This read to me like an experienced writer trying very hard to write terribly.  Unfortunately, and in this case, it's difficult to pull off.  I wouldn't even call this a pisser, cuz pissers at least attempt to make you laugh at the stupidity.  This one was just a chore to get through and no cheap laughs at all.  Bah.

Oh dear, not really sure what happened there. It's got a superhero in it...comedy not so much. Actually it's got talking donuts so that was kinda funny, the rest of it not so

Writer,

Okay that was different. So I'm guessing this cataclysmic showdown takes place in an apocalyptic world where no kne is alive, or everyone just scattered away cause they knew this was gonna get messy. Give fat guy and skinny guy a wide berth. Either way this made pretty much no sense to me. Way overwritten, even for two pages! Just nothing really happening that catches my interest. Even the fart didn't do it for me, and I love fart jokes.

Steve

Two pages of piss on a wall.
So what's funnt here?
Unfilmmable prose and a fat joke and a fart one
Nicole Arbour would be proud!

Shows such as Simpsons etc. play that card from time to time, including a race between a fat and a skinny guy. So, I think it's a solid, recurring concept but I miss your own version, what stands out and makes it a complete sketch somehow. What's new?

Yikes. Yeah, this one wasn't very good...at all. I was confused by both the descriptions and the humor. Was this supposed to be funny because fat people are fat and like to eat donuts? I'm never above juvenile humor but this script was just lazy.

But hey, practice makes perfect!

I really wanna give this one no points at all, but for the life of me, I can't; it *did* make me laugh multiple times, albeit at how poorly it's written and how stupid the story is. That said, I did start to lose interest once the superhero angle came about, since the writer actually started trying, however marginally, if only to fit the challenge. I'll give a point for brevity too. It didn't waste that much of my time.

If this is a pisser, well-done. If not, it really deserves no points at all. I seriously can't imagine this took more than fifteen minutes to write.

First thing I asked myself was, “Why are the margins stretched on a two page script?” Unfortunately, there's not much more to say on this one. It feels tossed together.

Well, it's not a bad title. The script itself is a bit short. It's one and a half pages.

Sadly I wasn't hugely amused. But then someone else might be.

Seeing as there's a week to write, I would have expected a bit more story.

If it was filmed, if someone so desired, this may be a starting point for some comedians to improvise something. There should be more story for them to work with.

I've been away. I still am. But I will be back. Can't say when. Sorry.