Hi Writer

It was alright. The premise is great but the story itself could have been so much better. Personally, I think this would work better as a black comedy than a drama, would open it up to new possibilities, ribbing God with the "You save him" and explore that, delve deeper into the forgiving people for their sins no matter what they are.... feels more like a missed opportunity.

Good job thinking outside of the box thought.

Best of luck

Hm, decent enough little tale. Solid twist. Nothing more to really add.

Meh. I was kinda digging it at first, but as soon as Satan called this went downhill fast. Pretty straightforward, maybe this needs a twist? I don't know. Not terrible, but it definitely could be better. Solid effort.

Neat idea, good for you for coming up with it. The first half was strong, it's a terrific setup. The God stuff turns a bit too on the nose for me though, and the Satan follow up was a little too bland. It seems like he dies in the end, but it might be more effective if he just knows what his fate is, and that's all he has to look forward to, much like the death row inmate.

Very Twilight Zone. I liked this one.

Adam gets phone calls from God and Satan. What’s so special about a murdering low-life like Adam? Is it that God and Satan have decided to take the gloves off and are now fighting each other over every soul? What if the accused, Samuel, isn’t another low-life, but a special guy worth God’s effort to save him? But that’s a story for another, much longer, script.

Okay, having read these pages, now.

Here's my takeaway:

Extra points for creativity.

In terms of the actual story, damn good right out of the gate, then lost a bit of steam towards the end here.  The twist was ok, could be better. All that aside, It feels like a variation of a story that's been done before.  Good effort.

All the best,

Ghost

Hi writer,

Strange twist of fate for Adam, the twist being Jesus died for our sins, yet God decides Adam must suffer for his sins… who is Adam to God? Just me thinking out loud.

Satan should have farmed his torment out to a collection agency… calling Adam relentlessly, day and night, driving him insane, even if he changes his number, every phone he passes will ring off the hook till he answers, and the message is always the same… you owe a debt, and we intend to collect.

Imaginative effort, best of luck.