I feel like some of your sentences are kinda backward...a couple examples that I switched to show you what I mean...
Inside a brightly lit lab, a gloved hand inspects a purple-black ALIEN SEED the size of a marble.

Surrounded by dazzling lab equipment, RICK, late-30s, handsome, in need of a shave, inspects the seed at his desk.

So this was just okay for me. The writing needs work. It was a tough read in some places. Not smooth. Some parts dragged, some went way too fast, and the dialog...way too stiff.  Didn't sound natural.

Just keep at it.

Code Unclear words, but a familiar melody.

What familiar melody?

This story was so slow I actually had it down as a romance. The action all of a sudden on page 6 was a surprise and not really a good one. I know what happens now with the rest of the story. They're pretty easy stories to write from there onwards. So, I skipped through the boring 'fight' scene that pretty much lasted the final four pages. Probably easier to watch than read, but with this story, the action is too jarring and unexpected after 6 pages of light drama. As this is an action piece then, with only 10-pages, the action needs to arrive sooner.

Criteria Met (Y/N) – I don't care.
Story (1-5) –  2.5
Characters (1-5) – 3.5
Dialogue (1-5) – 3
Writing (1-5) – 3.5
Overall (1-10) – 6.25

Thanks to everyone who gave this a read, and tons of thanks for the comments: for the kind words, but also for the honest criticism - I'll try to take it to heart.

I found it difficult to work with both a time and a page limit, and while I think that the script suffered because of that, a lot of the commenters address things that I can't just blame on those reasons. Gotta work on the dialogue, the pacing, and try to not get carried away with my action lines. Sounding young as Warren said, also continues to be a nuisance

The story's familiarity was a mistake I wanted to make, I guess. I love sci-fi horror and this was my first time having a go at it.

It's odd that two comments mentioned the script's margins/spacing. I use Trelby with default settings, but I'll look into it.

I might choose to delete the script, though, since I'm not too happy with it and don't see myself fixing it right away.

The OWC's been a valuable experience for me, so thanks again. Now it's back to the drawing board, I guess.

Quoted from Dan_P It's odd that two comments mentioned the script's margins/spacing. I use Trelby with default settings, but I'll look into it.

To my untrained eye, the right-hand margins looked off - out of interest I rewrote your first page in Writerduet and it came in at over 1 page using that format (Character name, dialogue and an action block pushed onto page two) - over the course of a 10-page script it would look to add on an extra 2 pages at least.

The first page also looks like it starts too high - but probably because there is no FADE IN.

Spacing before scene header - personally I prefer triple-spacing (two blank lines) as it clearly separates the next scene from the previous and creates a bit more white space. According to Storysense, triple-spacing is standard but double-spacing is acceptable.
I have no idea what the standard is, I just think triple is easier on the eye. Anyway, I think it's the right margin that looks off


P.S well done for getting stuck into the OWC and offering up reviews - Hopefully you return for more of them in the future.

Quoted from Matthew Taylor out of interest I rewrote your first page in Writerduet and it came in at over 1 page using that format

Thanks for taking the time, Matthew. I'll compare the margins to other screenwriting software and get em fixed. I've never questioned the default settings tbh. Oh yes, the triple-spacing is worth considering. I actually didn't know it's that common, but I've seen it here a lot and I like the clarity of it.

Quoted from Matthew Taylor P.S well done for getting stuck into the OWC and offering up reviews - Hopefully you return for more of them in the future.

Yes, definitely want to stick around!