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Not Today, Gucci - OWC (currently 2460 views) |
Don |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 10:07am |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16438 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
Not Today, Gucci by 0 - Short, Comedy - Super heroes, Aussies, Walmarts and eyeless crocodiles -- this is the story of the Doctor. 6 pages - pdf, format |
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Equinox |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 10:48am |
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LocationGermany Posts345 Posts Per Day 0.10 |
Yikes, I guess the author has probably quite some problems. And me too, as I couldn't stop laughing. Extremely weird but funny! |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 11:50am |
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Wow...obviously a complete pisser...and quite a whacky one, too.
Too whacky for this old whack, and I'm out on Page 2, as this is completely senseless. |
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Trojan |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 12:11pm |
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LocationAustralia Posts393 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
If a schizophrenic screenwriter took acid and was given 30 minutes to write a stream-of-consciousness story with absolutely no f*cks given, I expect this would be the result. |
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DanC |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 12:35pm |
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Old Timer Killing villains since 1980!
LocationBuffalo NY Posts1131 Posts Per Day 0.34 |
I'm sorry, but, I'm out on page 3. I said I'd never bail, but, I can't follow it. I know I'm legally high and all, but, I don't think anyone can follow this trip.
Sorry, I truly am.
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Equinox |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 1:12pm |
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LocationGermany Posts345 Posts Per Day 0.10 |
Well, it doesn't make sense, but the scenes alone are so weird, it made me laugh, and that's what comedy is about after all, isn't it? Never thought I'd ever like a script which doesn't make sense. |
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khamanna |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 4:48pm |
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The first two scares are very good but then you jumped and introduced crocodiles... yeah... I have no idea why.
In the end I don't know what I just read and why you would write that. Not funny |
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grademan |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 5:32pm |
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Been Around
LocationWisconsin Posts872 Posts Per Day 0.16 |
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stevie |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 5:42pm |
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Of The Ancients
LocationDown Under Posts3441 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
Started out promising but lost the plot even by my crazy standards lol
1 laugh out of 10 for the Aussie reference lol |
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Wes |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 6:52pm |
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LocationOakland, CA 94602 Posts164 Posts Per Day 0.04 |
What the hell? I got through page three and couldn't take any more. Just not my thing. So, yeah, it'll probably be some kind of cult classic. I wouldn't be surprised at all. |
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irish eyes |
Posted: April 24th, 2016, 7:02pm |
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January Project Group There`s too much blood in my alcohol
LocationUpstate New York Posts1865 Posts Per Day 0.36 |
Ahhh what?????
I could read this over and over and still have no clue what's going on? Are there 3 different stories?
My head hurts trying to make sense of it.
All I can say is good job on entering.
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: April 25th, 2016, 3:14am |
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I said that I'm not going to hate on any one of these entries, so, nice work for having a go. |
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MarkRenshaw |
Posted: April 25th, 2016, 3:23am |
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LocationUK Posts2335 Posts Per Day 0.58 |
Reads like a pisser, but for once I’m sure pissers are allowed and encouraged.
Far too crazy and incoherent for my tastes but I appreciate the mad as a box of frogs effort that’s gone into this and I know some will love you for it.
-Mark |
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SAC |
Posted: April 25th, 2016, 2:29pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3208 Posts Per Day 0.78 |
Writer,
I try not to bail on scripts but I can't help it here. Out by page 4 and there's no let up to what I'm reading. Agree with Jeff -- senseless. WTF were you on when you wrote this!
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: April 25th, 2016, 6:01pm |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
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SKN |
Posted: April 25th, 2016, 10:29pm |
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I don't know man, I read almost all the entries by now and intend to finish them all, but this one I had to abort on page 3, not that my opinion matters. Sorry. |
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cbead |
Posted: April 25th, 2016, 10:59pm |
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New https://chrisbeadnell.wordpress.com/
LocationSunny Coast. Qld. Australia Posts143 Posts Per Day 0.05 |
To critique in the lexicon as presented: Super Fucked |
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RichardR |
Posted: April 26th, 2016, 5:39pm |
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lost me at page two. Sorry. |
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James McClung |
Posted: April 26th, 2016, 7:37pm |
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Of The Ancients
LocationWashington, D.C. Posts3293 Posts Per Day 0.48 |
I have a feeling this reads exactly how the writer intended it to. I expect the comments do as well. No laughs from me though. Not much else to say, really. |
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eldave1 |
Posted: April 26th, 2016, 7:56pm |
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LocationSouthern California Posts6874 Posts Per Day 1.93 |
Chaotic.
The writer set up a difficult task - to find humor in scenes where a pregnant woman is punched in the stomach, after delivery shot by the Doctor and a baby kicked out the window. I think that is an impossible task. Good job on entering.
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Cameron |
Posted: April 27th, 2016, 5:22am |
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Dear god that was a bit mental. Reading the comments I kinda feel embarrassed to admit that I actually laughed a few times, however I think that was more to do with how mad the whole thing was, rather than any actual comedy.
Absolutely bonkers, doesn't make any sense, not really my thing. Well done for taking the time to enter |
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PrussianMosby |
Posted: April 27th, 2016, 11:45am |
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I think the stuff with the birth almost offended common decency if you'd film that; though I forgave you that when you brought in Cozco that devilish poor soul from a previous owc. What can I say. I believe it or not that I've read this whole absurdity. Credits for weirdness. I definitely had fun with your psycho-gram here, giving us an insight behind the curtains of madness. So, I give you the last word and quote from the exquisite climax of your pisser:
"The Eyeless Nurse break dances her way out the window and soars away like an Emu."
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EWall433 |
Posted: May 1st, 2016, 9:20pm |
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I got a couple laughs from the first page, but something seemed off about the writing...
“Oh, fuck, I ran out of pages.”
Yeah, that’s about right. Thanks for playing. |
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IamGlenn |
Posted: May 3rd, 2016, 7:55am |
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LocationDublin, Ireland, Europe, The World. Posts692 Posts Per Day 0.20 |
Couldn't get through this one. Absolutely mental! But, for me anyway, not in a good way.
Glenn. |
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cloroxmartini |
Posted: May 8th, 2016, 2:31pm |
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LocationYou know what a saguaro is? Posts803 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
GANG MEMBR 2 What the fuck....? |
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