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Unfortunately, the script did not deliver on this promising start. But had it actually been good enough to justify this ape-shit slug line? Then it is a brilliant rule bender.
You can hate this author's choice but you would be wrong because you would continue reading (at least for a bit) beyond a slug like this.
Usually only very good writers would dare to do something like that, so I'd see it as a promising start too. However, the next few lines and the rest of the script better live up to it. As soon as that voice is revealed as fake or forced, I'm out of there.
Only one thing is undeniably true. You will never please everyone.
If you know the rules well enough to bend them -- a critical caveat -- then trust your instincts with wrilies and other "conventions" of the trade. That is your voice and if you don't trust it and use it then you are wasting any talent that you may (or may not) have.
I remember when I first joined the boards in 2011 it was said that to submit a script to a studio you had to send the physical manuscript. All kinds of rules applied such as 3 ring binders, something like that. Sending PDF was a no no.
Things change. Wise people try to anticipate that change.
Someone earlier mentioned that a script is only going to get notes from an intern. While that's still true in many ways, the world really has changed. Acquisition departments of Netflix and Hallmark and everyone else is scouring the world for good stories they can acquire. No, I don't have personal experience of this. But I've read several articles, and it also makes sense. The production world is VERY different than it was in 2011. There is a tremendous demand for content. The supply simply doesn't come close to meeting demand. Netflix, Amazon...and a hundred smaller channels...all competing for content. The old system of a few big studios employing teams of interns is largley dying.
Which is exciting.
But which also means writers might benefit from recognizing the production world has change, is in the process of change.
Even an OWC type script could get passed around and bought up. If that script is in a more readable and entertaining form it will have a leg up. And these are PRODUCERS, not interns, looking for scripts.
Small independent producers are hunting for concepts, acquiring them, then bringing them to places like Netflix and Amazon. These producers don't even know what a wrylie is let alone whether it breaks someone's rule. They want to be able to scour through these stories in search of something valuable.
Alas, no. We got two guys walking on the beach talking shit when we needed a ridiculously over-the-top, profanity-laden action scene. Lost opportunity, that one.
So, anyway, back to wrilies. Every word should serve some purpose, and IMO entertaining the reader IS a purpose. If you love it, keep it. But if you've any doubts, probably better to cut.
And I am a big hypocrite because I seldom take this advice myself. So, there's that, too.
Small independent producers are hunting for concepts, acquiring them, then bringing them to places like Netflix and Amazon. These producers don't even know what a wrylie is let alone whether it breaks someone's rule. They want to be able to scour through these stories in search of something valuable.
Also sad, how many very bad scripts have "alot" of comments.
I don't know Jeff. I look at the current average. 18, (between 14 and 23) No. 23 is "Libertine" which actually might crack the top 5, as it seems nobody outright hated it. Not even you. I had some issues with it, but I didn't think it was "bad".(I didn't write it)
My script had mixed reviews, although it leaned slightly more on the positive as an average. I'm not miffed that I gotten less than 18 comments. Maybe nobody has much more to add. Maybe some folks guessed me and thought "I'll wait until the reveal and/or see if that crazy nutjob hands in a revision" (Which is more than likely; some minor details here and there)
Maybe some reviewers didn't submit OWC entries. Could be anything. Just as long as those submitted do at least a fair share of reviewing - and it looks to be the case for the most part- I have no problems.
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