A lovely setup, and crisp writing. You just ran out of pages so there is no ending. It certainly didn't have enough to make it a horror. As it stands, this claim of a curse by a crazy homeless person is simply that, a claim. We needed to see (and hear) the curse at least start to come true.

The writing was great, the characters were real, the homeless lady was creepy as hell.

But the story is just a crazy ladies ramblings, would have preferred something more substantial to show the curse/evil soul thing was real and it will no haunt them - I didn't feel for them as I did;t see anything to suggest it was anything more than the ramblings of a crazy person.

Still, great atmosphere and great job

Right off the top you hit us with a character description: Junkies for hard rock music.

My reaction -- I wish you'd show us that, instead of tell us that. Then, you establish that with character actions immediately. Point is... you DID show us. That in mind, consider dropping the descriptive line. It's a bit of a cheat, and you rocked it without it.

Small thing, but it stood out.

Moving on... this was great.

Excellent use of the middle finger. Very imaginative.

I'll agree that it could use some punch at the end. The setup was so good, it deserves more at the end.

Very well written, great dialogue, nice visuals but damp squib ending. But this has been the best of a great bunch so far.
Well done.

This read well, and I know nothing of rock music, bit sounded 'right'

But it seemed to peter out towards the end.

Liked it though

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Congrats, Rob!

Congrats!

Nice!

Good one, Rob!

Very much looking forward to seeing this one.

I revised the ending based on the feedback I got. Thanks to everyone.

Nice one, Rob. Congrats

Zing! $$$ well done!