in Cincinnati. Man, I loved that show - especially the episode when they made a contest similar to this when they mixed the first couple notes of like ten songs. Funny stuff.


That was WKRP in Cincinnati episode 11 "The Contest Nobody Could Win"

Was one of my favorite episodes, that and the one where Les Nessman telecasts a promotional turkey drop for WKRP by dropping turkeys from the news helicopter on Thanksgiving… not realizing turkeys can’t fly.

Anyway, yeah this was fast and furious… fun too. Quite a bit crammed into 4 pages, but radio DJs are a different breed, especially the late-night ones.

JAMIE THE DJ: “…and only crackheads want pineapple on their pizzas.”

Lol, I just might be based as fuck, cause ham and pineapple on a thin crust woodfired pizza is all the rage in my world!

Best of luck.
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It's funny because it's true.  

Kidding, of course. But it is funny, and the punchline hits home for me. It would play well visually too. Great job, I like it.


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Funny! Funny! I liked this a lot.

Hmmm... if there were twenty pages I would read more -- which is saying a lot because I have the attention span of a duck. This was a lot of fun, really. My 2 sense. Best of Irish luck! -A


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I really enjoyed this short script.  I was cracking up the entire time that the DJ is trying so hard to keep his composure during the call-ins to the contest.  The DJ's line to a caller's answer, "Please find the largest building and throw yourself off of it", or words to that effect, had me laughing at my desk.  Too funny!  Really liked this one!  Great job!!
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I was cracking up the entire time I read this.  Really liked the smart-ass DJ and his one liners against his callers.  I had to read it twice to make sure I wasn't hallucinating.  Nope!  I wasn't.  Truly a very witty and comedic script.
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