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The writing was good and was an interesting take on the challenge. Easy to film and some of it had me laughing, but some didn't. Again, not a problem with some touch up. You went "deep" with the theme "butt" with a rewrite might even make it better. The writing flowed and I liked the ending line. Good job.
My Scripts: SHORTS Bed Bugs I Got The Shaft No Clowning Around Fool's Gold Five Days for Redemption
More or less perfect. Be difficult for a low budget team to do those effects justice, but that'd be my only complaint regarding the challenge. Fun, funny, unexpected. Probably my favourite of the bunch.
Thanks all, for reading and commenting. Glad it was mostly well received. I did a quick rewrite, as you can tell by the giant FAIR'S FARE on my sig. Took DanC's advice and named her Becky right from the get go. She's Floyd's girl and deserves a name right off the bat. Also took Jeff's advice and corrected the subject less lines, and threw an INSERT PHONE in there just in case anyone else might have had an issue with that.
However, my favorite comment on this belonged to Libby, when after Guy the mechanic got strapped in, LC remarked, "I thought this was going to take a sophisticated turn." Hahaha. Not on your life!
Thanks, Mark. The "F Yeah" in Fair's Fare was a direct shout out to one in your toilet script! Although the scene where you used it had me on the floor!
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... However, my favorite comment on this belonged to Libby, when after Guy the mechanic got strapped in, LC remarked, "I thought this was going to take a sophisticated turn." Hahaha. Not on your life!
Glad I could give u a laugh! I originally had Stevie pegged for this one. Didn't you like my other comment? Black bile and boobs. Alt, porn and puke, as a tagline... Hmm, I'll stop now except to say, yes that title in your SIG is bloody huge! Good luck with this.
Will comment on mine later which I'm sure you're dying to know is in rewrite, and JC wants for STS. Sorry for the self promo on your thread.
P.S. I should review yours for STS, that'd get ya!
Glad I could give u a laugh! I originally had Stevie pegged for this one. Didn't you like my other comment? Black bile and boobs. Alt, porn and puke, as a tagline... Hmm, I'll stop now except to say, yes that title in your SIG is bloody huge! Good luck with this.
Will comment on mine later which I'm sure you're dying to know is in rewrite, and JC wants for STS. Sorry for the self promo on your thread.
P.S. I should review yours for STS, that'd get ya!
I'm not sure where my mind is LC, but, I almost thought you said PS, I should review yours for STD, that'd get ya...
I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good. I enjoy writing the same. Looking to team with anyone!
I didn't realize this was for the OWC until I had to start searching for the script thread!
I think your idea here is good with the woman being the car kind of thing. Quite clever even with the cause and effect of the lack of maintenance. However, if you're looking to get this produced, I'm not sure a hot actress like that would agree to fart and vomit like that. At least not without a hefty paycheck. Other than that, I thought the farting and vomiting were well done as explanations to a car's well being.
Thanks for taking a look. This one was fun to write for the OWC after I had scrapped a thriller that was going nowhere.
Re: hot actress farting and vomiting. I don't know. If I was a hot actress looking for work, I'd probably jump at the chance! A director suggested to me that most peeps looking to make films are searching for more "women forward" type of roles. I don't know how you get more "women forward" than this! There's the in-your-face analogy to the car, but it also speaks to the mindlessness of us men. Okay, maybe I'm reaching on that last one.
Thanks for taking a look. This one was fun to write for the OWC after I had scrapped a thriller that was going nowhere.
Re: hot actress farting and vomiting. I don't know. If I was a hot actress looking for work, I'd probably jump at the chance! A director suggested to me that most peeps looking to make films are searching for more "women forward" type of roles. I don't know how you get more "women forward" than this! There's the in-your-face analogy to the car, but it also speaks to the mindlessness of us men. Okay, maybe I'm reaching on that last one.
You would think that it might be hard to get a "hottie" to do that, but, look at some of the horror movies that are done today. Human Centipede for one. Why would anyone ever want to do that? Or how about a Serbian story (I think that's the title, about the porn star hired to do one more movie).
The actors are being asked (forced) to do more and more. And some actors in big movies have had to barf. Actually, actors barfing are fairly common (in terms of blood coming out of their mouths etc) so, having a fake fart and fake barf wouldn't be too hard to do. Now, if you are talking about the real thing, well, then I agree...
Most won't wade into the gore subgenres like the vomit films. However, I don't think the writer wants to take it that far...
I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good. I enjoy writing the same. Looking to team with anyone!
It's fun, it's spicy and has a good burlesque type from the very beginning. i liked and i got fun reading it, whenever you publish something else let me know about it. my scrips belongs to the horror 'Curst.' and thriller 'On the road' Thanks Steven.
Thanks for digging this up. I’m glad you liked it. This is probably one of my favorite shorts that I’ve written, with it’s gross out humor. The environmental angle was completely unintentional, but I’m glad some peeps saw it that way. Cheers!