Fast read.  Straight into the action but it never really lets up enough to give us time to orientate ourselves to your characters’ world.

An idea like this works better when you’ve spent some time with the good guys and seen them get kicked around a bit beforehand—build up a sense of injustice that needs avenging.

I like the idea of the bad guys getting more than they bargained for but there was never any doubt that Eabha would triumph and the raiders would meet a violent end.  In that sense it’s rather one note, hitting the same beat throughout which gets a little repetitive.

Entertaining enough to follow along and I appreciate the period setting after a lot of sci-fi but for me it would feel better served as the end of a longer piece than the whole of a short.

Good luck.

Code EABHA (cont'd) They'll be back.

As zombies? I don't understand how they can come back from that.

Another Beowulf-inspired story, it seems. It was easy to read. The action flowed nicely.

Criteria Met (Y/N) – I don't care.
Story (1-5) –  3
Characters (1-5) – 4
Dialogue (1-5) – 3
Writing (1-5) – 4
Overall (1-10) – 7

Hey all, thanks for your generous notes, some really useful points made.

I will be taking some of these on board when I eventually get round to the feature version, of which I envisage this as the opening.

A quick couple of answers/responses if I may.

Vocabulary... yep, I do like a good word and may use some that are less familiar, purely personal belief is that occasional use adds to the style of the writing. And I've yet to actually have a producer or director query anything of this type... there's always a balance and maybe 'sigil' tipped it

Vikings not really standing a chance, very good point that will be remedied in any future version.

Yep. 'they'll be back' should definitely have been 'more will come'

Gum, no, not familiar with Sylphs but I'll look them up, tx.

Again thanks all for the helpful comments and to Rene for running it and Don for being Don.