The writing itself is good! I like how you take your time to emphasize small moments, although - in this story - it does get a little repetitive, I think. I would have liked to have a bit more story here; some development/closure/growth for Henry. But you kept my interest without any dialogue or interaction between characters - which I always enjoy, if well done.

Writer,

Well done on entering. I appreciate what you were going for here, I do. Problem is you took an awfully long route to get there. We're constantly getting descriptions of things, way too much. I get that you needed to fill in space because of the no dialogue thing, and I get that. Still, it got to be a bit much. It's like we followed your protag's every single move and it got a bit tedious. I'd say lose some, trim it. Overall, not bad, but dark, sad, and the story never really had a conclusion other than the status quo.

Steve

Writing is good in this one although there was a lack of a solid story and at times it became a bit repetitive with each or every other line like Henry this... Henry this... Henry this... just resulted in me tuning out a bit. Decent job though overall.

I found this a bit of a slog to get through, partly because there is no dialogue but also because the logline pretty much tells the entire story... contains the entire story's substance. We don't learn anything about the protag or his family. This is a very simple tale of somebody burying his family during a virus outbreak. That's it. No story, really. Written well, but the lack of dialogue hurts the read.

Criteria Met (Y/N) – I don't care.
Story (1-5) – 1
Characters (1-5) – 1
Dialogue (1-5) - 1
Writing (1-5) – 3
Overall (1-10) – 3

Some solid writing here, but there's barely any story.  Leaves me feelin' kinda blah.