Very straightforward, but definitely delivers the goods. I think it fumbles the character motivations a bit -- the better and more complete their reason for wanting to find Taxi Joe, the more fun their deaths will be. Are they do-gooders? Exploiters? That's the missing piece for me.

But an entertaining, no-frills read.

Taxi joe

Oh, I dont know. It wasn't bad, the writer knows their stuff, and the use of taxi was different in terms of being a  Home, so kudos for that.

But,

1] this has been done soooo many times, the kids in the woods, oh the nasty man etc ... So I feel it lacks depth, and actually felt a tad cliched. Anything in woods goes bad etc. Sorry, maybe it's me.

2] it was hardly contained in a taxi, like not at all

3],trapped, OK, you ticked this one, but I didn't like the tick. It want centre to the story

I really worked on the criteria and my script stumbles because of it, so I feel I should take this into account.

It almost felt like - please don't assume I really think this, I'm just saying - that you had a cabin script and switched part for a taxi. I'm sure it wasn't, but may be you can see where I'm coming from. Where was the new angle?

Sorry, I'm going to pass

Not bad, the usual cliche for most found footage... always ends up in the woods lol

I guess the hiker was trapped in the taxi.

Overall well written just not my thing.

Good job on entering

So there's a hiker trapped in the trunk of the taxi.
Looks to me like it meets the criteria.
Might have hinted at the trapped hiker at the beginning just to satisfy the critics.

Reminds me of this commercial where the kids go to hide behind the hanging chainsaws rather than getting in the running car -- If you're in a horror movie, you're gonna make stupid decisions. It's what you're gonna do.

Nothing that really grabs me here but it's solidly written.

Well I guess being dead in the trunk is stuck in the taxi!!  I liked where you were going with it... and then it just ended!  WTH!!  You still had 4 pages more to go.  This was good to this point, one of the better ones, if you would have finished it.  I hope you just ran out of time, and can finish this now that the challenge is done.  Would easily be filmed.  Good luck.

I hate found footage horror. I turn that shit off pretty quickly as it seems to be more about shaking the shitty camera around than an actual story.

What's the point in the first bit where he tells them to come back at night? This is so 80s horror it's spoof-like.

Not for me... I could see this being filmed though, because it's easy. I just wouldn't watch it myself.

A pass.

I think its important to tell us why they decided to interview him. Why him? Is he special?

Also she tells us that they are going to interview Joe. Then she repeats that to Joe saying that they are there to interview him. I think you better skip to "not interested" right away.

Also, if the camera is on the floor I dont know how we see Joe grabbing her tigh.

Some notes.

Don't know if this conformed to the rules, but it's a nice little tale.  I don't buy the man going out in the dark to look for Sam.  Sit down and wait.  Who wants to interrupt a man when he's...

Best
Richard

I liked this. It was refreshing to read. Congrats!

This is probably more effective off paper just because of how short it is. If this was filmed, its brevity would add to the creepiness. I liked the found footage angle here, and it was well executed in the script. Not sure about the interruption - come back later? Doesn't make sense to me. Regardless, I enjoyed so good job.

Too linear, and not enough build up for me. Think of Mick Taylor in Wolf Creek, quietly sinister, creepy humour, bad taste puns and jokes before wham!, the girl wakes to terror . Taxi Joe just seems to wander off for a bit - not enough of a full presence, not enough of a villain.  Perhaps give one of them a chance to cotton on, and try to escape, or the two of them discuss something weird going on, discover a limb, something... Just my humble, of course. Not badly written but with the available pages you had, I think you could have added a lot more. I do think this qualifies re trapped.

Some notes.

Not a bad concept although I don't see anyone trapped in a taxi.  

I don't buy the guy going off in the dark to chase down a man peeing.   Doesn't work.  Just a convenience for the writer.

But the writing is fine.

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Richard

Well written for the most part. However, I am one of those that don't think this met the parameters of the challenge.

Writer,

I'm thinking this works fine as is, but maybe a little backstory about why they were out there. I mean it could be, but I'm not sure if sheer curiosity is a good enough explanation. But this was a good, creepy little tale that could've benefitted from another page or two -- I wanted a bit more creepiness and suspense thrown in. This almost does it, but it could be better. Nice work!

Steve

This one didn't work for me.  It was short, too short.  It was too easy to follow.

And unless he's a doctor, there is no way that the girl with the

oh SPOILERS
missing arm should still be alive.  

And why have them come back at night?  And where are the missing people?  

I agree with the others that didn't care for it.  Yes, it could be a feature, I guess, but, not a good one.  I think this is best as a half hour creepshow episode (or Tales from the crypt)...

It also kinda failed the OWC.  You only put her in the trunk at the end to fulfill the challenge, to me, that's kinda cheating...  

And the cliche of Reggie runs off leaving a chubby Becca to become a meal...

Kudos on using the taxi in a completely different way.

5/10

Dan