Cool title page, really liked that. Not much to say, I enjoyed this one. Short and sweet, I knew what was coming as soon as Boomer and Betty started to strip their uniforms and walk into the sunset, maybe there would be a way in rewrite to not be too on the nose with them being "dead" as by the end, it played out exactly as I thought it was going to.

The writing was good and well paced, I like the descriptions you gave as it painted a full picture.

Great job on entering and good luck.

From the comments, I thought this would've done better than it did. Just goes to show....

Okay, so the formatting was f@cked. I didn't have my laptop and had to make do with Word. Did I get bashed for that? Probably.

Kham - Wordy and overwritten? Well, okay.
LC - What was the point of mentioning medals at the end because they were all dead? Johnny survived. Or did you mean something else?

I'm surprised nobody mentioned the lack of page numbers too. That was prime cannon fodder for the format police.

Loved the OWC. Thanks, Don!

Yep, daft comment of mine. Ignore.

This got an Excellent from me. Was my absolute favorite.
Hope it gets picked up, John.