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Locations & Sets - EXT. lake w/ marina and campground, deep water shot, Actors - JOE (40), CHERYL (40), DREW (-), Hillbilly #1 & #2, ED (40) Costumes - DREW's jeans and shirt, Moldy hillbilly outfits x2 Props - Urn w/ seal & ashes, penlight (I think you're going to need more than a penlight), tent, backpack, photograph of DREW, envelope with will, arrow through neck and one through chest, rusty shotgun Audio FX - thunder rumbles, immediate thunder crack, shotgun firing Visual FX - thing moving in water, dark clouds looming, lightning strike to tree, shotgun firing Other - Canoe rental (hopefully near site), stabilized john boat to film canoe scene, waterproof housing for underwater shot, scuba gear x 2, big fan for wind effects + extension cords or portable generator + fuel, light for lightning effect, Jeep, burning tree light, fogger, area rain equipment w/ water supply, MUA for arrows and moldy hillbillies, Comments - LOL! Nice sequel action going on! The will in the tent was a bit over the top. More of a regular ghost story than Gothic horror, though
So this is an amusing tribute -- with an amiable WTF quality about it -- and I suppose it fits the requirements of the challenge if one stretches those boundaries like a batch of saltwater taffy.
The title makes zero sense. You know that, right?
I think all of the V.O. for Drew is a mistake when he is standing right there. The scenario is already silly enough that you might as well allow him to speak.
And you should devise a better, more visual method of letting us know that zombie #4 rising from the waters is, in fact, his dad. Simply telling us so in the script is not adequate. Maybe you can have Cheryl ask, "Hey...Is that Jon Voight??" as Joe bundles her into the Jeep.
This one will not win any votes for Best-in-Show -- pretty sure -- but at 8 pages it is smart enough not to overstay its welcome -- and it is unique enough to raise a wry smirk amongst what is otherwise a fairly gloomy collection of Gothic offerings.
I only had one problem with this story; did not seem to adhere to either components of the OWC requirements. Nothing Gothic, no misunderstood ghosts.
But, other than that, it was really fun satire! Bringing back the ghosts of Deliverance is a cool idea. This was clearly designed to toy with cabin in the woods horror, and takes the ultimate poke at all those characters in horror movies that go into places we in the audience know they shouldn't. In this case, the irony is it's the father who causes the problem himself by requesting his ashes be spread along the lake, leading his children into the same danger he once faced.
There was one other thing that disappointed me. I was waiting for a ghost to come out and yell, "squeal like a pig! Come on, squeaaaaaal!!"
Thanks to all who read and reviewed this. The idea for it was the first I got, and I usually run with my instincts. I couldn't see myself doing a full on period piece Gothic thing, well, not with a decent story to go with it.
I briefly considered something to do with Jack the Ripper but went with the Deliverance 'sequel'.
Some reviews suggested I wasn't really trying on this which annoyed me. As Ryan and Cornie can testify, I worked hard on it, scrapping most of an earlier 12 page version.
While I'm here, I'm gonna finally get my digit outta my arse and enter a comp, the LA Comedy festival one. Am entering my zombie road trip Headlong, but am looking for help with:
A great log And, perhaps a new title. You don't have to read the script, the thread is on page 2 off the Comedy features, with current log.
Any help would be appreciated. I am re-reading the script now, making some edits. I have till Nov 2 to enter to get the 45 buck fee - 42 in Oz cash, bargain, woohoo!!!!
The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards. Third - Honolulu Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr