Hello writer, off the bat I thought it was strange to be able to withdraw 14k from an ATM, maybe change it to a box of cash hidden somewhere or include a bank scene, kinda threw me a bit with that one.

I feel this script was missing something, it didn't have any type of antagonist to hinder the search as we as the reader were just along for a straight forward treasure hunt.

the writing was good and flowed nicely, I really enjoyed your dialogue and added well to the script.

Good job and best of luck.

Thanks to all for the notes. As always, everyone immediately drills down to the fine points of the problems in a script.

I'm going to take the notes and do a rewrite. Without the constraints of the parameters, and with everyone's help, I think I can make this a MUCH better short.

Will share when it's done.

Paul