The Talk by A Clever Pseudonym - Short, Comedy - A young girl learns she has fantastic things in store for her. Fantastic, icky things. 6 pages - pdf, format

Writer,

Smartly written. Don't think you're going for gut busts here, and that's good. It's got a little heart, and some funny moments. And it hits a spot that's relatable to all women. Good job. My favorite so far.

Steve

I agree with Steve here, not entirely funny but very well written and enjoyable from start to finish.

I particularly  liked the ending although I saw it coming

Great job on entering

Nice one. Down to earth. A few chuckles. Super powers dealing with every day situations.
I liked it.

Yeah pretty good effort this. Seemed to well thought out and was written nicely.

Wasn't massively funny but Truck's line before Martha grabs him was a classic!

7 laughs out of 10

A Clever Pseudonym,

A nice punch at the end, but didn't really do enough throughout. Pretty well written though, just think more could have happened in this one.

Best of luck.

Glenn.

There’s a lot of talking setting this one up. I realise it’s called the Talk but it would have been nice to see her ancestors discovering their powers in funny flashbacks while mom gave her the talk. As it is, this means this story is low on the chuckle factor but it’s a good all round story and meets the criteria of the OWC nicely in my opinion.

-Mark

Well written, well thought out, well put together.

Alot of "talk" and not really a whole lot of funnies, but there's enough and your playful tone works in making this an enjoyable read.

Good job!

Another well written script that shows that the author knows what they're doing.

The ending was predictable - but that's okay - I think given the premise it had to end that way.

Not sure you needed all the  capped dialogue?

Not laughs for me - but a few smiles and that is good enough - it is a tough genre.

A simple little tale with an effective premise.  It was more well-told than funny, but I suppose there's only one way this really could have ended.  I would have liked a little more build-up in that last scene where she's discovering her power.  Kinda surprised there was no mention of an Aunt Flo in the family.

I liked this as an interesting take on coming of age dramedy.

It wasn't a laugh a minute, more gentle than that, but I liked that aspect of it.

Believable characters (well maybe not Truck) and some decent dialogue to boot.

Good effort

I thought it was good.  I found it funny.  It was cute.  The ending was a bit gross.  Why wouldn't the mom prepare her for "that" part of "that talk?"

It was good.  I can't say much more then that.  It had heart, was clever, again, the biggest issue was that it seemed like a joke done to a specific punch line.  That's my only knock against it.

7.5/10

This was very good. Congrats on a nice short!

Clever,

This was well written and entertaining, but it lacked punch and fizzled out at the end.

This was still one of the best scripts I've read so far, and I thank you for that.

Jordan

I thought this one worked pretty well. A lot of other scripts suffered from trying to be too wacky, and the fact you kept this more grounded paid off as the emotional element was more relatable, IMO.

One of the best I've read so far.