This had a Poltergeist vibe for some reason. Tough theme to digest, always will be I guess, no matter how many layers you add; a lost child is a dark story.

If we take into consideration that Oscillating Coils and fields (metal detectors) are all around us, even at a traffic light to determine if a vehicle is waiting for a green… then Lucy could talk to ‘Daddy’ from beyond wherever he goes, then this short could in actuality be fleshed out to a full-blown feature, a race against time to locate his daughter in a large dystopian concrete and steel jungle… call it the Magnetic City, or... y'know.

Anyway, like I said, tough theme, and sad, but handled well in the finale, because he never did find her. That being, it was all a dream… and there’s still hope she might be found alive. Well done, best of luck.

A little The Lovely Bones... a little Titanic but all great story.

My only gripe is one of the descriptions was a little difficult to read:

Quoted Text The light from the rest of the cabin bleeds inside the room, with only one window that faces away from the sun and creates a shadowy darkness that fills the space.

It felt more like directions to the cinematographer than part of the story.

Other than this... Well done.

Thanks for a good read.

-Jordan