Cheers James, glad you dug it.

Yeah, I've been paying out on Cleveland in each of my last few scripts! Its taken over from my Beatle refs.

Someone asked why I gave the natives normal names - I couldn't be arsed making up foreign 'ooga booga' type names!

Thanks to all who read and commented

stevie

Stevie, for an obvious pisser, I liked this one.

I think it was well written and had alot of funny shit in it.  It went on a bit too long, IMO, and the middle started to drag, but that's probably cause you continue with the same line of comedy, and it just got a bit old.

Good effort for sure, here bud!

Not great but I will say it worked for me. The majority of the humor came from the fact that it was a cannibalistic tribe in Africa and yet they all spoke like normal dudes, at times even like white suburbia. This joke carried through the whole script so even though not everything zinged, it was able to sustain itself just the same. The "I'm gay" bit brought a smile to my face as did the Cleveland and PowerPoint bits. Pretty cute. Even though this was obviously taking the piss, it did stand out amongst the others. At least to me. At the very least, a change of scenery... literally. Not an easy feet in any OWC. I get so tired of reading the same shit, whether it be good or bad. So kudos, dude. Not bad.

Cheers for the read and comments James.

Although this was a comedy, i still tried to use the theme in it, vegans v carnies.  So, i guess it worked for most people.