Interesting take on the prompt. I like the dark ending. I like the whole idea. The dialog was just okay for me. It had it's good moments but maybe was too much after a while. But I did really like the idea.

The writing is a bit dense though. Your action lines need a lot of work. They need to be broken up and trimmed. Page one was rough.  The introduction of Rob...how are you going to convey all of that on screen? We're going to just know by watching that scene that he should of been a cop? And we're going to know that car is Rob's style?  Your descriptions have to be something we can see.

Rob says Mikey's name WAY TOO MUCH. When you're talking to someone, how often to you actually say their name in conversation? Probably none.

So for me, story idea was good but needed better execution in several departments.

Really need to break up that first action block.

Definitely needs some work as far as the writing goes, or at the very least a good edit.

That said the story was quite enjoyable and met the requirements of the challenge, pretty decent dialogue as well.

Not bad.

Thanks for the input everyone! I had a lot of fun with the challenge~

I went for a lot of figurative language in this script.
The title, "Clean Slate" is a reference to a fresh start as well as being a slab of rock; rock bottom, the childhood rock story, etc.
The characters were dealing with their own dead-ends along with the literal one.
Mikey says, "you're killing me." perhaps too OTN, but inspired by a Sopranos episode.
Another OTN one was Rob wanting to take Church st. (real streets, of course)


Addressing Feedback:

Fais - Thank you

irish eyes - Thank you, all of it was rushed, I wish I could have expanded more, but I wrote it on the last day.

Dave - Thank you, edited down the opener.
I imagined the characters at figurative "dead-ends" on top of the literal one at the end.

JE - Yes, newer writer, thank you.

jwent - Thank you

LC - Thank you
Added some visuals.
I noticed in The Sopranos that they say each other's names a lot when having a heart-to-heart and went for that kind of vibe, may have overdone it.

Ben - Thank you

Greg - Thank you, was going for a little "wise-guy" with Rob.

Anthony - Thank you

Gabe - Thank you

Spqr - Thank you

Arundel - Thank you

Mark - Thank you
I did worry about the black or white addiction issue.
I wanted it to seem like Mikey was a spoiled brat and this was his new thing.
I added some dialogue to reflect that.

Geezis - Haha. Thank you

Marnie - Thank you
I added the cop and style lines for imagination/casting/costume purposes.
I've always enjoyed lines like:
"He probably doesn't work with his hands" or "...that's how he likes it."
Maybe just my own personal preference. (too much Vince Gilligan)

Warren - Thank you

Thanks again, looking forward to the next one~