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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    One Week Challenge    February 2012 OWC  ›  Wicca Patrol - OWC
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Nice work. I got the comedy. I thought it worked well.

Typos...
P.3 - ‘Sweet’ instead of sweat.
P.6 - ‘Floor board’ is this supposed to be dash board?
P.7 - ‘The car speeds down the road like greased lightening’
P.10 - ‘She places the knife back in her cloths’ instead of clothes.

The chase sequence was the strongest aspect to this short for me.

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