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Here is the first batch of October, 2010 One Week Challenge Scripts. There were around 40 scripts received. I'll be posting five to six at a time every six to eight hours or so. The postings will be somewhat random. If you have submitted a script, you should have received a confirmation from me.
The first six are here:
Hoodie by Christopher Bohlsen (kurisuborosen) - Short, Horror - Tom and Jenny hear a knock at the door one night. Outside is a man waring a hoodie. - pdf, format
Pumpkinseeds by Darren J Seeley (darrenjamesseeley) - Short, Horror - A wheelchair bound man and his best friend are kidnapped by the witch Baba Yaga. They all go for a little death ride in her newly acquired walking house. - pdf, format
The Zombotard by Gary Murphy (murphy) - Short, Horror - An abandoned house provides a perfect hide out for two bank robbers on the run, until that is, a surprise dinner guest interrupts their plans. - pdf, format
Tomorrow II: Dusklight by R. E. McManus (rendevous) - Short, Horror - Hugh's back. Sore. Goes home. To a dump with an auld man in it. It ain't gonna be pretty. - pdf, format
One Stormy Night by Matt Layden (the usual suspect) - Short, Horror - Frank and Daniel hide out in an abandoned house preparing to leave a town they scammed when a little girl pays them a visit. - pdf, format
Three On A Match by Phil Clarke Jr. (dogglebe) - Short, Horror - All killers are not created equal. - pdf, format
A Very Manly Boo-Day by Michael Cornetto (mcornetto) - Short, Horror - Sometimes the things that frighten us can hold valuable but painful lessons, it all depends on how far you are able to stretch yourself in order to accommodate them. - pdf, format
Credit Where Due by Shawn Davis (ledbetter) - Short, Horror - An old man, an old house. Both condemned to be forever forgotten. But for one last night, he returns in order to set history straight. - pdf, format
Devil's Night by Michael K. Snyder - Short, Horror - On a dark and stormy night three travelers breakdown outside an abandoned house. Soon, each of them find out that something very sinister resides there. - pdf, format
The Life Thief by Eric Napolitan - Short, Horror - no logline - pdf, format
Demons by Mario Perrotta - Short, Horror - A pair of ghost hunters encounter a strange presence inside an old house, prompting one of them to take a drastic step to rid the house of this presence. - pdf, format
Glass Rain by Julio Weigend (reaper creeper) - Short, Horror - A brother's been fatally mutated due to his sister's dabbling into the occult. What is to be done? - pdf, format
Shadows by Malcom Bowman (scoob) - Short, Horror - A brother and sister extract their revenge on the man who abused them as children - but all is not what it seems... - pdf, format
Cleansed by Steve McDonell (stevie) - Short, Horror - A man finds that the past can come back to haunt you. Especially on October thiry first. - pdf, format
Turned by Kenneth P Matovu - Short, Horror - She is determined to stay alive to see her 18th birthday but will the 'Things' let her. It's a story about a night a family is killed by cannibals called the 'Things'. - pdf, format
Killing Albert Einstein by Tim Ratcliffe (trojan) - Short, Horror - A young couple experience a night they'll never remember when summoned by an eccentric genius to an old, abandoned house. - pdf, format
The Old House by Rob Grotnick - Short, Horror - Three teenagers try to survive the night at a house haunted by evil clowns. - pdf, format
Requiem aeternam dona eis, Domine by Gabriel Moronta (mr. ripley) - Short, Horror - Three ghost hunters prowl the night for ghosts. They recieve more than what they were bargaining for. - pdf, format
The Thirty-First by Nathaniel Zignego - Short, Horror - no logline - doc, format
To Know by James Williams (jwent668 - Short, Horror - The adulterous wife of a psychotic crime boss learns a few things about death when he sends her and her lover on an errand. - pdf, format
Watching by Stephen Brown (stebrown) - Short, Horror - Ryan wakes to find himself lying in the decaying bedroom of a derelict house with no idea how he got there. Unfortunately for Ryan, that's just about the best the night has in store for him... - pdf, format
I think mine got disqualified. I know why, though. One of the three characters in my story was 10-years old. Oh, well. It's probably for the best, anyway. It was a mess. Lol. =)
I'm waiting for him to finish the OWC so I can submit a feature...
Yeah. I want to throw 'Mallory's Friend' up...and maybe one of my full lengths. I'll laugh myself crazy if I finish re-writing (and expanding) my OWC into feature length by the time the submission process is back into gear.
Chastity by Trent Carroll (theboywonder) - Short, Horror - A young man, Johnny, falls under the spell of the beautiful Chastity, only to be swept into a dark world of torturous love. - pdf, format
The Unconquered by Khamanna Iskandarova (khamanna) - Short, Horror - A young girl and her disabled boyfriend have to spend a night in a house known to awaken evil in the living. - pdf, format
You Can Never Leave by George Willson (tubkas) - Short, Horror - Chris stumbles into an old house for help and finds himself trapped. - pdf, format
A Hollow Hallow's Eve by Josh Geishert (violent josh) - Short, Horror - It's a dark and stormy night and Melinda is stranded. Luckily, what she always thought was an abandoned mansion appears to have a bit of life. - pdf, format
Untitled by Brian K. Millard - Short, Horror - A police constable confronts a papraplegic professor regarding his involvement in a series of grizzly murders along the English countryside. - pdf, format
Hey Guys -- I have been too busy to read this new stuff as I would like -- or even monitor the threads, actually.
There is no trouble brewing anywhere, right?
From what I can tell, even our resident bad-boys are offering up solid critiques that are light on the pepper. Nice to see.
Please drop the mods a note if something gets out of hand -- we'll try to stay on top of it before it snowballs into something unpalatable.
And if any of you guys are really serious about dipping into a rewrite now that page and time limits are off -- drop me a PM and I will try to drop you some notes.
First post ever on Simply Scripts, hoping you'll allow me to stick around...
I'd like to start off by apologizing twice, first for the lack of a title on my OWC entry. I've been prepping to film a short for the past few weeks now, so that's taken up the majority of my writing time. I finally had a chance to take a break from my prep work, on a slow Friday at the office, but in going through all of my scripts in progress I couldn't find any inspiration to work on any of them. Nor could I come up with anything new. So, I popped onto SS to peruse the script section, looking for anything that could jump start my brain, and I happened upon this awesome challenge and thought I'd give it a shot. This was 2 PM on Friday the 15th, the due date... For whatever reason, titles do not come to me easily, so rather than sit around trying to come up with one, I decided to invest all the time that I had to the actual story. Also, I have noticed a trend in the unproduced script section that suggested the logline would be more important than the title, as far as earning people's trust and getting reads. Still no "excuse" to not have a title, but that is the "explanation" and I apologize. It will not happen again.
I would also like to apologize for not having reviewed/replied to any of the other OWC entries as of yet, though I assure you, I have read all of batches 1 through 4 so far. In reading the general thoughtful follow up posts to each script in the OWC (as well as in the unproduced scripts section in general) it appears to me that most of the folks on here sort of know one another. You've built a rapport, read each other's work, possibly even collaborated in the past. I felt it would be disrespectful to you all if I were to chime in as some newb outsider who had yet to even post a script. I'm also a little shy... You know, new people. But, now that this script is up and starting to get a few reads, I'm sure I'll soon be comfortable enough to go back and start commenting on some of the unique, interesting, bizzare and quite good OWC entries that I've read so far.
Thank you for taking the time to be bothered with me and I look forward to gradually becoming a more active member on this board.
Genre: Horror Theme: It was a dark and stormy night Limitations: You only have three human actors - two male and one female. (adults who can play between the ages of 18 to 80). One male is in a wheelchair. All events must occur sometime between October 30th to November 1st. You can't use the word Halloween. Everything occurs in and around an abandoned, rundown house. You can do anything to the house, except burn it down. You must write a script (properly formatted) between 6 and 10 pages. No more, no less (courier 12 point font).
You guys are f#cking hillarious. (Poor Don. Some of you guys owe him a bottle of wine for Christmas, or something.)
Don's clarifications (largely grouped by subject): - What happens on that dark and stormy night is entirely up to you. Re: You're giving us a really narrow theme. dogglebe - Deserted house you can't burn down. Re: Can you at least allow us one more location besides the abandoned/rundown house? screenrider - Deserted house you can't burn down. Re: Where is the rundown house located? The middle of nowhere? Suburbia? Can we put it where ever we want? Nixon - Deserted house you can't burn down. Re: How about you get to use an old deserted prison as well? Dreamscale - Deserted house. Re: Deserted IHOP or Hamburger Hamlet? dogglebe & Dreamscale - You can't burn the house down. Re: Can you set fire to the house in any way other than a fireplace? Mr. Blonde - Clarification Re: Can we burn up the wheelchair, or at least the rubber wheels on the wheelchair? Or is it alright if 1 of the character's eyebrows catch on fire at 1 point in the script? Dreamscale - Everything occurs in and around an abandoned, rundown house. Re: When you say "in and around the house", how around are we talking? Only the property line, and if so, how do you determine that? What if we write an abandoned house on a 25-acre plot of land including a private lake? Would it count? Mr. Blonde - It doesn't. It can be barren and uninhabited. Here, this should help clarify things. Re: Why does the house have to be in the desert? Shelton - No, you don't have to do anything to the house if you don't want to. Re: Since you said "you can", "anything" includes "nothing" right? I mean do I have to do something to the house at all? khamanna - You are the screenwriter only. You will not be directing or producing the script. Re: CGI? mcornetto - Yes. Effects are within the budget. Re: Are effects within budget? mcornetto - Yes, but don't go crazy with it. Re: Can special effects be employed to duplicate characters, such as used in The Prestige and Moon? RayW - It's horror. Re: Can it be comedy/light horror? Baltis- - It's horror. Didn't say I couldn't LOL. Re: Can't be funny at all? If you laugh even One time it won't meet the requirements? Baltis- - No children. Re: Are they children or can we make them adults? Baltis- - How you use or don't use your talent is entirely up to you. In short, you have a pool of three actors. Two male and one female. One male is in a wheel chair. How you use them or don't use them is up to you. Re: Do we have to include all three characters? I know the boy in the wheelchair is a must, what about the other two? Coding Herman - You have three actors. Two males. One Female. One male is in a wheelchair. How you use your actors is up to you. Re: Can the three people be zombies? How about just the guy in the wheelchair? stevie - You have three actors. Two male, one female. The male actor is in a wheelchair. How you use your actors is entirely up to you. Re: How the heck does the guy in a wheelchair get into a rundown/abandoned house? If it's so rundown then chances are there's no wheelchair ramp. screenrider - You have three actors. How you use them is up to you. Re: Don, it's three characters only, correct? No more, no less? Mr. Blonde - You have three actors. How you use them is up to you. Re: You mean, like, up the butt? Shelton -There are three actors. There are two males and one female. How you use them is up to you. Please note that I've modified the requirements (for the n'th time) to specifically indicate that the three actors are human. If you have any other questions regarding this, please reference this. Re: When you said we have up to 3 characters between 18-80, that shouldn't preclude non humans. Are you now saying we cannot include any non humans into our horror script? Dreamscale - A total first. You have three actors. Two actors are males. They have penises. One actor is a female. She does not have a penis. She has a 'sideways smile'. One male actors with a penis can not walk. He sits in a wheel chair. The three actors are human. How you use them is up to you. Re: What about half-humans? Are you now saying we cannot have an antag that is not human? screenrider & Dreamscale - You have three actors. The actors are human. Re: I too have an animal in my script, he has quite an important part too. Murphy - The male actor is in a wheelchair. Re: Maybe he doesn't become wheelchair bound till the second page? stevie - No, I said, You have three (3) actors. How you use them is up to you. Re: We cannot have any other sort of character to play the role of antag, meaning no creatures, monsters, demons, animals, or ghosts. Dreamscale - Your actors are human. How you use them is up to you. Re: You said they all had to be human, meaning no non human characters. You said no whales, no rats, all human. Did you not? Dreamscale - Updated the limitations to the theme, "three human actors..." Re: ...the Sperm whale... Dreamscale - No, I said, there are three human actors. I did not say three human characters. Re: Three human actors = three human characters*. DarrenJamesSeeley (Ray's note: Many people seem to have great difficulty distinguishing between ACTORS and CHARACTERS.) - You can't use the word "Halloween". Re: We can't mention "Halloween"...but...what about Samhain ???? DarrenJamesSeeley
Ray, you got some extra time on your hands, huh? WOW!
Lettuce just say you and me get to the same place by different means.
Quoted from dogglebe
WTF, Ray.... Use this energy and time to write something. A script, perhaps.
It's entirely possible that either you work slower than I do or that I work faster than you do. Most people can take a two hour job and string it out to eight hours. I'll take a two hour job and burn it down to under an hour and screw off for the remaining seven plus hours. Cheers, Phil!
Jeebus, Ray, how long did that post take? Leave it to you to data-mine an OWC. Well, maybe SS needs an official archivist.
O. M. G. You guys are so sofffft! Maybe... twenty minutes? Scroll, copy and paste. Scroll, copy and paste. Scroll, copy and paste. Oooooo! I'm so tired. I need a grande latte and a government sanctioned thirty minute break. Where's my acupuncturist? I can't handle all of these copy and pastings! Where's my xanex! Where's my midol! Ahhh!!! Ahhhh!!! Ahh-ha ha ha! You're killin' me.
No. Really. You are.
Quoted from Baltis.
Ray, you also forget the time when Don said "Good catch" ... As he had not clearly stated, at the time, children couldn't be included. I asked 2 very good questions. And one that actually shed light for others.
I didn't forget. - No children. Re: Are they children or can we make them adults? Baltis-
It was a very good catch. Yes, it did shed light on others, as did most of these.
Ray, you also forget the time when Don said "Good catch" ... As he had not clearly stated, at the time, children couldn't be included. I asked 2 very good questions. And one that actually shed light for others. And I'm Jewish so I'd get him a bottle of Manischewitz for like the 3rd day of Hanukkah
I would like to thank Ray for including me at the very end . I got a little worried. He may have taken what I said out of context and taken a jest as a matter of fact, but that's beside the point. I'm in good company.
Unless of course, this becomes the next five hundred and seventy six response thread. Then I will be a party to it >
The post was composed only after I reviewed the given criteria clarifications before I started reviewing scripts this morning and laughed my a$$ off. I thought the collective "you" were funny as h3ll. So, I thought I'd share it.
Sadly, I think I'm picking up on a p!ssy tone after having posted it. I don't know if it's unwarranted guilty consciences, or what. For a bunch of writers constantly berating each other for "clarity" I often find the great deal of vagaries in replies and accusations irritating.
The list began as simple C&P in chronological order, but as repeated patterns emerged I thought a grouping by subject most useful. Don's answer to your question was near the chronological end and without peer, thus... it's at the end.
I suggest you post a unique question ASAP for the FEB 2011 OWC.
I'd like to thank Ray as well. Why? Good question. I just liked the way the sentence looked when written down.
You, Clint are already party. As am I. Shall we set up a posse and paint a town red. Literally. I think I might enjoy that.
On the more serious note of A minor I've found the scripts for this one to be generally better than before for me. May be for many reasons, or it might just be me.
Anyway. They are. So, well done. Like my dinner was. I'm rubbish at cooking. Why the fuck do I live ten miles from the nearest takeaway? I'll be like Rooney when he joins City - scared of going out in town and definitely not ordering a take out. Not unless he wants to give his guts a clear out.
Hell's House A.K.A. Devil's Home by Veselin Stoqnov - Short, Horror - Elli, Megan and Selena are on a road trip. But what happens when they shelter themselves in an abounded house near the road? - pdf, format
Honest Fear by Chad Murtaugh (yosemitesam) - Short, Horror - Sometimes people are just crazy, and they do bad things as a result. - pdf, format
Widow's Walk by Brett Martin (electric dreamer) - Short, Horror - A woman struggles against a demon from her past. - pdf, format
Figments by Gary Rademan (grademan) - Short, Horror - Three military personnel battle miniature beasts called Figments with horrifying results. - pdf, format
Satan's Secret Surprise by Greg Baldwin (greg) - Short, Horror - A young possessed couple turns to sacrificial Satanism to rid themselves of their inner demons. - pdf, format
High Time by Sean Chipman (mr. blonde) - Short, Horror - Three people, while avoiding a virus transmitted by animals, hide out in one of their childhood houses. - pdf, format
An update. Since I accidentally posted a script that fell slightly outside the challenge requirements, I will be posting a couple other scripts that also fell slightly outside the requirements. However, the one requirement: one script per person I will hold to. Additional scripts submitted by the same author will get posted after all the OWC scripts are submitted.
Also, open submission will resume after all the OWC scripts are live.
Please post my script. I know I broke a few of the rules but I was following the guidelines posted on the Simply Scripts home page where there is no mention of the character's age. Thanks.
Please post my script. I know I broke a few of the rules but I was following the guidelines posted on the Simply Scripts home page where there is no mention of the character's age. Thanks.
Never, sprout! This would go against our tyrannical ways!!!
Please post my script. I know I broke a few of the rules but I was following the guidelines posted on the Simply Scripts home page where there is no mention of the character's age. Thanks.
Guys, they'll be in the last batch, particularly if you submitted them late (not after the deadline late, just late in the week late. Not late late, just late. Late). Mine's in there too.
Advance warning: mine isn't very good. I nearly didn't submit, before deciding to adopt a "better to have an entry than nothing" position. That's not to say that it isn't an enjoyable six pages, just that I already know the comments it'll get.
So yeah, I'm patiently waiting for my beating!
EDIT: What Don said, basically. Minus the endearing self-deprecation.
Scars by Shawn Anderson (sanderson) - Short, Horror - A boy in a wheelchair offers a man money to carry him to the attic of a supposedly haunted abandoned house, but they are both more than they seem. - pdf, format
Donor by Jon Barton (johnnyboy) - Short, Horror - A boy's best friend is his mother. - pdf, format
Wheelchair Indemnity by Alanna Carlson - Short, Horror - no logline - pdf, format
Black Aggie by Ryan Lee (ryan1) - Short, Horror - A team of investigators ventures into an abandoned convent, supposedly haunted by a former resident known as Black Aggie. - pdf, format
Lettuce just say you and me get to the same place by different means.
It's entirely possible that either you work slower than I do or that I work faster than you do. Most people can take a two hour job and string it out to eight hours. I'll take a two hour job and burn it down to under an hour and screw off for the remaining seven plus hours. Cheers, Phil!
Okey doke. Just trying to cut down on my offensive (as I roll my eyes) number of posts. [expletive, expletive, expletive]
O. M. G. You guys are so sofffft! Maybe... twenty minutes? Scroll, copy and paste. Scroll, copy and paste. Scroll, copy and paste. Oooooo! I'm so tired. I need a grande latte and a government sanctioned thirty minute break. Where's my acupuncturist? I can't handle all of these copy and pastings! Where's my xanex! Where's my midol! Ahhh!!! Ahhhh!!! Ahh-ha ha ha! You're killin' me.
No. Really. You are.
I didn't forget. - No children. Re: Are they children or can we make them adults? Baltis-
It was a very good catch. Yes, it did shed light on others, as did most of these.
As my old Native Amrican friend Ryan Patrick McHugh used to say "The emptiest drum makes the most noise."
A Tale That Wasn't Right by Jeff Bush (dreamscale) - Short, Horror - Old Man Pomeroy's ghost's been hauntin' the area ever' year on Hallowee...well, you know what I mean. Josh and Jael race against an unseen clock in a race against time to end the evil. - pdf, format
Condemned by Ray W - Short, Horror - A vampire does what he can to take care of his eternal family. - pdf, format
A Bad Night by Joe Garza - Short, Horror - Brother and sister meet on an isolated island to go over some old history and get more than they bargained for. - pdf, format
Victim by Gary (abe from la) - Short, Horror - A detective discovers a grisly secret while interrogating a suspect in an abandoned house. - pdf, format
No Trespassing by Ariel (free2write) - Short, Horror - no logline - pdf, format
Just a question - if I had've submitted my pisstake under a fake name, would it have been posted along with my serious one? No biggie, just wondered...
Just a question - if I had've submitted my pisstake under a fake name, would it have been posted along with my serious one? No biggie, just wondered...
Stevie, it depends on whether or not I caught on it was you (or anyone) posting a second script under an assumed name. The rule was, one entry per person, unless you can get away with posting a second script using a fake name and I don't catch it.
I think I've personally hit my fill of reading. If I missed you and you really think I should read your script then please let me know. Otherwise, onto other things for me.
Overall, I would say this turned out to be an excellent OWC and I was especially impressed by how civilised and numerous the reviews turned out to be.
Do you think that had to do with the fact that this OWC wasn't anonymous?
And special thanks to Don for putting it all together. Yay Don!!
IOverall, I would say this turned out to be an excellent OWC and I was especially impressed by how civilised and numerous the reviews turned out to be.
Do you think that had to do with the fact that this OWC wasn't anonymous?
Absolutely, I've torn up some scripts in the OWCs. I couldn't do it knowing who I'm talking to. Makes it more personal. Then I'd see who wrote it and say "shit".
Agreed. Anonymous is the way to go. Makes the reviews more brutally honest, that's for sure. But, I also like guessing who wrote what and that buildup of suspense until the names are revealed.
Agreed. Anonymous is the way to go. Makes the reviews more brutally honest, that's for sure. But, I also like guessing who wrote what and that buildup of suspense until the names are revealed.
When will Don select the script to be presented by iScript?
I knew in the past, Don will email people who participated and let them pick three or four favorites. I didn't participate this time around, but I still want to have a say by picking my favorites.
Anyone got the email yet? Or is Don just gonna select one by himself?
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
I'll never grow up. I was born fully grown. Unfortunately I was also born with fucking Tourettes and the sense of humour of a fourteen year old. The word 'knob' still makes me giggle.
I got the email. I was reading others but I'm just gonna pick now.
You just choose what you think will be best. Obviously mine. Don't worry, I'll pay for my ego in limbo. Should it still exist by the time I get there.
Harumph.
If I was you I'd choose mine. But you could choose Balt's, or DB's, or Johnnyboy's, or whoever. All good. And all votes count.
Florence and Kasabian won tonight. There is a God. And he smiles on those who respect.
There's a drumming sound inside my head Each time that you're around I swear that you can hear it It makes such an almighty sound...
if Kate and Audrey reject me as they have I may just have to focus my attentions on Ms Welsh. Oh yes... What, she has a restraining order on me already? The fucking... clever little tart. Oh dear. I suspect I may go back to delusional posts on SS instead. It's a lot easier than getting arrested all the time outside some bint's gates I tell ya.
I got the email last night. I gave him a list of three.
I hope he doesn't mind, I'll post it:
Quoted from Don
Everyone,
First and foremost, I want to thank you for taking the challenge.
The October One Week Challenge is my favorite challenge of the year. This year did not disappoint. This was the best challenge thus far, not only in terms of the quality of the scripts received, but also the interpretation of the theme and limitations. I also enjoyed to questions (and grief) about the limitations. I hope everyone took my responses in the spirit in which they were intended. I do apologize for any ambiguity in the limitations, e.g., ages of the three actors and the appearance of animals.
I've already read all the scripts and I am going through the process of selecting three to send over to iScript. iScript will select one of the three to audio perform (if I have your permission). I really want to stress that the selected script isn't "The Winner" or necessarily "The Best" script. The selected script is one that I enjoyed reading and most closely fit within the limitations of the challenge.
I would like each of you to let me know which three or so scripts, of the scripts you have read, were your favorites. The usual questions are:
Q: "Can my script be one of the three?" A: Yes, if your script was one of your favorites.
Q: I only read five scripts. You still want my favorites? A: Yes.
Q: I have more (or less) than three favorites A: That is fine, let me know what your favorites are.
Q: One of the scripts I liked didn't fit the criteria. A: I still want to know which are your favorites.
I didn't receive the email since I didn't participate. I guess I'll just PM Don?
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
I put my vote in. I didn't vote for my own script, tactfully, either. I wish everyone luck and hope the script that gets read is deserving of it. I'd probably be beside myself if it was one of the many wasted parody scripts entered. Which I know it won't be, but still...
My votes are in and I regretfully did not vote for my own gem of a script.
I'd probably be beside myself if the winner is an overwritten, generic entry that couldn't actually fit in the 10 page maximum. I doubt it will be, but still...
I didn’t succeed with this challenge, but it’s good to see that it has gone well.
The main reason I didn’t find the time to enter was that I was working on a feature version of my entry into the last OWC. Today I completed polishing up my first draft of a feature script for “Dumb Animals”.
There’s no way I’d have written this if it wasn’t for the OWC, so thanks to Don and everyone else here.
A few pisstakes and whatnot aside, I think I'm done. I noticed today I had missed batch 6 entirely, so if any one else feels gyped PM me and I'll run over your OWC. If it still survives I'll run over it again!
Guh-DUNK! Guh-DUNK!
My God. 45 of 'em, counting the p!ssers.
At this rate, next year's should have an eight page maximum.
I need to finish up a few but largely I'm done. I was impressed with most of the entries, though. I couldn't believe the level of quality some of these scripts were written with in a week. I wish we'd have more of these OWC's because I'd participate in everyone. It was a great way for me to get back in the game since I've got much more time to devote to writing during the winter months I'm ready to have a go at this again.
Got all of them read from the active writers. At least I think. If I missed you then let me know. There were a couple I didn't get to because it didn't look like the author was around so I decided to stop there. Overall these were enjoyable. Probably one of the more well rounded challenges in terms of quality. Maybe the removal of anonymity can be attributed to that?
The removal of anonymity definitely helped. The last OWC was awful! Almost half of the scripts were pissers.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
We've all gotta write a script based on whatever is decided within limits.
If there are strict limits on things then it tends to get way more interesting.
Tobacco advertising in England in the 1980s was a prime example. As they couldn't show the actual pack or someone smoking they had to get inventive. Some of the Silk Cut and Benson & Hedges ads bordered on genius. And I hate adverts but even I'll credit them with that.
If you wanna be a pro writer you have to be able to write whatever is wanted by the producers. Otherwise they'll hire someone else. Then you're back in the dole queue while the replacement will be in the credits with their work on the small or, if lucky, the big screen.
The thing very successful writers and nobodies like me have in common is this: we can both write whatever we want.
The successful pro however earns kudos and millions, while I earn enough to get drunk again. Sometimes I have to get the credit card out too.
I read only about 6 or so of these. Some I didn't comment on. Not because I didn't want to, but rather because I read them on something I couldn't type up a review on. Balt and Greg's come to mind. Of the ones I did read, I thought they were all pretty good. I can see though that it might get boring to read all of them since they might be quite similar given the assignment...
I think all of the entries are contemporary horror. When was wheelchair invented? 'Cause it might add a new twist if the story is set back in the days or in the future.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
It was invented around the sixth century. Although then they probably resembled carts more than modern wheelchairs. I imagine The Ride was also rougher.
Wooden wheels. Mr. Michelin and Dunlop were just glints in their great great etc great grandfather's eyes.
Wow. Forgot I did this and hadn't tacked it on here.
I compiled this for a trope reference for next year. Often people complain/grieve/unduly note too many stories along the same lines, so I wanted to see where the percentiles plopped to give people the opportunity to "consider" something "less utilized" the next go-round.
Assuming you even care, if I categorized your story in the wrong trope (and some were tough to determine) changing them is no big whup.
They're pretty broad categories. Stories listed alphabetically by title.
Ghosts, Haunted Houses, Possessions & Spirits
A Bad Night by Joe Garza Ghost story - intense drama - PG-13 for drinking - Family discussion on ill fated anniversary finds the past coming to haunt them as a ghost.
A Tale That Wasn't Right by Jeff Bush (dreamscale) Ghost story - parody pisstake - R for graphic language, drug use, and sexual innuendo - ghost hunters offer leg bones to pacify WC whaler's ghost.
Black Aggie by Ryan Lee (ryan1) Writer's Choice Killer ghost possession - intense drama - R for graphic violence, nudity and sex - Paranormal investigators find the murderous ghost of a devil worshiping nun.
Condemned by Ray W (rayw) Ghost story - dark humor - PG-13 for bloody & graphic images - WC senior & pregnant woman are sacrificed by vampire to remove ghost and ghoul from house.
Devil's Night by Michael K. Snyder Ghost story - intense drama - Rated R for language and graphic violence - Young people, stranded by vehicle in bad weather, seek shelter in an abandoned house finding it haunted.
Hell's House A.K.A. Devil's Home by Veselin Stoqnov H3ll house - intense drama - PG-13 for scary situation and blood - Teens are trapped, scared & killed by a haunted house.
The House That Roared (link is MIA) by Michael G. Harrop (screenrider) Evil spirit in house - intense drama - PG-13 for intense situation - Teens use ouiga board and stunts to scare another before the real spirit attacks.
House of Malvado by Stephen Wells (steveuk) Submitted to iScript for final selection Writer's Choice Haunted house - teen drama - PG-13 for language and underage smoking - Friends scare the jerk third wheel only to have the real ghost scare them.
Inner Demons by Mario Perrotta (coldsnap) Haunted house - intense drama - PG-13 for spooky images - A wife seeks council from the clergy about the horrific effects a house has on her husband before it expells them all.
The Kline Manor Pledge by Baltis Sinclair Schuller (baltis) Writer's Choice Haunted house - intense drama - R for blood and gore - Frat pledge, girl and WC bum are killed by a ghost in an abandoned mansion.
No Trespassing by Ariel (free2write) Evil spirit in house - intense drama - PG-13 for bloody scenes - kids in an abandoned house are persecuted by the evil spirit that haunts it.
The Old House by Rob Grotnick (Ryan1) Ghost story - dark farce - PG-13 for disturbing images - Teens find out the rumors of midnight clown ghosts are not only true but they're also homocidal ghost clowns.
One Stormy Night by Matt Layden (the usual suspect) Ghost story - intense drama - PG-13 for bloody violence - Thug pair are perplexed by a little girl that just won't die.
Requiem aeternam dona eis, Domine by Gabriel Moronta (mr. ripley) Ghost posession - spooky drama - PG-13 for violence - Friends are possessed by body hopping, violent ghosts.
Satan's Secret Surprise by Greg Baldwin (greg) Human sacrifice to summon Satan - intense drama - R for language and graphic violence - WC senior sacraficed to remove mutation of lovers.
To Know by James Williams (jwent6688 ) Spook house - intense drama - R for graphic violence and language - Couple trapped in haunted house, WC man killed first.
The Unconquered by Khamanna Iskandarova (khamanna) Good ghosts - uplifting drama - PG-13 for blood - A ghost couple resist allowing a corruptive haunted house from consuming more souls.
Victim by Gary (abe from la) Killer spirit possession - intense drama - PG-13 for subject and frightening images - Police interrogate a witness to murders disscovering he's possessed by a witch's spirit.
Widow's Walk by Brett Martin (electric dreamer) Summoning of an pirate's ghost - intense drama - PG-13 for violence and intense imagery - Mother resurects the ghost of her son's father for destruction, freeing her son.
You Can Never Leave by George Willson (tubkas) H3ll house of creeps - intense drama - PG-13 for intense situation - Purgatory house eternally traps a man to live amonst creepy occupants in unpleasant circumstances.
Monsters and Physical Non-Human Things
Chastity by Trent Carroll (theboywonder) Soul sucking siren - intense drama - PG-13/R for sexuality and intense scenes - Another young man is seduced by and lost to a soul sucking siren.
Figments by Gary Rademan (grademan) Military vs. aliens - SciFi fantasy - PG-13 for battle scenes - Special task force fights increasingly scary creatures coming from alien portal.
High Time by Sean Chipman (mr. blonde) Viral animal zombies - intense drama - R for graphic violence - BF/GF & WC child brother evade violent animals in abandoned house with tragic outcome.
Jack And The Goo by Catherine Hall (cmhall) Submitted to iScript for final selection Writer's Choice Alien goo is bad for you - SciFi drama - PG-13 for intense imagery - A couple seek refuge from flesh eating goo raining down on near future earth, find great help from a local WC bound resident.
The Life Thief by Eric Napolitan (smackedsillyxxx) Canibal rejuvination - comic horror - R for graphic violence - Young couple explores an abandoned mansion to find a creepy old WC man that eats people to gain eternal life.
Turned by Kenneth P Matovu Canibals/monsters - intense drama - PG-13 for intense scenes - Family escapes house where others are being killed, only to be killed outside.
Untitled by Brian K. Millard Classic werewolf tale - fantasy epic - PG-13 for intense drama - Constable seeks answers from WC professor whom becomes the werewolf he seeks.
Madmen and Psychotics
Donor by Jon Barton (johnnyboy) Madman brute - intense drama - PG-13 for implied mutilation - Psychotic woman abducts people to reconstruct her deceased WC son using their body parts.
A Hollow Hallow's Eve by Josh Geishert (violent josh) Freak show - comic horror - R for graphic violence - Seeking shelter, a woman finds an abandoned house to be quite occupied by a supreme freak wanting to add her as another manequin guest at the dinner table.
Hoodie by Christopher Bohlsen (kurisuborosen) Scary madman - intense drama - PG-13 for scary situation - A spectral figure in a hoodie terrorizes a woman and WC man in their home.
Honest Fear by Chad Murtaugh (yosemitesam) Madman brute - intense drama - R for intense drama and graphic violence - Psychotic brute abducts victims for pointless basement torture.
Killing Albert Einstein by Tim Ratcliffe (trojan) Mad scientist - humorous pisstake - R for language - S Hawkings receives assistance to go back in time to kill A Einstein via a roller coaster time machine.
Pumpkinseeds by Darren J Seeley (darrenjamesseeley) Writer's Choice Witch story - fantasy horror - PG-13/R for graphic violence - A WC man finds himself captive of a great witch within her moving house where escape is traumatically futile.
Watching by Stephen Brown (stebrown) Madman with an ax & mask - gore porn - R for graphic violence and blood - People are being frightened and hacked to death by psychotic with an ax in the basement.
The Zombotard by Gary Murphy (murphy) Madman genius - Ad hoc farce - R for violence - Abductors have the tables fatally turned by the gun weilding S hawking, but only until resurected as zombies. A musical ensues.
Upset People
Cleansed by Steve McDonell (stevie) Submitted to iScript for final selection Writer's Choice Revenge killing - intense drama - R for language and violence - On the anniversary of his wife's horrific accident, a husband exacts suicidal revenge on the man who dodged his responsibilities years ago.
Credit Where Due by Shawn Davis (ledbetter) Submitted to iScript for final selection Writer's Choice Psycho bastard - intense drama - R for language and graphic violence - Old WC man claims to be the second JFK gunman before killing his son, slashing the woman then blowing his own brains out.
* * * The October 2010 OWC selected script by iScript * * * Glass Rain by Julio Weigend (reaper creeper) Writer's Choice Occult dabbling - intense drama - R for graphic violence - GF commits surreal suicide after she has BF shoot her brother in the head because she has fouled up her occultism on him for the umpteenth time.
Scars by Shawn Anderson (sanderson) Revenge killing - intense drama - PG-13 for implied murder - WC brother and disfugured sister seek revenge on the responsible man years later.
Shadows by Malcom Bowman (scoob) Revenge killing - intense drama - R for graphic violence - Siblings seek mortal revenge on the WC man whom hurt them years ago.
The Thirty-First by Nathaniel Zignego Family killing - intense drama - PG-13 for intense drama - Jealous man murders his brother and friend.
Three On A Match by Phil Clarke Jr. (dogglebe) Writer's Choice Psychopath killers - Intense drama - PG-13 for violence - Young psychopath kidnaps old WC bound psychopath from institution to frame for the murder of his GF.
Tomorrow II: Dusklight by R. E. McManus (rendevous) Auld devil's tail, er... tale - understated devilry - PG-13 for general mischief - A son brings his posh city muppet to visit his country da whose poteen gives her nightmares.
Wheelchair Indemnity by Alanna Carlson Lover's triangle - soap opera drama - PG for disturbing images - Jealous WC-bound man plans to murder obtuse friends/couple, foiled by vengeful ghosts of prior victims.
A Very Manly Boo-Day by Michael Cornetto (mcornetto) Impractical revenge jokes - dark farce - R for graphic rape - Practical joke on 'the top' goes awry as 'the bottom' has a monstrous friend "scare the man I love".
Sorry to be an pedantic arsehole (not an asshole) Ray but in 'Cleansed', the antags were husband and wife not siblings. And there was no evil spirit involved.
I know all your data has to be spot on( I'm a stickler for that too!) so thought I'd mention it...
Steve - Corrected. No need to be any kind of hole or for apologies. There were a lot of stories. I make mistakes. You get what you pay for. Just ask. No big whup.
Khamanna - Serbian provides the better of most of these translations. I'm guessing your statement is something pleasant - in which case: Thank you!
Greg - INT. SECOND FLOOR HALLWAY - NIGHT WHAM! The old man is thrown to the hard floor at the top of the stairs. He groans. OLD MAN You...f#cking...f#cks... Mara places the wheelchair on the top step and returns the old man in it. GRAHAM Maybe we shoulda just takin' a chance and killed 'im. MARA It won't work if he's dead. He's gotta be alive. LOL! Yeah, I'll be looking for that to air right after Dora the Explorer.
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