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Just curious, when did you write, and what was the first screenplay you ever wrote?  How do you feel about it now?

I wrote it approximately 4 years ago (I was 15), so it wasn't amazing or anything, but I'll always be proud of what I wrote.  It was called Facade, and it's still up here on this site.  Even though the prose and the dialogue could use a lot of work, I felt and still feel that the overall story was pretty good.  It'll always be known as the first screenplay I ever wrote, and I'm proud of that.

I actually decided to rewrite it and rework it completely, so it should be ready soon!  Edit: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-drama/m-1337817425/


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Façade:  In a "film noir" set in the 1950's, a detective investigates the murder of a teenage boy in the quintessential 50's American suburbs, and as he slowly peels back the veneer of the picture perfect family, he realizes nothing is what it seems, unaware of what secrets he will uncover.

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Pretty good, Rock. I wish I started when I was your age. Very promising to be so ahead of the game.

Myself, I lost my business a couple of years ago. I lost my whole world. And needed a new start. I actually knew nothing about the screenplay world, and didn't really watch movies that often.

The first script took me 6 weeks. Probably because I didn't have screen software. What a pain that was. All I had for a guide was the scripts I found online, which I now know were shooting scripts, so the wrong model.

But I had no idea then. No one had read my script, and I was about to post online, when a spaceship landed in my backyard, and 11 foot tall aliens came to the door. They said if I posted that abomination they would destroy my house and kill every girl I ever had sex with. I called both of them to warn them, but I decided I better not post the script.

Someone online told me "write scripts". It wasn't very clear, but I think he meant to just keep writing until I got it down. Well, I was kind of hooked by then, so I did. I have a bunch of scripts now, and one or two ain't bad.

But as for that first script? Turns out the aliens were right. It was junk. It's just hard to recognize junk when you first start. Especially when it's your own.

And you know? Thinking back, there were some good things in that first script. Which leads me to conclude that learning how to create a good script might just mean learning how to eliminate the crap from the scripts. The good stuff is easy. It's getting rid of the bad that's work. Maybe. I don't know, you tell me. You've been writing longer!

Good luck with the rewrite!
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I started with screenplays last October. I wrote a novel 4 years ago, but I just don't have the time to edit all that stuff nowadays. I decided to adapt it to the screenplay format. I thought it would be easy, but I learned how hard it is. I think my first stab at a novel sucked and the screenplay sucked too - now that I look back.

But it's cool looking back at it and comparing it to the stuff I'm working on. I've written a pilot and two spec shows that I think are strong. My second screenplay which is on the 7wc needs work, but I think it's much better than my first attempt at a feature.

Good luck with the rewrite. I'll be on the lookout for it.
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Oh Lord. The first screenplay I ever wrote was a short about a witch for the past Octobers OWC in here. It was uh ...horrible but I learned a ton from it. And we all gotta start somewhere. But I don't wanna go back and read that first one unless I need a good laugh

So, been at it...let's see almost 8 monthss. now. Wow how time flies. Since then, I've written a few more shorts and five features. I haven't gotten enough confidence in my features though to post them here I've been blessed. I think sometimes the fairy gods smiile down on me. And I've had some really good helpers in here!! Owe it all to them.
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The first script I completed was a zombie script called Kiss of the Locust which I wrote back in 2005 and is still posted on the site to this day. I think the basic concept is decent and I'm proud of the amount of milky zombie vomit contained within. But as the writer, thusly immune to any juvenile charm it might hold to this day, I'm going to have to say it's dogshit. Honestly, I'm not sure how great of a writer I would be if I didn't hate everything I've done over two years before any given present.

Prior to Kiss, I made some significant headway in fan fic scripts based on Clive Barker's Undying and Resident Evil. I think the Undying one might've been 50+ pages. Obviously they weren't great and I didn't have the discipline to follow through with them but to this day, I still think someone should make a movie out of Undying. Definitely one of the best/most underrated video games of all time.


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The first ever screenplay I wrote was titled "Dweller Of 2 Worlds" with a very good writing partner friend of mine. It took us almost 2 + years to complete the story, which worked as per both of us, only to learn later that it didn't and since then the script has undergone several changes and is a never ending process for us. However, it was a jolly ride, often the hard one to take, but enjoying in the end with the feeling that "We did create a beautiful story out of it".

Will it ever be made? I don't know, but there is enough attention caused and promises are made for the story, let's see who makes it, if it ever gets made. Cheers!
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'My Girl 2' was the first script I ever wrote.

(No, not the official one used for the official sequel.  :-)

I was only 11 or so and wrote it immediately after I saw the first 'My Girl' when it first came out.  I guess I have to call it a fan fic script, though when I wrote it at the time, I didn't see it that way.  I was just finishing this girl's story.

I don't remember a lot about what happened in it or particular scenes or dialogue, but I knew it was about Vada having to get on with her life after (you know what) happens.

It's funny, a lot of the stories I write now have to do with moving on with life after tragedies and such.  I guess some themes just never die.


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First screenplay I wrote, "Christmas Story", finished a rough first draft a little over a week ago. The execution needs a hell of a lot of work, but the idea's there I think. In my life, I've begun writing about two-hundred screenplays and about twenty pilots over the last nine years and never was close to finishing any of them until this one. I just hope it doesn't take nine years to do another, although I've found that I'm better when re-writing other people's stuff than creating my own. Go figure.


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I started getting interested in screenwriting last October but did lots of research and reading of scripts before attempting to write myself. After being on SS for a little while I wrote my first short "The Chat up Line" which is here on the shorts section and overall I was happy with it for a first script.    

Since then I’ve entered the OWC and was far from happy with my entry and have since been playing around with techniques and trying to write a feature (it’s hard) but hopefully one day I’ll finish one and more importantly…be satisfied with it.  
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I wrote my comedy"Life of Riley' and after a few reviews, got turned into my sitcom "Loserville"

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My first ever script was a werewolf horror script back in 2004 called "Devil's Peak." It was quickly optioned and got all the way to pre-production before it all fell apart. It's been optioned a few times since with budgets ranging from 200k - 4m, but it never worked out.

The option lapsed and I've finally decided to post it on SS in the hopes that someone else will stumble upon it and like it. Reading it now, it's littered with lots of "no-no's", haha, but it never stopped people in the industry reading and liking it.

If I have time, I will rewrite it, make it cleaner and simplify the story.


Stewart


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Quoted from MacDuff
My first ever script was a werewolf horror script back in 2004 called "Devil's Peak." It was quickly optioned and got all the way to pre-production before it all fell apart. It's been optioned a few times since with budgets ranging from 200k - 4m, but it never worked out.

The option lapsed and I've finally decided to post it on SS in the hopes that someone else will stumble upon it and like it. Reading it now, it's littered with lots of "no-no's", haha, but it never stopped people in the industry reading and liking it.

If I have time, I will rewrite it, make it cleaner and simplify the story.


Stewart


Hey Stew!

As you already know, I like your Critters-like style!
Is the script posted? Shoot me a link, brother!

Regards,
E.D.


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The first script I ever wrote was a feature called 'Blood Poison'.  I did however write a short called 'A Trip to Zoo' while working on the re-write of the feature.
I was very proud of these when I was done but looking back they could do with some work but I guess that shows how much we develop as writers, especially with the help of members on here.  Together we make the individual stronger.  That's quite poetic for me.

I think James' 'Kiss the Locust' was the first feature I read here...or one of his others?


Check out my scripts...if you want to, no pressure.

You can find my scripts here
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Quoted from Electric Dreamer


Hey Stew!

As you already know, I like your Critters-like style!
Is the script posted? Shoot me a link, brother!

Regards,
E.D.


Hey Brett,

Just submitted this week, so just waiting for Don to post and I'll fire over the link to you.

Cheers,
Stew


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Until last year I hadn't written anything, of any type, other than work documents. I had no idea about stories or scripts. I only really started writing in order to persuade a very clever friend of mine that he should write his novel is has so often promised. After I started I realised I enjoyed it.

So last year I started off with a feature (not posted here or anywhere for that matter) but it was so bad and I had so much to learn that I don't really call it my first script. Maybe that's not fair but it's how I feel.

So, if you can excuse a first botched effort, Pagan Man is my first feature and all the shorts posted here on SS are my short scripts, other than one, Shelter, written for another competition which has a link here (under my group script link below) and which has someone looking at it, but that's unlikely.

The reality is that SS has been most of my education.


My scripts  HERE

The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr
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