Thrilled To Kill by Sick Bastard - A happily married serial killer couple talk about the ins and outs of their hobby.  Short, Comedy, Mockumentary

I am loving the humour and satire in these mockumentaries.


SPOILERS below:




They pick up the jogger, carry him to their car where Brad
trips, drops the jogger who hits his head on the pavement.


KAREN
Our first one was so disappointing.
He was dead before we even got
home. Such a waste.

Brad nods in agreement.

Haha! Cracked me up.  

Much more echo friendly than an
incinerator.

Eco, (typo), but we get it.

KAREN
A win win for the planet. One less
human without leaving a big carbon
footprint.

Ha! Serial killers who care about their effect on the climate.

A couple of typos here and there, and this:

Brad and Karen
does America.

Brad and Karen
do? America.

Really enjoyably off the air and entertaining.
Nice job, writer!

A good story with decent writing. Although, the execution felt impassive in regards to the subject matter. The typical killer life satires are ad nauseam even then they are fun to read.

But sadly, this one did not connect to me as a full-on mockumentary. Just my opinion.

Good luck.

Fairly easy to read and humorous to hear them so casually discuss the killings. Also liked the eco-friendly part. I do wish there was more story unfolding as it's being narrated, if that makes sense, leading to a confluence of events that pulls us more into it. But it's all in how one approaches a mockumentary I guess.

An easy read for me. I'm old, so to me there were times when I could hear, maybe even visualize, Robert Downey JR as the narrator. From NBK...

I particularly liked that their biggest advertiser was Clorox.  

Good job!

A bit over the top on this one.  I mean all of these are  a bit over the top, but this one really commits to the utter insanity of it all, where we're making YouTube stars out of serial killers, who aren't recognized at all for being famous -- a real oddity nowadays!

Still, a bit of humor to be had here.  The idea of getting aroused from killing is not a new idea, but I think it is used effectively here.  Not sure it felt so much like a mockumentary as it did an interview show, but overall not a bad job here.  Took what would otherwise be horrible people and turned them into a fun couple so great job.  Best of luck.

I think more could be made of the YouTube element here, pursuit of subscriber growth through ever more extreme kills sort of thing,

But I did like this one, funny in places and feels like we'll see this in 2022

Good job

This one is pretty dark! Definitely right up my alley. The comedy was so-so for me. Laughed at the arousal part. Lol

The writing is good here. Had no issues following along. A quick and easy read.

The ending is a bit disappointing. Maybe you could hint that the couple will target the documentary crew next?

Good effort.

This one was straight forward.

So a horror. It surely is a mockumentary as it's all about the interview.

I'm thinking there was a lot of small action there at the beginning that pulled me out of the read. Especially on page two. But then it stopped to my relief. Don't know if it's a bad thing, I probably do that too, but it pulled me out.

I wish there was more to them being different killer-wise. I mean - is it the documening their kills angle that makes them different or torturing for hours before killing them?
It's still a fun read. Don't mind me please. I couldn't finish one so I"m cranky

Considering the subject matter, this was good fun and a really easy read. Really decent writing on display here.

Good work!

Definitely fits the challenge with a bit of quality humor too. A couple of the cuts seemed a bit off for me but easily rectified. Overall, really well done.

Good work, writer!

Hi writer,

Another that really nailed the challenge. some great 'dark' humour throughout and a pretty solidly written piece. It did read a bit awkwardly in a few spots but that may just be me.

The ending was a little anticlimactic in my opinion, I'm not sure I have much to suggest but I think it would be worth reworking after the challenge to give it a little more bite.

Good job overall though.

All the best.

Funny idea.

Would be interesting to know how the interviewer found these two.

Something that didn't jive with me was Karen and Brad trusting the interviewer would blur out their faces in the edit. IMO if they wore masks it would be more believable.

Good effort...just needs a bit more work. I liked it though.

I wanted to like this one. I saw the "American Psycho" aspect (the book more than the movie) of it, but I really wish you would've used up the rest of your pages in order to expand this a little bit. You moved so quickly that we never really got to savor any of it. The story itself was fine and I had no qualms about the dialogue. It was fine, when it should've been more.

Yes, this one is mine. Thanks all who took the time to read and comment.

I will rewrite this one since I kind of wrote it with the idea of me possibly filming it myself.

I also started a second one for the OWC, but didn't finish. It was going to be the same style of mockumentary, but about a couple who have really embraced the zero carbon lifestyle. Taken it to the extreme. Perhaps I'll finish that one as well when I get in the mood or channeling Greta Thunberg. Pronounced toonberg, btw...