Nice short. Well written for the most part.

Not much comedy, so I'm not sure it qualifies as a romcom. I can see the romance part in his desire to be with his wife... even if it's not really her. That's romantic, to a point.

I think the short is stronger outside of the OWC.

I'd like to see a couple of stronger attempts by John to connect with his "wife." Make us feel his desire a bit more.

Maybe finish with her waking up and him actually feeling a connection?

All in all, good job!

This was very well written and all. And engaging story.

But I want more at the end. It somehow ends in an unsatisfying way. I know less is more, but I want another twist I guess. See if the others say the same.

The Teddy bear is not used. I thought you were building up to something here. I even thought she was a teddy  bear or something. I say tweak it so the teddy bear doesn't seem an important gift.

Anyway, I haven't seen the reviews but I very well suspect people will say it's not a rom com. It is for me. And a good one. But not great I must be honest. The writing is top notch, but of course, you know that.

It's not a romcom, but a very nice script, nonetheless. Maybe it would have been a romcom had the evening gone as John hoped. Then John wakes up in the morning and Alice is unresponsive and he re-lives her death all over again. Then he sees the blinking red light on the back of her neck, and just under it the jack for the recharge plug, and he comes back to reality. Or better yet, he doesn't wake up in the morning. Sad, but at least he got one more good date with his love.

Hi Writer,

Your short has a 'Marjorie Prime' feel.

Good premise and well-written for the most part, but light on the comedy.

It feels more like a drama, sci-fi kind of short as others have already pointed out.

I thought Alice had Amnesia at one point, but then all went a different direction.

Not sure about the ending. Isn't bad, but didn't make it for me. John just keeps waiting... and waiting... I wanted him to finally re-connect with his wife. I wanted the robot to work properly. But if you aim was to show that a machine will never be able to replace a person, well done, it worked.

Overall - a good effort. It's a nice short.

I liked this one. It was well written and somewhat touching.

John had apparently lost his wife Alice and had decided to replace her with an AI
To celebrate their 30 year wedding anniversary. But, alas, the new Alice is only a pale imitation of his true love.

There are quite a few scripts in this contest that would fair very well outside of the parameters set, including this one.

I don’t think there was much of an attempt here to write a romcom about a man in love with a robot.  That would be an entirely different script.
It is very romantic imo.  It just doesn’t fit the genre.

Still a very good script.  

Quoted from Spqr It's not a romcom, but a very nice script, nonetheless. Maybe it would have been a romcom had the evening gone as John hoped. Then John wakes up in the morning and Alice is unresponsive and he re-lives her death all over again. Then he sees the blinking red light on the back of her neck, and just under it the jack for the recharge plug, and he comes back to reality. Or better yet, he doesn't wake up in the morning. Sad, but at least he got one more good date with his love.

AHHHH...that is a very good idea!  No ROMCOM here, but you're on to something.

I like the idea.  The premise seems romantic to have one more romantic evening with his wife.  I felt it needed something more to make this more of romcom.  Not enough comedy for me. I'd get rid of the gift buying and focus on the main story.

All the best.

Well written but a little cliche and telegraphed... and unfortunately I see this as a drama, definitely not a romcom.

Definitely not a rom com. Nothing funny here, and unrequited romance is not romantic.

The premise is the gem of this piece. I really like it, a Life Model Decoy for Marvel fans or an Alexa/iHome/Google Home avatar, so to speak. It was clear from very early on that something was not right, and it became obvious well before the reveal, but that's okay. Except that's what makes this depressing as hell, which is about as far removed from a rom com as you can get.

The ending is early, but maybe it's what it needs to be. I think the problem here is the story itself. I can only assume you went with the robotic responses in a vain attempt at humour, but the better story would have been to have her actually react normally and something happen that reveals she's actually just a robot, or maybe a really advanced real sex doll. That would have allowed for better comedy.

The writing is really good, it just fell flat for me and was far outside of this challenge. Nice entry though.

The trailer looks great, Glenn!
Looking forward to seeing the film.

Hi everyone!

Thanks, Don, for getting the trailer up. Really appreciate it.
I've actually seen the film, but as it's hopefully entering into a few festivals, I can't put it out there.
I enjoyed it though, and think it's very well made.

Libby, thanks for that. I'll be sure to get this one up here as soon as I can.