Great opener, interesting setting, nice work there.

I wish there was more to the twist. It reminded me of the conspiracy theory where people believe that there are reptilians impersonating humans, and that's not a bad thing. What's neat about this for me, is that it could be edited to be more comedic, or edited to be more sinister.

Good stuff, hoping for more~

Thank you for the reads and the feedback. This story didn't click with everyone, but given how little time I had to work on it I'm just glad it clicked with anybody. It's roughly based on the admonition moms will give kids messing with an animal's nest... "How'd you like it if they did that to your house?"

As for not needing the last line, I don't think it would make any sense without the final dialog. Or do you mean dropping just the last sentence?

"Scenic apartment" would have been clearer as "apartment with a view".

Though obviously not spelled out in any detail, Gordon and the rest of humanity are suffering through a series of outbreaks and pandemics that make it seem like the world is out to kill them. No, it's just an extraterrestrial real estate developer who should have looked at the property before signing a mortgage, and now is trying to eliminate the humans since they can't simply be relocated. In this setting they've gotten past Covid-19, then gotten past AV21 (whatever that is), maybe other unmentioned maladies, and are in the midst of another pandemic. I envisioned Zika being the first artificial plague, but doing further research the timing doesn't work.

While it was important for Barbara to be reptilian to make the "How'd you like it...?" bit work, there's no reason for her to empathize with the lizards. She probably doesn't even empathize with her own species.

NRS and UBT are taken from the "worse than AIDS" epidemics mentioned in Demolition Man.

This can definitely use some cleaning up with a little extra space, if nothing else get rid of some of that on-the-noseness. I'd like to make Gordon's interaction with the drone and tablet a bit more like five-years-from-now (but still filmable with drones and tablets that exist today, controlled from off-screen), and make Gordon's slide from impatient passivity to active meddler more clear. Hopefully there's a way to wedge in the idea that he's definitely human and has been waiting impatiently for a couple days, not weeks or months.

During all that, I need to make sure that the logline and all of Barbara's lines retain their double meanings.

nice one, Frank - I thought it was great, right up my alley.

Nice one, Frank. You got my highest score.

Quoted from Matthew Taylor nice one, Frank - I thought it was great, right up my alley.

Quoted from Warren Nice one, Frank. You got my highest score.

Thanks guys for the kind words, it means a lot.

This is a much better reception than my first-sound entries usually get