Terrapin Station by Leonardo Donatello - A community fundraising event for terrapin conservation ends up revealing secrets about everyone involved.  Short, Comedy, Mockumentary

The story has a different setting which I appreciate and also it has its funny moments.

The writing was also decent with just a few minor typos. Other than that, I really enjoyed it.

Good luck.

Writer,

This started off well. You had your characters in place, and a lot of comedic moments could have come of it, but just never did. It’s like the boxer who never lands the knockout punch. Well written, funny in places, but your ending was easy to see coming. Me? As if you’d care, but I would have had the beagle tear than damn turtle apart! But that’s just me.

Fine effort!

Steve

This was another of those misdirection type shorts that make you think you’re going in one direction and you wind up going another way. Like the references to the Grateful Dead and the way you allowed Jim Bob to be put in his place by having Cherry and Geraldine get together at the end.

The humor was subtle but pleasant and the story worked for me so good effort here.

This has the tone of a more gentle comedic piece than the others I've read so far.

Subtle, clever, witty - loved it!

Witty, charming with a few typos. Painted the world well. Good use a bit more story/structure if you decide to go further. Good job imo.

Well, as someone who lives in Florida, I would say you painted a great picture of this place. Maybe a tad exaggerated, but I recognized all (I think) of the little details.  

Perfect script to read on this sunny Sunday morning. Loved it! Can't wait to see who wrote it.

Great job!

PS: I'm pretty sure it's tie-dye.

I enjoyed this. Nice and easy read although the regular camera directions took me out of the story a bit. Wasn't really any laugh out loud moments for me but I really liked the overall feel to it.

Good stuff!

Firstly, I can't believe it has been 26 years. Man, I'm getting old.

A very cute mockumentary. Well done on meeting the challenge! Only a couple under-the-breath chuckles but a nice little story.

Good job, writer!

it's a mockumentary on a quiet side. Not over the top crazy, actually not crazy at all which is not a good thing.

I think it stands out in the competition in terms of a genre as it's a different type of mockumentary.

The reveal wasn't anything mind blowing but worked. I just think that you could maybe shorten it.

A bit many characters for me, some a dormant, probably just for my tastes.

Now, not everyone is a fan of cuties like this one I think.

at some places the flow was disruptive for me - for example at the very beginning - he said something about Jerry, but then it went to Liz and her mate.

Hi writer,

I really enjoyed this one, you nailed the brief IMO.

Great characterization, and really well written in general.

The humour worked for me.

Not much else to add here, great work!

All the best.

A good one here. Nothing laugh out loud funny, but I was smiling all the way through.

Nailed the challenge. Writing is top-notch. I expect this one to be a contender.

Great work.

I enjoyed the dialogue in this one, but I found the story to be a bit lacking. It did a good job with the Mockumentary aspect and my personal feelings on the story not being right for me don't take away from the fact that this was well-written.

There were quite a few grammatical errors, but my score didn't lower due to them.