Feels like quite a bit wedged into a couple of pages.

I bet the author struggled to make cuts and whittle this down.

Good payoff, but a bit convoluted to get there, and a budget that is way out of sync with a couple of pages.

Got it after a couple of reads, nice job, good twist at the end.
Well done

Meets the challenge for sure.

My problem was way too much exposition in the dialogue - these characters are telling each other things they already know

Interesting concept and twist, but the dialog is VERY on the nose. Also not sure the title really fits.

Still, this is a  decent entry. Good work.

So, I liked the twist, a bit 'They Live' crossed with 'V' but if she's reptilian why encourage him to kill the lizards?

Some of the writing and descriptions are a little clunky and could be improved, e.g. near-future tablet, you state were just after Covid, so you could easily just say tablet and leave it at that.

Not sure this all hangs together but it's an inventive attempt.

Good job, writer. I must be a little slow as I was totally taken off guard with wifey being reptilian (or alien). Like others said, OTN, but for two pages I can let that slide...a little. Good stuff.

Great job writer!

Not a great fan of Sci-Fi but this one pulled out all stops for 2 pages.

Great twist and well written

A fair amount of background to take in for a 2-pager with exposition left to do the heavy lifting. I like the parallel of them both working towards a similar goal but for very different ends - that's an interesting angle.  An okay twist but it does feel like the set-up to a bigger idea.

At first I thought this new pandemic turned people into reptiles, and that maybe those lizards Gordon was watching was in fact humans already turned and he just didn't know. But alas, it's just aliens.

Actually a neat idea, but I have an issue with it. If anything, shouldn't she feel an affinity for the lizards since she herself is reptilian? She speaks out about the human apes, which suggests reptiles stick up for one another, no? Between that and the last line of dialogue, it just doesn't quite gel for me. But yes, a cool idea.

Okay, that was different.  So Barbara is a reptilian creature. Is Gordon as well?  Why wouldn’t they just do away with their fellow reptilians so they can develop the land?  And why would reptilians want to develop the land?  Are they creatures from another planet?  Who is Barbara talking to on the communicator?  As you can see, I have a lot of questions and I feel like I should at least have some of these answered by the script.  But you definitely have a twist at the end, that’s for sure. Pretty good job overall.

So off the wall it had me enthralled.

I really love when we're given something futuristic and a bit cockeyed.
I wasn't expecting that reveal.

Nice work.

Honestly, I guessed from the logline this was going to be about aliens trying to get rid of humans simply because it reminded me of the first short script I ever wrote on Simply Scripts called Altered Perspective, which has been optioned twice now but still hasn't turned into a produced film, grrr!

Anyway, that isn't your fault, it just reminded me so much of that script I could see where it was heading, but I didn't expect a lizard person!

Nicely written. a little reliant on exposition to get the story across but you only had 2 pages so that's understandable.

Okay, great ending. Could be a little more subtle with some of the exposition but I'm nitpicking. Worth the read for the ending alone.

I think the writing is better than the idea on this one.

It feels complete in a way other scripts I've read from the challenge don't, but I just didn't neessarily feel anything. The core idea feels too thin.

The problem is there's a disconnect between where the dialogue is driving and the main idea (the irony Gordon isn't aware of).

I'd be keen to see your other work, because the writing is accomplished, and makes me think you're capable of some good stuff.

Great little story.  With a touch of humour in the end.  It does remind me of the TV series Invasion.  Whereby the aliens took over the town inhabitants one by one.