I don't agree with everything you guys told me in your notes, but they did help pinpoint some major problem areas.  I've since gone back and did a major overhaul and developed it into a feature.  

I've never quite understood the purpose of writing shorts and never spent any real time developing them.  And that's pretty evident in my OWC.

Quoted from ericdickson    I'll settle this.  Both Warren and Jeff have pissed me off to the point of wanting to chuck my laptop across the room.

Sorry you've felt that way, it's definitely never been my intention to piss a writer off with my reviews.

I feel that I almost always try to.be constructive. I make my notes as I read and a lot of the time I will ask questions of the writer as they come up. I have always thought there was value in letting a writer know what I'm thinking as I go.

One thing I never do is sugarcoat anything. I don't think there is any value in that, but I don't ever go out of my way to be a dick. I've definitely made a joke about a script here and there, sometimes a situation or piece of writing is just begging for it.

And like I just said to Matthew, I don't proclaim to be an expert. I know what has works for me and that's what I share.

Quoted from Warren Sorry you've felt that way, it's definitely never been my intention to piss a writer off with my reviews. I feel that I almost always try to.be constructive. I make my notes as I read and a lot of the time I will ask questions of the writer as they come up. I have always thought there was value in letting a writer know what I'm thinking as I go. One thing I never do is sugarcoat anything. I don't think there is any value in that, but I don't ever go out of my way to be a dick. I've definitely made a joke about a script here and there, sometimes a situation or piece of writing is just begging for it. And like I just said to Matthew, I don't proclaim to be an expert. I know what has works for me and that's what I share.

  

As I said in the later portion of my comments, it was actually very helpful in knocking me off my high horse and getting my ass in gear.  

So, thanks for that.  

My aim is not to piss off, but to enlighten....brings things to light that others don't see for whatever reason.

Mistakes come about in different ways...

Overlooking something because of the deadline - no big deal, but if it sticks out, why not let the writer know?

Not understanding something's wrong - I'll always point out these mistakes, because once the writer gets it, these mistakes won't be made again.

Not understand how to do something - again, let me show you the way.

Not having a clue - well, at times, I may go too far in how I react and what I say, but the intent is to beat it into the writer's head, so they actually want to get a clue and not  hear such critique again.

Okay... can I just say, I’ve never lived in a home where the front door isn’t in the living room. I guess it’s a Midwest thing? In my current house you can touch the front door and the sofa at the same time without even stretching.  (Whew, that’s been bugging me all week.)

Anyway, thanks for all the great notes on Remote Control.

It’s always fascinating to see the different ways others see your script.

I hate houses with the front door in the living room. I don't know why. I like to have a hallway.

You still can't have INT. FRONT DOOR - though. You can't be inside the front door.

Quoted from DustinBowcot I hate houses with the front door in the living room. I don't know why. I like to have a hallway. You still can't have INT. FRONT DOOR - though. You can't be inside the front door.

Did I do INT. FRONT DOOR? (Panic checks script.) Okay, no. Good. You scared me.

Regarding my slug INT/EXT. SUBURBAN HOUSE - LIVING ROOM... I'm still gonna change it. One thing I've learned... you can be technically correct... and still distract the reader. And, that's what I did. I created a page one distraction with a bad (though, technically correct) slug.

My particular challenge was that I wanted a conversation to take place in the doorway as the Det. was leaving, with the mother in the house, and the detective on the porch. I didn't paint a very clear picture of that... and I paid the price.

Another OWC. Another lesson learned.

Sorry... I thought you was referring to something else.

Quoted from PKCardinal Regarding my slug INT/EXT. SUBURBAN HOUSE - LIVING ROOM... I'm still gonna change it. One thing I've learned... you can be technically correct... and still distract the reader. And, that's what I did. I created a page one distraction with a bad (though, technically correct) slug.

Don't worry too much about it. When you have an actual location it will change to suit the location anyway, and everybody who makes films knows that. It's not up to you to make everything familiar to everyone, this is where "write what you know" comes from. Just make sure it's clear.

Quoted from ReneC Don't worry too much about it. When you have an actual location it will change to suit the location anyway, and everybody who makes films knows that. It's not up to you to make everything familiar to everyone, this is where "write what you know" comes from. Just make sure it's clear.

Good point, thanks.

Quoted from DustinBowcot Sorry... I thought you was referring to something else.

All good, everyone needs a good panic once in a while!

Hold off on the reveals, guys. It won't be much longer now.

Quoted from PKCardinal Okay... can I just say, I’ve never lived in a home where the front door isn’t in the living room. I guess it’s a Midwest thing? In my current house you can touch the front door and the sofa at the same time without even stretching.  (Whew, that’s been bugging me all week.) Anyway, thanks for all the great notes on Remote Control. It’s always fascinating to see the different ways others see your script.

Interesting.

In the house I lived in growing up, our door lead to stairs, one leading up to the living room / kitchen, the other leading to the basement.

My current house, the door opens to the kitchen/living room. Not close enough to touch from a couch though, just a small standing space with a closet. A few steps forward you're in the kitchen, a few steps to the left, you're in the living room.

Quoted from Zack Hold off on the reveals, guys. It won't be much longer now.

Hmmm...I thought someone just said to go ahead with outing ourselves. I just did for A Pinch. Oh well....

Quoted from JEStaats Hmmm...I thought someone just said to go ahead with outing ourselves. I just did for A Pinch. Oh well....

I did. All the votes are in and Don is adding them all up.

Sorry Zack. Thought you were busy.