Manxman, please keep to the spirit of the anon challenge - constructive and helpful feedback is appreciated.
If you're knowledgeable, share at least some of your knowledge in your critique.

Also, there's no need to quote Don's listing.

Just post your comments at the bottom of the thread - Quick Reply, or More Post Options' if you want to quote dialogue etc.

Feel free to post again minus the negative and potentially damaging sentiment.

LIke the title and logline.

Love the way you opened up with the dead body.

Appreciate the structure... this feels like Pia's writing but who knows.

Good writing on display.

For me... it's not a rom/com.

Hi Writer,

This one is interesting.

It has a strong, original concept and it'll be easy to film but it feels more like a black comedy than a rom-com.

The dialogue is good, but there's some room for improvement.

Like other fellow SS'ers, I think this will work better as a standalone entry, outside the OWC. It has a lot of potential.

Good job and keep working, you have something here.

When one is this far down on the comment chain most shorts have been critiqued - right or wrong - so let me look for the good.

The writing style is good, the dialog is solid, the story is out of the box, and both characters are interesting.

As I read through the script I kept looking for Rom Com signposts but by the time I was through it didn't feel romantic or humorous. Quirky.

But, a big nod to the writer for crafting an unusual and engaging story.