Not here to pile on.  And I'm not willing to go out on a limb and say that you're a green writer yet.

That said, you have to go back and ask yourself what you're trying to tell us in these <5 pages.   All hope is not lost, because the process of molding this into something worthwhile has already begun.

Kudos for finishing.

It's a cute story, but where was the romance and comedy? I think the better story would have been about Joe and why he tries to brighten the days of the women he knows.

Writer,

Well, this one has many issues. I'm sure I'm repeating, but... Formatting, specifically slug line, unfilmmables, wrylies need to be properly inserted. I could go on. But that's okay. Those are things that can be learned, and you learn by doing so I appreciate the effort you've put forth. However, your story itself wouldn't be considered a rom com at all. No romance, no comedy. It's simple. As is, this reads like a "day in the life" skit, but even then it doesn't generate much interest on it's own. It's all pretty ordinary. There needs to be some action, a desperate co-worker, a tornado hits the building -- something. But keep at it and good effort on entering!

Steve

Quoted from SAC ...a tornado hits the building -- something.Steve

YES!  This may be what the majority of these scripts need!

  Funny...and of course, I jest, but you're actually spot on, in a weird way.

Everyone has already said what I would say here, but I’ll Add a couple of things: first, read a lot of scripts. Even on this site you’ll find a ton of first-rate scripts to give you a good idea on format, plot, dialogue and so on.  In particular, after the votes are cast in this challenge, read the top four or five scripts again and see why those scripts stood out to everyone.

Second, make sure you have the right type of screenwriting software software that will format your script correctly. FadeIn and Celtx are a couple that are free and can help you clean up your formatting errors.

Third, think about writing proactively and putting on paper what we see on the screen.  Write also in the active tense.  So, for example, instead of “Jeena is working on her report” it would be “Jeena works on her report.”  Not “he is sitting” but instead “he sits.”

Lastly, keep writing as much as possible. Start small, maybe 3-4 page scripts, and have a well-thought out story with conflict and a solid beginning and ending. Learn the craft and you’ll soon be on your way!

Best,
Gary

Not much to add... so, I'll just point out one minor thing to work on. Everyone else's notes should keep you busy otherwise.

My note: pay attention to your action blocks. Ask, can this be filmed?

In your first line of action: Jeena is rushing around getting ready for work.

Someone else mentioned "Jeena is rushing" should be "Jeena rushes" (a basic mistake, easily corrected now that you know what to look for). But, let's look at  "getting ready for work." You need to either 1. show us something that indicates she's getting ready for work, specifically. or 2. leave it out, as the important part is she's late for something... which we later find to be work.

Again... can this be filmed? "getting ready for work" can't be filmed. Her actions can.

Hope this makes sense.

Keep writing!

I think the writer's new.  It's okay.  We all start off somewhere.

The characters should all be introduced in capitals.  I noticed Kyle was but no one else.

Scene headers should be consistent.

Some dialogue had missing character names too.

This story read like a drama.  No comedy nor romance.  And in general.  Office stories can be a hard sell.

I recommend not looking at the script for a month.  And then go back for another rewrite.  You'll notice things that weren't apparent when you first completed the story.

All the best.

Hi, writer.

I noticed passive writing at the beginning - a lot of verbs ending in "ing". Easy fix.

The dialog is long-winded, meandering about needless subjects for me. Might be just me.

I miss the excitement, it's very down to earth entry, and the turns you suggesting are a bit hard to buy.

Good job on entering.

I love your title and I love your tag line.. it's more what's on a poster than a logline but I love it for a short challenge like this.

Spacing off .. seems like someone's using a free screenwriting software... use industry standard of fix spacing.

JEENA
Shit! No time for this.
-- right after this dialogue you SHOW her rushing out.. so we know there's no time or she's late or whatever but things like this can be cut out of the dialogue. Show us ... do not tell us.

I think this one needs a little more work. It didn't feel funny. Not really a rom/com feeling for me.

Good job completing owc though!

So, first para you describe her running out of the room she's in, down some stairs and into her car - all without starting a new scene.

To be honest, formatting, typos etc abound - I'll assume this is down to getting it done to a deadline.

So I'll concentrate on story...

Okay so there's not really any romance in this or comedy in particular, but it has a tone that I liked for some reason.

Well done for getting one in.