Writer,

I actually liked the innits. Thought they were used to good effect and just became funny after a while. Best thing about this one is he slipped in the poop at the end, but this guy otherwise makes no sense. Just part of his charm. Not bad, but not for me.

Steve

Eh,  I don't think it met the superhero qualifier.  He wasn't drawn to be a superhero like Batman or even on Super (thanks to Mr. Blonde for making me watch that, Ellen Page was really hot in that movie)...

I didn't find it funny.  It did flow fast.

5/10

Dan

Writing itself was decent and the dialogue was realistic for the chav character, at least from what I remember of them.

I guess it's hard in only 6 pages, but I was wondering what the inspiration was for SupaChav to have this mission to save the environment. Not typical chav behavior, so having a reason for this motivation may have helped.

sorry, didn't get through this one.  Not my cup of tea.

I thought I was going to hate this with the name Supachav but I ended up liking it a lot. I echo what a few have said, if you are not from the UK and/or familiar with Ali G or the movie Defend the Block (which was called Attack the Block in some countries) then you will struggle with this.

As it was I am very familiar with all of the above and found Supachav to be a very enjoyable character. He isn’t a superhero at all, he just sees himself as a Youtube/Environment superhero which is stretching the parameters of this OWC beyond snapping point. So on that basis, I couldn’t recommend this but I would consider it and I did enjoy it immensely. I would recommend pursuing this character and developing it further, see if you can get any UK filmmakers interested in filming a few sketches. I think it may be quite popular.

-Mark

I too caught the Ali G vibe from this right away. I like Ali G a lot. This screenplay, not so much. Honestly I found the protag to be insufferable. Plus the story just went in circles for me.

Maybe this was just lost in translation. However, I simply wasn't feeling it.

I actually liked this one as well, it will probably go right over the head of most of the U.S. audience. Spent a bit of time in UK and Ireland myself, so have a decent handle on who a ' chav' is.

Not really a superhero though, so pushing the OWC boundaries right there.

I thought this was okay. Indeed, similar to Ali G. Maybe a little too similar. At the same time, I'm not familiar with the "chav" stereotype, if that's even one it is, so perhaps that's not fair of me to say.

I think this one suffered from the page length a bit. It could've done with a few more gags, and the ones that there are are over a little too quick. Also might be at a little disadvantage on the page. I'm positive it'd be funnier to *see* this guy act like an idiot and the respective reactions from the people he interviews, as opposed to reading it.

Honestly didn't make much of an impression on me. Nothing stands out as particularly bad though. The humor wasn't for me per se, but it's there, and clearly the character thinks he's making a difference in his own buffoonish way so I'll accept the superhero angel as well. Fit the parameters, I suppose. I'll say nice try.

Constantly waiting for a prole story here, one of my favorite subjects in comedy. So, plus points from the start. Now bring it on:
lol, it's funny. A modern prole having weird ecology theories, wtf. I like the self-irony and the goofy social punch lines like that last one about pensioners. No real superhero with "real" superpowers detected though - it's only what he thinks about himself I believe (hmm, then maybe his entertaining arrogance is an extraordinary power on its own )... Otherwise, very good work from my sight on things... Probably my favorite script--

That was loonie. Don't get a superhero angle. Straight jacket maybe.

I liked the character you’ve created. Reminds me of Ali G. Maybe a bit too much, but it’s hard to say as I’m only passingly familiar with Ali G.

Pretty good overall. Nothing struck me as laugh out loud funny, but the humor is very character dependent. Based on who played Supachav, he could either be hilarious or just annoying as f***. It also feels like the subject matter was maybe only half delved into. There’s a lot of idiosyncrasies of environmentalism that were left on the table, some potentially more biting than the ones you included.

I set out to create an idiot-like character that, if you delved deep enough, actually made a little sense.

The thing with the dog poop. No matter how disgusting , it is a part of the food chain and necessary for human survival.

The 'population control' joke is also one with a slightly deeper meaning. At first it sounds like he's just made an ignorant mistake, but, upon looking deeper, what does 'population control' actually mean? It means finding ways to make it so there are less people. This delves into conspiracy theory territory.

As well as the political statements - albeit, I agree, those could have been done better, and perhaps more of them. The climate is another big one I could have tackled, for example - I wanted to tackle a social aspect, in the shoulder barge and stare down. Both are common occurrences on the street, often as a prelude to violence.

Anyway, I had a lot of fun writing this one, a huge thanks to the organisers of the contest is in order.

Oops, missed this one. Going to read it tonight.

Well done Dustin, made my top 3. Were myself and Irish Eyes correct with the Rab C Nesbitt influence, or was it just a happy coincidence?

Well this was exceedingly funny for me. I seriously laughed outloud.
Loved his character.
His superpowers were a bit much - you combined the two - he can detect a crying baby on large distances and he can detect bullshit. I would stick with only bullshit detection and bring up that phrase a couple of times more for the sakes of the challenge. Otherwise, as a stand alone entry - it doesn't matter.
But I would still drop his crying baby detection skills, I think the story will be leaner without it. I think you could continue with this and make it into web series or something. Would be very funny to watch on screen one day.