Hi Writer,

Liked the mockumentary style. It was an original take on the challenge.

It took a little to get into the story, but once it did, I enjoyed it.

There was humor, there was romance, and the required roses and chocolates. Good job on that.

I found the ending a little sudden, I think you should have ended with Officer Lacey calling Andy.

Overall - a good entry. Nicely written and easy to read.

Well done!

I like mockumentaries and this one is rather good.

The idea is there. It's written well. Didn't feel for the ending, felt kind of sudden for me.
I'd say it's not quite a romcom for me.
But this one is subjective I think.

Good luck to you with it.

I like this one. It's cute and wow mockumentary .. brave choice for a rom/com.

Not much to say about this one .. good writing on display.. like your characters... sort of reminded me of Andy Griffith sort of

Good writing.

Not bad but there was very little romance if any.  Comedy was sparse.  But the story overall was good for what it was.

I googled 10-71, indicates a shooting.  Nice to see Officer Lacey using accurate dialogue and Herb's funny response.

Overall, it was a good story, I just don't think it really met the objective.  It was more of a dramedy.

Hi,

I'm a sucker for a mockumentary, and this was a pretty well written one. Funny and the romance got their in the end. I liked it, but feel it could've ramped up a little. One little nitpick; the sleepwalking scene. Surely the documentary cameras wouldn't have caught that. Think it was the only time the format changed.

Well done,

Glenn

Great script.  

Very well written.  Formatting and grammar were excellent except for one small typo at the end.  This writer has been in the game a long time.

Like the others,  I was not expecting an abrupt ending.
There was enough space to have the cameras come across Officer Lacey and Andy on their date and spy on them. This would have satisfied the romantic part of the contest a little more.  After some hand holding and an innocent kiss, Lacey could see the camera and shut the production down.  

The comedy was very good.  I was smiling throughout.  The tone was perfect.

A big fan of mockumentaries.  Not your typical romcom.
Excellent choice.

This one rises to the top of the stack.

Well done.

Small Town Cops...a big idea.  Definitely nothing to mock here.

If I had a wish, it would be that the cute meet happens much earlier and Mr. Irresistible had a few more tricks to seduce Officer Lacey.

And if I may offer one more thought, I also would have liked to see Miss Good Cop slap the cuffs on him...to maybe a bed post.

I think you're just getting started with this wonderful idea.

Thanks for sharing this story with us.

It would be criminal if you didn't take it further.

I like the tone of this but there's a few issues imho.

Firstly, too much build up... Andy isn't introduced for almost five pages.

Secondly, the documentary crew angle doesn;t really add anything and just wastes space.

Thirdly, and I think because of the above, the ending is way too abrupt as you ran out of space.

Fix these and I think this could work well.

A fan of The Office, or maybe Parks and Rec? I like it, great device to use for this. You nailed the humour, you got the writing style right for the most part, you have great characters for it, and the setup works well.

The ending isn't an ending. There should have been something more, it's missing any sort of resolution. Very unsatisfying, which is a shame considering how strong the rest of it was.

Really good stuff otherwise. Congrats.