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Sandra Elstree.
Posted: October 29th, 2011, 6:20pm Report to Moderator
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Quoted from jwent6688


I couldn't get passed your second line because of the miss-spelling.

Good job commenting on the OWC...

James



You're hilarious, James!   I needed that. It's been a rough week.

Sandra



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jwent6688
Posted: October 29th, 2011, 6:30pm Report to Moderator
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Wherever I go, there Jwent.

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And I couldn't get past yours.

Zing!


Phil



Fuck you Phil, for trashing the best thing I've written in the past several weeks...

James


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DarrenJamesSeeley
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Ryan 1 wrote my favorite of the bunch, but I'm very impressed with the other Darren's work! Great job everyone for giving the OWC a go.


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bert
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Interesting reveals.

The anonymous thing usually drives me crazy, but I have to say this time I think it served its purpose well.

Some reliable favorites such as Phil, Brea, and Balt failed to lead the pack -- when they might have otherwise steamrolled the less familiar entrants on name recognition alone -- had the names been there.

And some well-deserved props were handed out to some of the new guys who otherwise might have received little attention -- and they also participated in the proceedings with solid reading contributions -- so a big cheers to Darren and Rene.  Way to go guys.

As for the total non-reader entrants -- while Jeff's post may be too harsh, Cornetto's is too forgiving -- and I am certainly closer to Jeff on that spectrum.

If I "accidentally" read a script from such an author during the anonymous phase, I go back and delete my feedback, and encourage others to do the same.  If the author is watching the boards at all, a dramatically shrunken thread at least sends a message.  At the very least, it helps drop them down to the cellar.

There are a few entrants I want to look at now, for sure.


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Hugh Hoyland
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Great job Darren! Very well done indeed.

Harley


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Dreamscale
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Funny, you A-Holes!  Little hammied here.  Sorry for the poor spelling.  I'm not on my computer and I don't have any spellchecking going on.

Bert, good idea.  I will go back and pull my posts on those writers who didn't provide any feedback.  Anyone know who they all are, to make it easier for all of us to do the same?

I'll also go back and reread those by contributing writers that I originally gave up on and give some solid feedback, that will hopefully help.  
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dogglebe
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Quoted from jwent6688
Fuck you Phil, for trashing the best thing I've written in the past several weeks...


In the passed several weeks...

I'm screwing with you now.  Your grammar was right this time, but your script blew goat balls... whichever one it was.


Phil

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wonkavite
Posted: October 29th, 2011, 9:50pm Report to Moderator
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To James...  *I* thought your "F-you, Phil" retort was hysterical.  Hear hear!  Give the big guy a good bitch slap for me!  

Sincerely, "Mrs. Phil"....    
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ReneC
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Congrats to Darren, great job. I voted for ya.

I guess I have some explaining to do for mine. Glad a bunch of you liked it, I'm still quite pleased with the pages, with some tweaking I think it'll be a worthy addition to my portfolio.

This was fun, and I really like this site. I'll be seeing a lot of you guys.


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I wish I could have gotten to more scripts, been super busy this month. Enjoyed most of what I read.

congrats everyone.


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Reef Dreamer
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Thanks Dreamscale and Ryan, i appreciate the kind words.

Falling Angels was only my second short. I have LOTS to learn. I will post seperately on this.,

In the meantime i am aware that some of my reviews were rushed, so if anybody wants clarity or a second read let me know. I have re read a handful and they were all better second time!

I  note there has been a debate about whether to let new writters join the OWC. I can see both sides of the debate, especially when a poor effort is posted, but for me it has been very useful and a great education.

All the best


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The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
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greg
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Hey, cool.  Congrats Darren on garnering all those votes!

My favorite is Allured, another Henrik script.  A lot of twist endings in this OWC, but I enjoyed that one the most.  

Greg


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Well done Darren, congrats!



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Congrats Darren enjoyed the read as well as several others.
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This is why I love coming here!
Thanks ever so much for the congrats, and for the support, it made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside and as a newbie it was a right shock to see the results!
I kept checking every few hours incase there was some terrible mistake.
Congrats to everyone who entered, I only commented about what I think I know about and I enjoyed ALL of the scripts on different levels.
Something can always be harvested from other peoples words no matter whether you understand them or not.

(p.s. did anyone find the secret message in the dialogue?)


I now go on to address some of the critique offered so you can stop reading this now if you like


I went into this not knowing a thing about gothic (other than what wikipedia had to say) and only my third short and fourth actual script after taking up writing only a few months ago. Took my cue from 60's Hammer films.
Its my second OWC, the first was last month's "Waiting" (the dentist/hells waiting room)
I took all the critique that was offered, and wrote a quick second draft including some of it.
Yes it was cliche but I beleived that "cliche" is just anotehr name for "trope" and what is a setting without its trademarks? Cliche by deffinition is familiar.
Melinda and Madeline were meant to have similiar names.
I hated the way Charles escaped from Poe too but couldnt think of anything better in time, stories are full of convenience IMO but the new draft is a bit more realistic(?)
I loved the suggestion about the eyes in the portrait at the end.
Melinda and Charles were meant to gush at each other at dinner, not Madeline and Charles oops.
When Poe looks down at the knife and says "Belinda, you betrayed me" Belinda was the name of the "pretty lady" charles used, hence, he felt betrayed. I changed the two lead girls names later on in writing and forgot to go back and change "Belinda" to something different. double oops.
Wanted to give more explanation as to why Madeline betrayed the VIscount at the end but was running out of space and didnt want the twist to be too obvious.
I felt that the "and forgiveness" line was enough foreshadowing.
Oh yes - the dialogue, I read a bit of Bronte, Williams, Fitzpatrick and Emlyn to get the feel so thought it was well researched. (and I am English lol)
Anyhow, thanks again, thats made my month!
Daz


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