Emotional, but not cathartic. It was an honest farewell, though a bit stiff, but I wasn't made to feel anything for the characters, not even for their loss. I can identify with it, but it didn't have an impact outside of my own experiences of loss. Still, it does have heart and is relevant now.

Hi writer,

Okay, yeah, tug at the ol’ heartstrings type scenario. Face-time with a final dose of altruism to ease the suffering of a loved one. The tale fits well with the theme because of the need for communication over a device, and it appears (to me) more of a tale of ‘man meets his future self’, regrettably for the wrong reasons; technology is a double-edged sword, we want to escape these damn devices, but on the other edge… they’re there (unconditionally) when we need them. Solid entry, best of luck.

It's sad, and very effective. Very well written as well. Challenge met. Not sure about how you left it at the end. Just feels a bit hollow, but I suppose that is a more honest ending. Wouldn't be surprised to see this one voted towards the top.

Um, I think, would be to say that it's about emotion. Writing things in such a way as to provoke an emotional response from the reader and create a tone. After glancing at the previous comments -- you did that here. Which just isn't easy to do. So kudos. Don't get me wrong, I liked this for the most part, but sadly -- It just didn’t tug on my heart strings as much as i thought it would - no fault of your own --for reasons I care not to share. I know, I know, it sounds cold...

Good job here though. Best of Irish luck with this. -A

A very touching (and timely) entry. Who knows how many times this same scenario has played out during this whole pandemic?

I think it needs a hook that would differentiate it from other similar scripts submitted to this group’s Covid challenge last year. Plus I think Fletcher went a little overboard with his endearments to his dying wife: “my darling,” “my love,” “my best friend.” Those are generic phrases. You need something personal that only Mary ever heard.

This was very touching, Owen. Great work