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Don
Posted: April 5th, 2014, 8:52am Report to Moderator
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Folks,

I'm processing the scripts.  I should start getting them posted by tonight (edt) or tomorrow morning.  We had over 30 entries - 28 more than I thought we'd get considering the topic.  

Don


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Wow.  

You SSers are impressive!
Cool pool of work to review.



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30 entries?  OMG.  Don should be getting paid.  Isn't there a donation link around here?  Personally I'm teetering on bankruptcy at the current moment, but maybe these hundreds of lurkers can be reminded and encouraged to give a little.   Hint, hint.
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Dag.  30??

And yeah... Don SHOULD be getting paid.  Is there a donation link around??
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Maybe someone can start an SS telethon.   Where's Jerry Lewis when ya' need him.
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Actually...there IS a donation link! It's hidden though. On the left side of the home page. You have to scroll down a ways to see it. It's very easy to miss. IMO it should be right on top for all to see.   

On another note...30 shark scripts? Very surprising!  Looking forward to reading what you guys came up with.  


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Quoted from Don
Folks,

I'm processing the scripts.  I should start getting them posted by tonight (edt) or tomorrow morning.  We had over 30 entries - 28 more than I thought we'd get considering the topic.  

Don


Well, I did say in the intro that up to two entries are fine and that team ops are alright. I also put a shout out in MP. But all that aside...

Over 30!

Even I didn't expect that much. I was thinbking arounf 15-20.


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Quoted from mmmarnie
Actually...there IS a donation link! It's hidden though. On the left side of the home page. You have to scroll down a ways to see it. It's very easy to miss. IMO it should be right on top for all to see.   


Found it.

https://www.paypal.com/us/cgi-.....808f90be4e2dc1450b56

Not trying to derail this thread but anyone interested in starting a SS webathon thread?

Has it ever been done?

I'm nearly broke but I'd donate $10.00 next week, but only if fifty people match my donation.

Thoughts?
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Quoted from NickSedario

I'm nearly broke but I'd donate $10.00 next week, but only if fifty people match my donation. Thoughts?


I'm in.  

Re: 30 scripts.  Phew. I promise, I'll read/review at least one a day.  Kinda crunched on the Blog, but I'll fit that in, at least.  (Hey, maybe a few reviews'll result from this OWC!)  
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Quoted from wonkavite


I'm in.  


Okey dokey.  Let's give it a shot.

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30 entries?  Wow...that's alot.  I wonder how many scripts of the writers will actually read and review entries?

If you entered a script, you better read and comment on at least 10 others, preferrably 20+.

I'll read them all.  Wonder how many different shark species we'll see.  Maybe we'll even get a scene from Mega Shark vs. Mecha Shark and hopefully, Debbie Gibson will show up as a character.
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30 entries! Beer me.

I'll pledge to read them all.  I'm interested to see what some folks came up with here.  I guess we will find out shortly...
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Wow! That's a lot of scripts. I'll read as many as I can, but I'm forewarning everyone that if the script hasn't interested me by the 4-page mark, I might not finish it and move on to another script that will. And if I get through all of those with time leftover, I'll go back to the ones I didn't finish the first time around and give them a fair shake.


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Quoted from oJOHNNYoNUTSo
30 entries! Beer me.

I'll pledge to read them all.  I'm interested to see what some folks came up with here.  I guess we will find out shortly...


Add a couple of shots in there as well.   I'm in agreement with ya Johnny, curious to see what peeps came up with. I'll definitely read every entry but like Jeff pointed out hopefully others will read all of the scripts if not the majority of them.

Best of luck to everyone who entered
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Wow, over 30 entries! I managed to read and review them all last time, I'll endevour to do the same again, it may take me all week though.


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Happy birthday to DJS too!  Nice job with this OWC!



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re: Debbie Gibson - I have a buddy who has made three films (Wrote, Produced, Directed). One of them has Debbie Gibson in a cameo!
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Quoted from TimWestland
re: Debbie Gibson - I have a buddy who has made three films (Wrote, Produced, Directed). One of them has Debbie Gibson in a cameo!


  Nice.  She's absolutely hilarious in one of those Mega Shark Asylum shitflicks.
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A couple of years back during an OWC, Don started putting asterisks next to scripts where the author had been reviewing other scripts - I think it was after a few days of them being up on the boards.

Then we were able to choose if we would read a script by someone who hadnt got involved or acknowledged the thread.  This was a good idea which combatted the anonymous aspect too.

Just a thought but it was disgraceful last OWC that perps didn't read any others especially one who was voted equal first.



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30?  Gees Louise.  I'll read as many as I can.  Kinda crunched for time at the minute.  

Didn't enter myself, I tried, but there were only so many things I could do with a time traveling cyborg shark from the year 2458 landing in the Pirate Era.  

And since it was the only idea that spawned in my crammed noggin I doubt the thought of a cyborg shark capable of shooting lasers from its eyes could be matched by a bunch of scallywags drunk on rum.

Any-who... congrats to all that entered.  I'll check them out!
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Quoted from stevie
A couple of years back during an OWC, Don started putting asterisks next to scripts where the author had been reviewing other scripts - I think it was after a few days of them being up on the boards.

Understandable principle utility.

However, due to my personal approach, which I acknowledge is VERY nonstandard, of first reviewing all submissions (and you guys can bank I will), going back to sometimes modify opinions & observations, then posting all results simultaneously - the utility you've suggest will make it unfairly appear as if "this fecking bastard here" isn't contributing.

I suppose I could pop in a qualitative comment "Reviewed & assessed." on each submission thread after I've read them, and you guys will have to sweat bullets and trust that after I've read them all I'll post a quantified review with the fullest practical perspective I can (like it or not).

Hopefully that will keep my submission off the naughty list, if Don chooses to go this route (looks like a lot of hassle to influence a few penile-encephaly sufferers).

I've got the history.
I'll have a late start to next week's reviews.
(Kinda counting on at least two or three of these to have fecal format so that I can ditch 'em on page one.)
You guys will have to just trust me.




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Understandable principle utility.

However, due to my personal approach, which I acknowledge is VERY nonstandard, of first reviewing all submissions (and you guys can bank I will), going back to sometimes modify opinions & observations, then posting all results simultaneously - the utility you've suggest will make it unfairly appear as if "this fecking bastard here" isn't contributing.

I suppose I could pop in a qualitative comment "Reviewed & assessed." on each submission thread after I've read them, and you guys will have to trust that after I've read them all I'll post a quantified review with the fullest practical perspective I can (like I or not).

Hopefully that will keep my submission off the naughty list, if Don chooses to go this route (looks like a lot of hassle to influence a few penile-encephaly sufferers).

I've got the history.
I'll have a late start to next week's reviews.
(Kinda counting on at least two or three of these to have fecal format so that I can ditch 'em on page one.)
You guys will have to just trust me.


Yeah all good points Ray

Look without sounding anal about it, but we get annoyed, is all. That's why I don't really like the anon but even though it's a tradition.

If you can see that certain perps are doing ZERO reading then we can give their work ZERO reads

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Agree with my mate, Stevie and Ray.

Something should be done so the A-Hols who don't participate don't get the reads either...as they don't deserve them.

I'll gte on these ASAP, but I'm doing ribs with my Lochie and pounding down liquor like it's 1983 or somewhere around that era.  
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If you enter, then you should read. I went out of my way to read all of the last entries. I felt obligated as I had entered. Especially if you post here regularly. But that's just my standards. It's about respect.

In fact I even read a few twice after feeling that I may have unfairly judged them due to tiredness or whatever else may have been bugging me at the time.
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I'm a little late to the party here. 30 scripts? Good work, but with about a week to read them all that's about four a day - might have to keep my reviews nice & short - hope I get through them & good luck to every one
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So that I don't lose track of what I've read I think I'll make a note here:

The Nauticca Knot
Lord Laughs at the Wicked
The Ordeal
Loyalty
Shark Tale
The Shark Doctor
*Terror at Sea

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I will resume reading after I do my workout lol

I won't be reading or reviewing any pissers or comedy ones that shouldn't be there.

Sorry to be anal,about the comedy thing but this would ve been a great theme to do a really good comedy script.

But it wasn't allowed so no reads of them from me lol



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Quoted from stevie
... I won't be reading or reviewing any pissers or comedy ones that shouldn't be there...


And, we all know that's just cause you're all bitter and twisted.  
'No Soup For You!'



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Quoted from LC


And, we all know that's just cause you're all bitter and twisted.  
'No Soup For You!'



The delicious irony Lib, is that I 'invented' the pisstake moniker for these! Lol




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...delicious piss is like iron, Lib! Lol


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I apologise for being a total flog





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Well I gave Don a heads up on a strange script "Retrevial" . There is an alternate solution I'm sure.
I'n fact, I'm almost positive.

**UPDATE**
Don let me know that the writer contacted him and is resubmitting.
The old thread for that script is gone and the updated one will be in the next batch or two

You better be good.
Big Shark is watching..

**UPDATE #2**

Don fixed the link.
Are there anymore that need fixing?


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I just did a headcountt. As of the time I write this, there is 20 scripots.
Don said there were a little over 30.
More today! Wooit Woot!


"I know you want to work for Mo Fuzz. And Mo Fuzz wants you to. But first, I'm going to need to you do something for me... on spec." - Mo Fuzz, Tapeheads, 1988
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If I have to read...

....were gonna need a bigger boat....

One more time, I'll...have no idea, but it's getting annoying, and I have 18/20 scripts to go.

Mind you, I would remind readers this is a OWC so not to expect perfect scripts, or the best writing, so go easy on those easy to fix issues.

So far the scripts have been a mixed bag but they do show decent variation considering a shark had to be somewhere around


My scripts  HERE

The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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Quoted from RD
If I have to read...

....were gonna need a bigger boat....

One more time, I'll...have no idea, but it's getting annoying, and I have 18/20 scripts to go.


Put the cat out. Remove all breakables from the vicinity. Ensure loved ones are at a safe distance. Remain calm. This is not a test.

Another fellow traveller. Patience, hopper of grass. This will pass.

R


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The Deuce - OWC - now on STS

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Put the cat out. Remove all breakables from the vicinity. Ensure loved ones are at a safe distance. Remain calm. This is not a test.

Another fellow traveller. Patience, hopper of grass. This will pass.

R


I read your wise words. I kicked...err put the cat out...slow breaths and felt calm

Then I read another bloody script with bigger boat in it, yup number four....I've got the twitches now.

Off to bed


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The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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New to all this. Is there a link where all the scripts from the one week challenge are listed. With so many, it's hard to keep up. Thank you


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Quoted from Grey
New to all this. Is there a link where all the scripts from the one week challenge are listed. With so many, it's hard to keep up. Thank you


You should be able to find them all here.  http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-OWC0414/

Thanks for reading, btw.  


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Hey, are we missing a script or two?

1     -     A Twist in the Tail
2     -     Alaskan Sound
3     -     American Shark in London
4     -     Blood in the Water
5     -     Current Events
6     -     Finning
7     -     Genetic Engineering
8     -     Hunt
9     -     Immersion Therapy
10     -     Jail Bait
11     -     Jaws: Pe'ahi
12     -     Jowls
13     -     Lord Laughs at the Wicked
14     -     Loyalty
15     -     Nauticca Knot
16     -     Reel Tension
17     -     Retrieval
18     -     Samebito
19     -     Sentient
20     -     Shark Dreaming
21     -     Shark Tale
22     -     Terror At Sea
23     -     The Lagoon
24     -     The Ordeal
25     -     The Shark Doctor
26     -     The Stillness in the Water
27     -     The Tides of Caeus
28     -     To Catch a Predator
29     -     Up from the Depths 2


Did a couple of jokers get DQed?





EDIT/UPDATE: Thank you, DJS!  

EDIT/UPDATE #2: Thank you, Don!  




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Quoted from RayW
Hey, are we missing a script or two?


Yep. Little Miss Sally's Last Surf is nowhere to be found  

Seriously though there were a few issues with some links and pdf troubles. That could have been a factor. Maybe some didn't submit in a pdf but a doc, or perhaps the writers are sparing the masses from a fate worse than death. Don did allow that one pager, which wasn't an error but intentional by that writer.

Could be anything.


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One script was removed at the request of the writer.

There are a total of 29 scripts.

Don



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I didn't know one could remove their scripts from the challenge.  Shame, as I entered mine without conscious thought and pretty much butchered the thing, lol.

By that I mean mine was originally 30 pages (not the challenge version) and I wanted to enter so I hacked it into little pieces and threw it in a blender.  What came out was a mangled mess.

But it's okay, right?  I entered.  Guess that's all that really matters is I participated.  

Back to reads now.  I'll try to get 10 more done today.  My plan is to read as many as possible.  I'll also leave a comment on my own when the writers are revealed what the heck went wrong with it.

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But it's okay, right?  I entered.  Guess that's all that really matters is I participated.  


All that really matters is that you had a go. You exercised your story-telling muscles. Maybe you missed on this one... it's not an easy genre to come up with something that's going to appeal to people. Plus, you don't have to appeal to everyone anyway. And writers make for some of the worst readers... and often our advice isn't worth a shit. So, don't worry about it. Hope my review of your work wasn't too harsh... if I've reviewed it yet.
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All that really matters is that you had a go. You exercised your story-telling muscles. Maybe you missed on this one... it's not an easy genre to come up with something that's going to appeal to people. Plus, you don't have to appeal to everyone anyway. And writers make for some of the worst readers... and often our advice isn't worth a shit. So, don't worry about it. Hope my review of your work wasn't too harsh... if I've reviewed it yet.


I knew it was hacked before I entered it, lol.  I sheared 20 pages off with a chainsaw.  No one's been harsh, it's far below the bar of what I usually write.

I'll be uploading the real version when the OWC is over.  

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Still, some pretty solid entries in this OWC.  My favorite at the moment is "Current Events", excellent work from the writer, though I've no clue who it is.

9 down, 17 to go.  Should get most of them read by the weekend.  Anyone who can churn out a story in 7 days is a good writer IMO.  

Can't wait to see what the remaining 17 have in store.  

Though, I must admit, the concept of "shorts" still baffles me.  I could never really develop anything as well as some of these OWC entries in such a short page span.
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And writers make for some of the worst readers... and often our advice isn't worth a shit.


Alas, this is more often than not true.

Especially in an OWC where we are all rushed, comparing with our own scripts, checking the criteria and comparing with others.

even amongst the wiring community I find some folk to be excellent reviewers despite not being perhaps the best of writers.


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Alas, this is more often than not true.

Especially in an OWC where we are all rushed, comparing with our own scripts, checking the criteria and comparing with others.

even amongst the wiring community I find some folk to be excellent reviewers despite not being perhaps the best of writers.


I'd much rather get notes from a producer or story analyst... but you're right, there are some good reviewers in the writing community too and they usually aren't the best writers.
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I suck at reviewing. The only area I feel I could maybe help someone is with the writing itself. Leaning things out and whatnot.  But for structure, character development, stuff like that, I never know what to say to people. Not everyone is good at that. I hold teachers in the highest regard because it takes a certain kind of person to be able to do that...to instruct. To break something apart, see what's not working, then give advice on how to fix it. I break something apart and all I have in front of me is a bunch of broken parts.




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Just tell them what you think. Fixing it is their problem. Most do want to know. And (this isn't directed at you) don't get too excited. Chance would be a fine thing.

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I agree with Rendevous. I'm sure Marn does fine with reviews. Say what you liked and didn't like. Pure, honest criticism is the best kind. The problem with the reviews of many other writers is they often bring baggage...preconceptions on what needs to be there or doesn't, or how it needs to be written. Pure and honest...if fairly considered...works best.
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Enjoying my first OWC. I must say the variety of the scripts here is amazing. I read the challenge and wrote a simple shark attack script because that's all I could think of. But here we have a cartoon, two gangster films, a samurai script, a reality piece, and some other odd balls. Very creative, but I guess we're all writers or something like the sort.

I've been trying to give feedback as best I can. I'm not a grammar or format expert but I think I do well with story elements so I try to help on that.  I would never put too much stock in what one person says in a review, but if multiple readers make the same comment, that has value and means something. I've gotten some positive and negative feedback on my entry but it's all good feedback. I'm still new at this and all opinions are appreciated.


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Good points, Cameron. I think you'll find yourself quite welcome here and your opinions appreciated. Good luck!
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Yeah Kev...there are def some writers with their own preconceptions. Instead of accepting someone's vision and storyline and making a suggestion on how they might make it better, they put their own spin on what they think your story should be. Yuck.

Then you get reviewers like Rendevous. Useful, subtle suggestions mixed in with quirky and sometimes random thoughts.  LOL. But respectful and always entertaining.


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Marnie - I think this happens a lot, but then people do have preconceptions on how things should be - I actually think it's quite hard to do a good review of a script, especially of a better writer -- but I think the variety of angles people come from is useful - I've got my own ideals on how something should be, but then other people come from a completely different angle, and adding them all up gives a good picture.
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Hey, can we get a consolidated post with all the entries linked in one list - like with some other OWCs?  Don't know about anyone else, but I find that extremely helpful in tracking what I've read and what I haven't...!  
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I wonder if I can C&P from my worksheet including the links...


  1. A Twist in the Tail - After four shark killings disturb the locals in Miami, the authority decide to pay out a $15,000 reward to the person who kills the biggest Tiger Shark.  Joel has the upper hand in hunt but does he have more to deal with than a sixteen foot shark?
  2. Alaskan Sound - Weekend warriors on vacation in Prince William Sound are seduced by the power of the Alaskan Wilderness, as they seek a rare trophy: the head of a vicious Salmon Shark.
  3. American Shark in London - A great white interrupts a gangland execution.
  4. Blood in the Water - A friendly wager between three friends, a race across the lake. What they quickly discover is - this swim will be a race for their lives.
  5. Current Events -  An ambitious journalist discovers that the story she's been chasing is liable to chase her back.
  6. Finning - A down-on-his-luck fisherman is hired by a wealthy entrepreneur to obtain the final, and most dangerous, addition to his unusual collection of shark fins.
  7. Genetic Engineering - When irresponsible science once again breaks laws of nature, reshaping of interests is undeniable.
  8. Hunt - A killer whale faces adversity in more ways than one.
  9. Immersion Therapy - Dr. T's training is put to the test on the final day of aquaphobia desensitization class when his group therapy patients finds their phobia compounded by an immanent and genuine water hazard.
  10. Jail Bait - Three bros find themselves stranded on a party raft in the middle of the ocean after a day of drinking.
  11. Jaws: Pe'ahi - A surfer travels to Hawaii to ride the one of the most dangerous waves in the world.
  12. Jowls - Four people on a boat. In the water. With a shark. A big one. Beeg teeth. Very beeg.
  13. Lord Laughs at the Wicked - A serial killer at sea hits a snag.
  14. Loyalty - Sometimes, sharks aren't the worst thing in the water.
  15. Nauticca Knot - When a young girl from the seaside town of Nauticca Harbor befriends a curious little visitor, she discovers firsthand the power of friendship, and in the process, unravels one of life's oddest mysteries.
  16. Reel Tension - A former soldier fights the battle of his life, when he reels in a massive shark.
  17. Retrieval - A smuggler kidnaps a newlywed to assist him in recovering his loot, which is guarded by a rogue shark.
  18. Samebito - Ten years after losing his brother to the jaws of a mythical shark named Samebito, a 12th century Japanese fisherman enlists the aide of a ship's Captain to hunt down and exact his vengeance.
  19. Sentient - In the faraway future, a hitman on death row is forced to recount his story before he is killed.
  20. Shark Dreaming - After the death of his partner, a fisherman is tormented by a life changing decision he must make.
  21. Shark Tale - An old man explains the balance of give and take when the sea is concerned.
  22. Terror At Sea - It was supposed to be a day of fun on the ocean but as one family quickly learns...the ocean has many secrets.
  23. The Lagoon - Two Union soldiers hunt for hidden gold at the end of the Civil War.
  24. The Ordeal - In a post-apocalyptic world, a sacrifice is called for so that others may live. Who will pay the price?
  25. The Shark Doctor - A marine biologist suffering from sex addiction is called by a theme park to diagnose what is killing the great white sharks they plan to feature in a new exhibit.
  26. The Stillness in the Water - An author attempts to teach his nephew the power of stories by recalling a time when a novel he wrote lead to a close encounter with a great white shark.
  27. The Tides of Caeus - A warrior attempts to stop a corrupt pirate from gaining a mystical amulet... and put to rest a fabled monster.
  28. To Catch a Predator - In the summer of 1979, citizens of Fair Haven, Massachusetts were worried about a rogue shark, but one unwelcome guest should have been more concerned about the boy determined to catch it.
  29. Up from the Depths 2 - Young Newlyweds are menaced by a rogue shark while honeymooning on Maui.



Nope.
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Gimme a few and I'll put in all the links.  Grrr...




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Marnie - I think this happens a lot, but then people do have preconceptions on how things should be - I actually think it's quite hard to do a good review of a script, especially of a better writer -- but I think the variety of angles people come from is useful - I've got my own ideals on how something should be, but then other people come from a completely different angle, and adding them all up gives a good picture.


Most suggestions are helpful or at least insightful, but you always get that one chucklehead who suggests things that would actually change the whole dynamic of your story.

I don't want to come down on reviewers though. The fact that someone would take their time to read your story is appreciated.   


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Marnie - I think this happens a lot, but then people do have preconceptions on how things should be - I actually think it's quite hard to do a good review of a script, especially of a better writer -- but I think the variety of angles people come from is useful - I've got my own ideals on how something should be, but then other people come from a completely different angle, and adding them all up gives a good picture.


I for one never comment on format and any issues involving spelling errors, typo's, etc... It's a one week challenge and lets face it, not everyone gets a chance to write for several hours throughout that week and catch the errors. For me, it's all about the story. I will admit I'm not that great at giving reviews so I keep it simple and tell them what I liked and didn't like. I'm never a jerk towards anyone and whether the writer agrees or not with me is up to them but everything comes down to one thing...respect.
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I wonder if I can C&P from my worksheet including the links...
Ham-nation!
Gimme a few and I'll put in all the links.  Grrr...


I've posted a link twice already...

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-OWC0414/  


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Yeah...

That ain't the same.
That's a crazy list of randomly jumping around submissions every time someone comments.



Here: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1396705947/s-57/highlight-/#num57
Now the link to my list is posted twice.




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My link is better. It shows how many people have commented on each script AND viewed the the script's thread!    


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Stop that. It's silly.

Now then. To be serious. If only for a moment.

What happens next?

I don't mean like the weather or if I'll have to discuss my windows.

I mean when are the names being posted up, y'know. For the scripts. Not that banned list at the night club. We won't talk about that.

And when do we judge? The scripts I mean.

All help greatly appreciated.

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Names will be revealed on April 12th, 2014.

Prolly oughtta push that back a half-week and start voting this Saturday, instead



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Only got a few left me thinks *with the exception of Jowls, which I probably won't read unless the author sends me a secret handshake or passcode to convince me * I'm super relieved that each of the writers went in different creative directions, but it also blows me away that sometimes we hit similar notes.

Looking forward to finishing up the rest tomorrow. I've probably ticked off some, apologies if I gave yours an unjust lickin'. All the scripts are great efforts so far!

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Quoted from RayW

Prolly oughtta push that back a half-week and start voting this Saturday, instead



Isn't it just like a fargin' writer. Always re-writin'.
Thus a post will now go under the knide and have a good ol nip/tuck.
One final amendment coming up...
It makes perfect sense to have voting during the coming weekend.


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Names will be revealed on US Tax Day, April 15th.

How bout that? We all good?
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Well next for me is stardom and fame! My entry has already been turned into a feature and below is a trailer. True there's no shark but rules are there for breaking!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4VyY27n6eQs


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To my great surprise there are some very good scripts in this OWC

It's always difficult to compare with previous OWC's etc but to me this feels like one of  the strongest batches I've read, admittedly with a few that require a rather large budget  


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Actors and water don't mix well these days... especially with all the health and safety. Soon as an actor goes in the water the costs are rising no matter what you try to do. Still though, there may be some willing to get their feet wet for a cut price fee.
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I think I’ve read/reviewed them all now. If I’ve missed yours nudge me and I will.

I’ve been pleasantly surprised by the quality and diversity of the entries. When the theme was announced I expected a lot of very similar shark attack stories but the results have been very impressive. Personally there’s going to be quite a few that get the vote from me.


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Some good imagination in the stories. I'm more than half way through.

Agree with Bill, the writing is better than average for OWCs.

A lot of stories didn't really meet the spirit of the assignment. Either there was no shark or no shark attack. Jaws is about a marauding shark, and that was the theme.

I'm not sure I'll be able to vote for a story that doesn't have a shark attack of some sort. Or at least a great struggle with the beast, like Moby Dick.

One I am on the fence about was the one with sharkman. It was one of the better stories. In some ways I lean toward voting for that(though I have more to read). But I'm just not sure if sharkman qualifies for me. I'd feel better if he was in the ocean and attacked. Instead he runs through the hallways and becomes an office shark.

In another well written one, the only shark was in a dream, and it didn't really attack anyone.

But we definitely had a wide variety. No two stories were alike, and most of them were pretty unique from anything I've seen in film.
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It was required that the shark actually attacked someone? I missed that.  That now changes my vote.


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I would not say that it was required. But if the theme was Jaws, I would say there should either be an attacking shark or maybe a battle with the great beast.
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So how/where do we vote when the time comes? This is my first OWC and the voting part is vague to me.

Also... is it common to have "pissers" in these contests? Why would someone waste their/our time with them?
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Also... is it common to have "pissers" in these contests? Why would someone waste their/our time with them?


Ah, the pisser...

Yes, it has become common for a few pissers to creep into every OWC, even though they're usually not allowed and frowned upon by most.

But there is a loyal following among some.

Some feel they are a waste of time and offensive, while others seem to get a kick out of them.

IMO, when they're well done, as several this time around are, I actually realy enjoy them, but tehn again, I guess I'm a pisser connoisseur.

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I would not say that it was required. But if the theme was Jaws, I would say there should either be an attacking shark or maybe a battle with the great beast.


I do have some sympathy of those who didn't, as i think it was permitted.

The title is jaws /shark attack. To me that suggested it either needed to have a shark/shark theme, or a shark attack.

As Daren confirmed...

I never said you had to show the shark. One could treat it as if...you know...the shark isn't working and we get only gli,pses or yellow barrells. Or The Reef where not much of the sharks were seen but they were out there somewhere.

Thus, to me as long as the story had a decent shark presence - i.e. more than just someones favourite shark necklace etc - then it worked.

Probably just as well as i think allowed a decent variation.

I think i have still one or two to do, but as said before some of these are very good. Indeed, i think that after the normal clean up, and having taken the comments on board, a few could be contenders in large competitions. lets see.


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Quoted from TimWestland

Also... is it common to have "pissers" in these contests? Why would someone waste their/our time with them?

No one's holding a gun to your head.

As for the rest of the OWC, I'm gonna finish my reads after the names are revealed.

Done for now.  Congrats on everyone who entered.  It was fun.

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A rogue shark is very specific. One doesn't have to see the rogue shark... perhaps not... but there still needs to be one.
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A rogue shark is very specific. One doesn't have to see the rogue shark... perhaps not... but there still needs to be one.


Agreed - even if it's a Rogue Baby Tiger Shark!  
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"Rogue" just means it's alone. I missed where the rules said the shark had to attack someone. That takes two stories out of my top 3.


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I agree with Dustin. Hate it when then happens! lol

What Darren was trying to accommodate, I belief, is the need to keep the thing low budget. So the shark dragging the barrels down tells us they are battling the shark, even though we don't see it. That's enough. We know what it is, so it's a shark story.

I think will be fine with a story, if there is one, where they battle a killer shark, even if it never attacks them. As long as they are battling a killer shark, and this is a main part of the script.

By main part...I don't mean it has to be the bulk of the pages, but it should be the climactic scene. The one with the kid Jimmy and Tony, for example...that qualifies IMO. The climactic scene involves battling the shark on the boat.
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"Rogue" just means it's alone. I missed where the rules said the shark had to attack someone. That takes two stories out of my top 3.


Rogue, in the case of a shark, means it is attacking people. Otherwise it's just a shark, whether alone or not.
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I think I'm ok if the spirit of Jaws is there. For example, if the story centered on a man who had to do something in the ocean...and he is terrified of the water...and there are reports of a killer shark in the area. If we never see a shark attack in the story, but the story sticks to the man's fear of the ocean, then I'm ok. I mean Jaws is about the chief's fear of the water. Technically it would be missing the  rogue shark, but that would be still in the spirit of Jaws, so would be enough for me.
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I find this a funny debate, us lot questioning the merits of a shark attack in our scripts etc Me included, i hasten to add. Only in an OWC  

I've been reading up on case law recently for a work project and it's been interesting to refer back to cases, the meaning and the intention. This debate almost has the same feel.

So your honour i respectfully refer to the chief witness, DLS, and his opening gambit...

As alluded to in the previous thread, this OWC xhallenge was inspired by a fan's callout for low budget and brave filmmakers to crank out a series of Jaws fan-films by October 2015 as according to the possible future timeline seen in "Back To The Future II" (boy that almanac sure came in handy!) when 'Jaws 19' would be released.

Accordingly sir, I think it is fair to say by the time jaws 19 came around the original theme and issues, as explored in the original Jaws, were now lost in the ocean and replaced with a new set of story lines...as we have seen.

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I'm not debating anyone, Bill. I'm explaining my thought process when picking a writer's choice winner.

In that process, when it comes to qualifying, my attempt is to be inclusive. If I can convince myself the script met the criteria in some way, I'll try. My goal is NOT to eliminate scripts from the process.

As long as it's pretty close and within the spirit of Jaws, I'm good.

If this was a Star Wars OWC, I would expect certain things that are in the spirit of that film, such as a space battle, the force, etc. If the story takes place in 1989 Los Angeles in a skyscraper, it might not fit...even if the terrorists all wear Darth Vader masks.

But I will still read the story and give notes. Which really is the main purpose.
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For all I know someone says there could be a Jaws 19...there's an Ocean's 11 and 12 and 13..Okay, not quite the same thing but...anyway...moving on...

Odd that some FAQ are pouring in almost a week later, but here goes:


  • Do you have to show the shark?

You could have shown the shark or any part of the shark for any length of time. You did not have to show the shark.


  • Does the shark have to attack a person (dead or alive)

The shark had to attack something or somebody. This is why I allowed the use of other sea life.


  • Do I actually think some people are going to make 15 related Jaws films within a year?

No, I do not. I simply thought this make a fun OWC challenge.


  • Why wasn't fan fic allowed? The Tumbler guy 'call out' was for fan films.

While my proposal for the OWC was loosely inspired by this, I for one am not a big lover of fan scripts for a number of reasons. But if we took "fan fic" out of the equasion, it works a lot better., You can shop it, have an incentive to rewrite it. Most Shark (and crocodile) flicks take a page out of Jaws from time to time. There's nothing wrong with influence.

  • When will voting take place?

For those who participated in the OWC, check your Email box on Saturday. There will be a window of two-three days at least to vote, as results and reveals happen sometime on April 15th. Also, there will most likely be a new thread amd poll  for the visitors and/or the peeps who bowed out of the OWC


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On theme just seen this, hope the link works...


https://m.youtube.com/watch?li.....m-a22-01-03&amp=


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My question came up late because I thought I understood the meaning of "rogue".

This was a fun challenge. For me the toughest part wasn't the shark, it was the character limit.  




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20 down. 9 to go. Really surprised by how many solid entries there's been so far. Great job everyone!
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I think I've comented on all of them.

Shocked how many pissers snuck in.  
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I think I've comented on all of them.

Shocked how many pissers snuck in.  


You get me?   Ha!
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Really?  You get me?

I'm glad I can crack myself up...and a few others as well!
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Got 17 out of 29 read, pissers and all.

There's some really decent work here.
You guys are great.


"Hey! 'Lord Laughs at the Wicked' writer!
Thanks for saving me about twenty minutes.
No, really.
I mean that.
You're great, too."



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Ray, mine can be animated if you're looking for NC17 animated material.



I actually htink 2 of the pissers would be hilarious animated shorts.
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I've read two, but only commented on one. It seems like you guys think the turnout was of pretty good quality though. That's great!  


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I've read nearly of them but missed a couple of reviews.
Didn't read or review any ineligible ones. Well, a couple but I didn't give them serious critique.

Maybe 5 really good ones in there. A few that would be better with a rewrite.



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Ray, mine can be animated if you're looking for NC17 animated material.

If I think I can make a good festival entry with it I'm game for anything.
NC17 is no barrier to me.  


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I actually htink 2 of the pissers would be hilarious animated shorts.

Since you've already read them all which two are those?


So far I've read some which are good stories but I just can't do anything with them and some which are just too d@mn time consuming to make even with some "script doctoring."

But there's a couple of good ones and some iffy maybes in there.



Quoted from stevie
Didn't read or review any ineligible ones. Well, a couple but I didn't give them serious critique.

Maybe 5 really good ones in there. A few that would be better with a rewrite.

I'm slogging through 'em all!

Yeah, many of these could be a lot more producible with a healthy, guided re-write.



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Look forward to reading your reviews, RW.

Speaking of which, reviews I mean. Not RW. I did that bit already.

I always love the OWC reviews that go like this -

I didn't like it. It was rubbish. This bit was terrible. I mean really terrible. And why did that character do that? That was completely stupid.

This wasted my time. I don't know why you bothered in the first place.

Well done on completing the OWC.


It reminds me of the time I went to the bank looking for a loan. I sat waiting for an hour or so then spoke to this woman for five minutes in a small room.

Bank woman then leaves me in small room for twenty minutes. There's nothing in here apart from two chairs, a desk and a bad painting on the wall.

I study the painting until I could draw the bloody thing blindfold.

She then returns and asks more questions. Then leaves me alone with the painting again. For half an hour.

When she returns she regretfully informs me that they can't give me my loan 'at the present time'.

Just as I'm about to storm off in a huff she asks 'Is there anything else we can help you with today?'

I'm about to mention she didn't help me in the first place. Instead I leave before I put her head through that fecking painting.

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I've read 10, kinda swamped by work at the minute so my only real free time is on Saturday.  I'll attempt to get 15 - 20 done before voting begins.  

Though, after reading that "one" with the "newlyweds" I don't think my mind can handle anymore vivid scenery, lol.  
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    Does the shark have to attack a person (dead or alive)

The shark had to attack something or somebody. This is why I allowed the use of other sea life.


Well within context of rogue... if a shark simply attacked fish, then it would be eating dinner and not a rogue shark. For it to be a rogue shark it has to attack people.
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I am traveling now, and out of pocket for the next 24 hours or so, but it seems I cannot leave you kids alone for a minute.

This was kind of funny


Quoted from NickSedario
Marnie, Rendevous and Stevie all jumpin on Ray's little bandwagon.

There's a surprise.


I do not recall any of these folks interacting to any large extent before.  It is a surprise, and it tells me something.

I am not here to pass judgement, just to tell you guys to cut it out.  I suspect the people on the "bandwagon" are most likely to listen, or at the very least, stop throwing spoons about.  All that jangling is driving me batty.

What I will say is that this is supposed to be anonymous.  If you "out" yourself ahead of time -- regardless of whether people think you wrote something or not (you do not have to own up, you know) -- then take your medicine and quit bellyaching.

It is just a message board for pete's sake.

I suppose our new Mod-woman is out drinking her Stella and walking her Guinness.  Or perhaps its the other way round.  I forget.  No matter.

But you best behave or she is coming down here with her whips out because I am dropping her a note and she has been dyring to try them out.  CRR-AACK!


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They have shark shields? Why didn't anyone tell me before this OWC!!

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Not really shields. That'd be like calling an umbrella a force field. Use the umbrella, Luke.

That electronic bollocks only works on certain sharks. Even then it doesn't work all the time. Only sometimes.

When I was there I heard there were nets. With big holes in. Like my socks. The red ones.

I would have mentioned it Mark. But I think you'd have been less impressed with the truth.

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Quoted from bert

I suppose our new Mod-woman is out drinking her Stella and walking her Guinness.  Or perhaps its the other way round.  I forget.  No matter.

Guinness is the dog, but a mighty fine drink as well.  
I was sleeping on the job, literally. Midnight till 8am I usually sleep like a baby, but I try to be on the ball the other 16 hrs.  


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Not really shields. That'd be like calling an umbrella a force field. Use the umbrella, Luke.

That electronic bollocks only works on certain sharks. Even then it doesn't work all the time. Only sometimes.

When I was there I heard there were nets. With big holes in. Like my socks. The red ones.

I would have mentioned it Mark. But I think you'd have been less impressed with the truth.

When a government say they have a plan try substituing the word plan with idea. And when they say they have a shield - substitute the words shitty net that is too small.


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Hmmm, did something go on , like a fight, and I wasn't involved?  What did I miss?
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Hmmm, did something go on , like a fight, and I wasn't involved?  What did I miss?


Granted, I wasn't here for all of it but... Silverback mistakenly took one of Ray's comments as offensive, got mad, a few people started throwing a few jokes around about spoons, which definitely didn't help. I think he got banned, kind of tuned out there. Real question is, what's going on with that OWC sucks thread?
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Quoted from Dreamscale
Hmmm, did something go on , like a fight, and I wasn't involved?  What did I miss?


Hey, you snooze, you lose. No, really it was a storm in a teacup with a lot of spoons being thrown about.   In other words you missed nothing.

The actual 'shark' talk is much more interesting. And, it's true in Oz we have shark nets with big whopping holes in them. We just ignore them for the most part... the holes, that is, and hope for the best.

P.S. Silverback will be back, I think. He's just on a little breather... I think.


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Thanks guys.  Hope Nick returns with a clear head.
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Quoted Text
Real question is, what's going on with that OWC sucks thread?




Okay... this was my doing..
I wrote an attention grabbing headline, but the context was differently. I apparently forgot to take in the emotions of certain peeps when I wrote.
I tried to delete it, but actually deleted my message, which is why Pia's response looks outta place.


So as it stands, I have neither wrote or read any of these OWC's as I've been in Florida with my kids for the last week.

If someone wants to point me in the direction of a good pisser, I'd be glad to read it.

So SORRY if anyone is offended, as I said the context had nothing to do with the OWC and from the previous replies, I'm guessing there was another shitstorm... true to form



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If someone wants to point me in the direction of a good pisser, I'd be glad to read it.


Jail Bait and Up from the Depths 2 are the pissers you will love.

Jowls is another pisser that has its moments, but is a little thick.

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Thanks Jeff

I'll check them out tonight

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So...

When does the blind voting begin?

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Blind voting begins tomorrow.

Jeff... it was all stupid.
You didn't miss anything unless you just don't have enough "stupid" in your life.
I'm embarrassed for inciting the incident myself, which I did. Unintentionally.

Moooovin' right along...


My morning got complicated.
Didn't get to read and review all I wanted to.
Gonna try to get these last six bagged and tagged shortly.
But it might be late afternoon to early evening before I drop my bombs.





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Quoted from Ledbetter
So...

When does the blind voting begin?

Shawn.....><


The voting url for writer's choice will go out this evening.

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Quoted from Dreamscale


Jail Bait and Up from the Depths 2 are the pissers you will love.

Jowls is another pisser that has its moments, but is a little thick.



Are you sure, Jeff? Up from the Depths had it, but there has to be a 'really?' on the other two?

Mark - if you like the idea of a gummy baby tiger shark giving you head, give UFTD 2 a quick read  

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Quoted from Don


The voting url for writer's choice will go out this evening.

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Sweet!

Thanks Don!

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Mark - if you like the idea of a gummy baby tiger shark giving you head, give UFTD 2 a quick read  


I thought the toothless baby shark was inspired.

For all the back and forth about that script, it did do one very important thing.

It got people talking about toothless baby sharks.

Where are the laws for them? Who's to say that precious baby shark wasn't chummed onto that mans dickk?

Toothless baby shark blowjob chumming has become popular at an alarming rate.

And then the baby shark grows up and is simply tossed aside.

Tragic. Simply tragic.

I, for one, applaude writer-X for taking a risk and putting this out there.  

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Yeah - but the big ones grow teeth and that's just not the same game at all  
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I got my link to the writer's choice too - but only one vote   I'm a bit trapped between three really good entries...
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Which ones?

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btw..I got the email too and done voted.
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I can't pick one. The best written ones pretty blatantly disqualified themselves for me by not having shark attacks, or by having way too many characters.

Well, maybe there's one that could work...

Ok, I got  one.
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Done.

Will post individual reviews shortly.

Goto links below if you just can't wait.




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Every time I cut a scene or element it’s not out of malice but out of 
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I want you see how I'm consolidating or eliminating multiple elements to 
save production costs for the greater benefit of getting something done, 
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13. Lord Laughs at the Wicked - A serial killer at sea hits a snag.
Brief - A grisly scene on a boat.

Characters to Animate/Voice - 2
Max + jump, circling shark,
Scenes to Build  - 1.5
Far &#8594; near boat on ocean,
Accessory Visual - 4
Flying seagulls 4x,
Accessory Audio - 2
Ocean waves, seagull calls,

Genre & Marketability - Horror
Script format - 3
Comments  -  Excellent opening scene! If the shark’s been following Max & boat for a week why’s he still holding the cleaver?
Ho, wait?! Fuck me! That’s it?! One page? Fuckin’ dickhead.
Final word - I’ll POSSIBLY make this just for the funuvit even though it has zero practical utility, I just admire the imagery + premise, so I’ll give you that. You’re still an asshole for the given challenge, though. XO, Asshole.

10/15           Lo/Hi Estimated Build Hours per Screen Minute
x 0.8          Screenplay Pages
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Quoted from Dreamscale


Jail Bait and Up from the Depths 2 are the pissers you will love.

Jowls is another pisser that has its moments, but is a little thick.



What are you talking about, Jeff? Jowls was amazing! Maybe one of the best I've read. A lot better than the other two at least... Is Jail Bait even a pisser? Wow.
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Done.

Will post individual reviews shortly.

Goto links below if you just can't wait.




And I really need you guys to pay attention to the first entry of the producer notes:
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As you read these (faux confidential) reviews I want you to pay 
close attention to how much effort I'm putting into making these 
lines of words and thoughts into an actual animated short film.

Every time I cut a scene or element it’s not out of malice but out of 
practicality.

I want you see how I'm consolidating or eliminating multiple elements to 
save production costs for the greater benefit of getting something done, 
hopefully without compromising the heart of the story and sometimes 
actually improving it, IMHO.

SEEEEEE that I'm trying to work WITH you, not AGAINST you, so that we 
BOTH have something to show for our efforts.



Have to say, I'm blown away with the research you do. The time to read each individual script and give notes on time and cost is priceless. Awesome job as always!
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I got the email for Don with the list of scripts and we can pass, recommend, etc.

Is the single vote one separate or on site?



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Not sure he's sent the the writer's vote out yet, Stevie. I didn't get one. Got the voting thing though.

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Thank you, DV.

Just trying to earn my keep.



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If mine passes the 150hr mark to build at 12 pages, then I dare not fathom how MUCH time the 30-page version would take.

Taking into consideration the fact that I only used 15% of my material...

Still, good to see projections and I do hope when I upload the actual short, people can see what I WAS aiming for.  

I got the vote thing, sent mine in.  I wish thee fair luck!  < That sounded better in my head.
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Mark - if you like the idea of a gummy baby tiger shark giving you head, give UFTD 2 a quick read



I'm sold

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Quoted from GaryTao
by the way, can the script be edited before its voted on?


And if you are reading this Gary, that's wonderful!    Aren't you glad I redirected you here
But there's few things you should know. Okay. More than a few...but you'll get the gist methinks.

  • OWC partipants have already started voting. That includes myself.
  • Nothing and nodody is stopping you from rewriting.
  • You may submit revisions after the OWC results are in.
  • You do not have to follow any of the OWC guidelines once you resubmit. Just keep it a short script within reason.
  • Nobody is going to re-read your resubmission unless you read and comment on other people's work at least. Don't matter who. Pick someone's submission. Anyone. You can even start now. Yep. Right now.

    Let me see....is there anything else...?
    Oh yes. See all the above.


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Is there any way we can see if any writers haven't read or reviewed any of the other scripts?

I have my fave picked out but there's no way in the wide I'm voting for it if I know the author has been a slack prick.



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Nope. Not without doing some work yourself, Stevie. Which seems almost ironic.

But a quick scan down the list tells you there's at least eight or nine writers who didn't comment on most of them.

I may be wrong. But I'm not.

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I think only Don knows. Sometimes in the past, he has put a star next to the scripts where the writer has been reading and commenting. That would be helpful. I wouldn't vote either for a script if the writer hasn't read anything.


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I only managed 12 before the voting came in.  Work kinda backed me into a corner.

Gonna read some tonight.  If I remember correctly I have read:

Current Events
Blood in the Water
Hunt
Up From The Depths 2
Shark Tale
The Shark Doctor
The Ordeal
The Nauticca Knot
Loyalty
Samebito
Genetic Engineering
Immersion Therapy

2 have vanished... there was a 1-pager and something else, which I believe was taken down by the writer, but I can't remember what it was called.  30 down to 28.

Which means I've GOT to read:

*Jail Bait
Jowls
*Reel Tension
*Retrieval
*Sentient
Terror At Sea
The Stillness in the Water
To Catch a Predator
An American Shark in London
*The Lagoon
A Twist in the Tail
Shark Dreaming
Finning
*Jaws Pe'ahi
The Tides of Caeus

The ones with *'s next to them will be read tonight.

I know, I know, I'm slacking.  Work got the better of me this week.  Time constraints up the backside, lol.  

I've nothing to do tonight so I'll read the 8 that bear marks.  The others tomorrow.

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You've done well Leegion, good on ya buddy.

Yeah, Pia, Don did the star thing once before and it worked well. I'm guessing he's too busy and thats fair enough.

Actually there is a solution: have the reveal then do the vote



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Leegion,

I don't think anyone can get too upset if you've read some and intend to read the rest in the near future. That's fair enough.

It's the ones who read none, or just a few then swan off until the next OWC who gets people's backs up.

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I didn't manage to read them all even though I was really hoping to. Managed 25, which I think is one of my best rates -- it's actually quite a task getting them all done - I think I only know of a couple of peeps who did read them all - I'd be interested to know??
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Quoted from Stevie
I know my script is like slack prick.... Hard to enjoy




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Leegion,

I don't think anyone can get too upset if you've read some and intend to read the rest in the near future. That's fair enough.

It's the ones who read none, or just a few then swan off until the next OWC who gets people's backs up.

R


I'm gonna try to match the reads on my own at the very least.  Though some didn't finish mine, lol.  (my fault, I'll explain later)

Still getting to me why I can't remember the name of that other script though... Lord Laughs at the Wicked was the 1-pager, but the other one...?

Does anyone know what script was removed from the challenge?
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I'm sold. An Anfield yuppie has bought the rights to my body  

Mark  


Mate, come on...keep your private stuff to yourself, ay?




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I think I commented on all of them...if I somehow missed yours, PM me, and I'll give it my Stevie Short Shorts review, adn be completely cool.  

Much better quality thann I imagined would be present.  Congarts to all.
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I have to apply an industrial strength review approach to all submissions, be it fifteen or fifty.
The process I use is what I imagine any producer would utilize some variation of.

  • You wanna make a film product for market X.
  • You put out a call for content submissions.
  • They got what they got.
  • You get what you get.
  • Doesn't matter b'cause it' gonna get changed from script to screen according to the resources I have, not the resources the writer can imagine.
  • However, once a basic premise and construct can be selected then writer and producer can collaborate on matching story details to resources.
  • Then I gotta get busy making something.


How do you guys think a producer's shop is run?
What do you think happens when you hit the send button?



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Down to 1 script left to read tonight then I'm done with all of them. The only one I didn't read was Gary's. Nothing against the guy but I noticed he's not reviewing any one else's so....
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What do you think happens when you hit the send button?


A sigh and then the sound effect you get when something's put in the recycle bin.

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Just checked this thread.

I've read them all. I've made notes. I think I might have 4 reviews left. So if I haven't got to you yet, I apologize, but it's coming.

Overall,  I'm really impressed. A great variety in focus and premise. Some were really out there in X-Files land.

Some, surprisingly,  broke the guidelines/parameters.  And some even managed to avoid shark attacks.  

That said, this was great fun writing, reading, and reviewing. There's a lot of exciting talent here.

Thanks to all those reviewers. I've learned tons from previous OWC, and this is one was no different.

For 1st time entries, shying away due to harsh criticism,  I'd say take it for what is... and impress us next time. There are few spots out there to get honest and thoughtful anonymous feedback.

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Yeah Kev...there are def some writers with their own preconceptions. Instead of accepting someone's vision and storyline and making a suggestion on how they might make it better, they put their own spin on what they think your story should be. Yuck.


Some of the board members are incredibly intuitive at pulling out the good and bad aspects of a script in just one read, and that shows a serious talent. I myself, have to read the entire piece, unplug, take the dog for a walk, have a smoke (a real one, not an e-cig) and really think about the underlying message the writer tried to convey. Unfortunately, this can take me way out in left field with an obtuse analogy of the unconscious story and, when that ends up as feedback, can easily be misconstrued as 'negative' feedback.

Reviewing another writer's work is not only extremely challenging, it can very easily be taken out of context and convey a completely different message than what one might have initially intended, and with a point of no return once the post goes live. As time goes on, however, I believe writers not only become better writers; they find better ways to convey ideas, without conveying their own ideology.
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... Reviewing another writer's work is not only extremely challenging, it can very easily be taken out of context and convey a completely different message than what one might have initially intended, and with a point of no return once the post goes live. ...


Hmm, some things can't be undone... (how philosophical is that?)   but some things can! Remember, you can always edit your posts and/or delete them and try again if you have any regrets, or thought you could have better phrased feedback etc.


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I commented on all of them. Only the new guy's I left without a read. As has been said, he wasn't contributing. If I have left anyone else's out then let me know.

I gave four considers this time and there would have been a few more had the writers stuck to the theme. Some really excellent stories... but it's unfair to the writers that stick rigidly to the theme to vote for a script that doesn't include a rogue shark, so... no matter how good the story, I've had to give them a pass. But still, there are some very inventive shark-themed scripts... and even one excellent script with a new stylisation that I also loved, but the shark didn't belong in it. That story should definitely have some work done on it. Not sure of the cost of such a film, even if it would ever be filmed, but it was a great read, even inspirational.

I think the quality of entries has been better than the time travel OWC over all... aside form mine, which I've already admitted is the worst thing I've ever written. I don't like shark attack films, or piranha's... any water creature.... but upon saying that, I suppose as a shark attack story it isn't bad. It could do with a rewrite but I can't be arsed as I have so much other stuff to write. I just enjoyed the challenge. Thanks to all involved in setting it up.
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Just voted... I don't remember how many recommends I gave in the previous OWC, had quite a few in this one though.

Is it too early to guess the writers? I know a certain few that stand out like sore thumbs.
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Just voted. There were a few I didn't read. Sorry about that.

There were several that did not meet the requirements, but which were strong efforts, so I gave them a 'consider'.

There were several that had stories that felt incomplete, but which the writing was so strong they deserved a consider, and got one.

No script got a recommend. And really, considering how tough it should be to get a recommend, it's no surprise that people couldn't achieve it in a week.

For me, a recommend meant the story: a) more or less met the criteria, and b) was a compelling story that felt close to fully realized.

The OWC was above average for the 3 years I've been drinking in this joint, in terms of writing anyway. It was a hard topic, and no one hit it out of the park. I almost reached first on an error but tripped over a slug on the way. I learned a lot from the scripts and the comments I read, so it was worth the experience. Thanks!
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Just voted. This is only my second OWC but the number of my recommends is a lot more than the last one. This has been a blast!


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I know a certain few that stand out like sore thumbs.


Yeah I've got a few pinned down too, but some that I was on the lookout for hid their tracks VERY well this time.

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I can also say, probably for the first time, that I did not know the authorship of a single one of the scripts when I wrote my reviews. And no one knew mine.
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No script got a recommend. And really, considering how tough it should be to get a recommend, it's no surprise that people couldn't achieve it in a week.


Wow. Harsh.

Pass: 14
Consider: 6
Rec: 3

...but this is from a writers perspective - I might not feel the same should I be asked to put either hard cash or time behind them.

I agree there's been some real quality this time round, better than a few of the previous ones. Congrats to everyone who entered, (expect the skivers who never read a thing...)

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I would add a catefoty c) to my list of what would get a recommend. The first two were to meet the criteria and to have a compelling and mostly complete story. But I would say that if a concept was blow me away compelling, even if it didn't meet the first two conditions, I would give it a recommend. But hard to glow someone away with the Jaws thing. Which I'm not knocking...it was indeed a challenge!
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Quoted from Forgive
...but this is from a writers perspective - I might not feel the same should I be asked to put either hard cash or time behind them.

Which is exactly the vantage point that I've read OWC submissions from for the last few years, and am only now able and willing to self-commit some serious time + multiple favor call ins + festival submission fees to pursue.



I acknowledge the almost exclusive POV here is toward prodco readers and contest winning/placement, so I always feel both frustrated and bemused by the prevalent items of corrective concern.

IMHO, there's frequently little regard for actually making a film from what's been submitted and often they are a showcase for the writer's ability to put a novel into screenay format.

Voting for the best short novel in screenplay format is like voting for the best looking fake breasts.
It completely disregards consideration for what the screenplay/breasts are actually for!

"Well, they're very nice looking breasts in that evening gown, Ray."
Oh, f#ck me!

If/when I vote for what I see as the most producible screenplays I feel like I'm kinda just wasting votes.

And then there's consideration of the story's fundamental construct vs. execution which with a little rewriting effort renders a wholly satisfactory product.
So, voting for "as is" submissions also seems kinda goofy.

B!tch, b!tch, b!tch.  

F#ckit.

Obviously I'm bewildered.
I'm over thinking it or am just ignorant.
Will someone please just tell me what lens to look at these gems at so that I can at least feel like I'm not wasting votes?

A) Exclude consideration for those submissions that didn't have a rogue shark (the letter of the law) or those that presented a good story inspired by the given criteria (the spirit of the law.)
Anal? Not anal?

B) Best looking ugly girl in her Sunday best (as is) or natural babe in sweats and a T-shirt (with a little effort)?

C) And pretty much accept that we all know none of these will ever be filmed, so just toss budget concerns out the window? We do? Yes/no?

Thank you.



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A part of the skill in being a screenwriter is that we write stories that translate well to the screen. Producible scripts are the whole point. It's certainly a consideration of mine when writing and reading other scripts.

As far as the contest goes though... I see these OWC's as a bit of fun and also a challenge. The two I've entered have both been subjects I don't like. Time Travel and Animal Attack... all I need next is a romance and it's a full house of shit I don't like. I'd still have a go though... and I'd stick to the rules.
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I'm not sure if most entered this OWC with the hopes on getting their submissions off the page. For myself, this is about comradery, ideas, and learning from mistakes. All the scripts were really creative and thoughtful efforts, ones that I've learned a lot from. I appreciate everyone sharing their great work.
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Quoted from oJOHNNYoNUTSo
I'm not sure if most entered this OWC with the hopes on getting their submissions off the page. For myself, this is about comradery, ideas, and learning from mistakes. All the scripts were really creative and thoughtful efforts, ones that I've learned a lot from. I appreciate everyone sharing their great work.



If my entry doesn't get filmed in 4 or 5 different languages, animated and live action, I'll be shocked, confused, hurt, and my anus may even be sore, as my entry is the Moby Dick of rogue shark attacks.

You get me?

On a serious note, I hope no one expects their efforts to do anything other than showcase their talent or lack thereof, and/or provide practice wiritn in a theme/genre, they may not be comfortable in.

Reading feedback should help with their own writing, while giving feedback should help not only others, but their own writing as well, as seeing others mistakes, should raw attention to our own issues.

On a side note, if I incorrectly called anyone's script a pisser, I apologize, as sometimes it's unclear or leaning in that direction based on choices the writer made, either knowingly or mistakenly.

And, if otehrs incorrectly labeled a pisser as a serious effort, hopefully you will learn the signs to be on the lookout for, so in the future, no one writes a serious entry that comes off as a pisser.
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Will someone please just tell me what lens to look at these gems at so that I can at least feel like I'm not wasting votes?


With all the effort you spent analyzing the scripts, I think it wouldn't be fair to use any other lens except your own.  

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C) And pretty much accept that we all know none of these will ever be filmed, so just toss budget concerns out the window? We do? Yes/no?


Hey Ray - whilst I completely get your point... I think a lot of people get that this is an excercise, and as such if you're learning from it, you improve the writing end. Okay the budget end matters, but with OWC's there is no budget set before we start writing. If the OWC's were to say $5-500, or $10k-15k, then that would be different.

Maybe there should be a budget range in the future? Having said that though, if a producer does like something, they do have the option of saying 'pare it down' and/or 'I'm just going to film it to the budget I have'.

I have to say I do appreciate the HUGE work you've put in here, and it's really useful to see how someone might break down the costs, and to see how factors we've included affect the cost.

One final thing though - a lot of scripts that get picked up here are filmed by students - they have colleges behind them so don't have to face real-world costs, but can still, none-the-less, put stuff on film.

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I totally see the OWC as a writing exercise. This one especially because for a short, it would be hard to have anything in the water be low budget...unless it was a bathtub.  

I like Ray's reviews though. Really good insight and something to keep in the front of your mind while you're writing something you hope will be produced.

Looking forward to the writer reveal on quite a few of these. This is my 7th OWC and the writing in this one is very impressive.


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I attempt to write stories in screenplay format. I've not yet written a script with budget in mind or any hopes of production. I'm still learning so I see these OWC as writing excercises in a free online class.

Some people reading my scripts will be angry, resentful, full of rage at life (or just had a really bad day) and this will reflect in their review. There may be one pet peeve on the first page which makes them bail or just rant at how crap it is. But the same can be said from a judge on a panel at a script writing competition or a producer at a studio. It's all good practice for real life.

Others will give it a fair try despite some basic mistakes and give me some good, honest, yet biased personal feedback. I say biased because it's their opinion, plus they may have their entry that they want to WIN and that needs to be taken into account.

Others will look at it from a strictly formatting perspective or from a production point of view.

All of it is valid and priceless. Everyone review the way YOU want to review, warts and all. I think I've learned more here in the last couple of months then I did on my own for years getting family and friends reviewing.


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I'm not sure if most entered this OWC with the hopes on getting their submissions off the page. For myself, this is about comradery, ideas, and learning from mistakes. All the scripts were really creative and thoughtful efforts, ones that I've learned a lot from. I appreciate everyone sharing their great work.


Not in its current form, no.  This was more about participation for me.  So I just entered something.  

Personally, I entered mine to get some exposition, to receive some feedback to see if this style of storytelling would work, but it did not.  This happens when you only use 15% of your original material.

This OWC afforded me the luxury of knowing what folks like and dislike.  For me, watching the flow of negativity towards a certain style is a great learning curve that I will adapt to and overcome with future projects.

I also found out that using certain "phrasing" does not sit entirely well with readers who prefer more familiar descriptions.

Those are the things I'll take away from this OWC.  The negativity?  Not so much.  
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I also found out that using certain "phrasing" does not sit entirely well with readers who prefer more familiar descriptions.

Those are the things I'll take away from this OWC.  The negativity?  Not so much.  


Your 100% right and Simon actually gave me a nudge as this all unfolded, but may have been a bit too late. I wasn't trying to be harsh w/some of these, and it def makes me look like a butthole. I've just got do better with being more thorough instead of reacting with my first thoughts.
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It's ironic that after all the hard work of writing these OWC scripts every few months, they end up just gathering web dust on my computer, never to be touched again.

Although every now and then I read a few old ones.

Well done to DJS for the shark theme. Something different like the time travel one - they were both great.

I still would love to see my idea of a set theme but perps get randomly allocated a genre and we see what happens. Would produce some wonderful ideas I feel.



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Ah, the old OWC.

Why do I like entering these? Well here goes...

# It's one of the toughest, brutal, yet honest, script competitions you can experience - at the end you often feel you have survived something. I can't think of another that you see in real time, experiencing every comment as it arrives

# IF...you are prepared to learn, this is one of the best forums to do so....as an amateur

# the challenges are just that, decent, unusual challenges

# I love being part of something - you really feel that with an OWC

Overall I feel I have improved the most because of the OWC's. For a beginner they are like a fast track.

Should you write with production in mind?

I never used to, but now I do. Ray will disagree but Ray is also looking at the scripts as they are. I don't believe writers should writer production ready scripts. I feel that writers should be seeking to impress the producers with a concept, an idea, without stupid cost, it's then up to the producers to find a way of making it work.

It's probably just me, but every time i write now I want a chance it could be something bigger and better.  It forces me to challenge the script, not be complacent.  Doesn't always work but I like the challenge.

Voting

I don't vote on these as scripts as they would in a big competition. I vote on these under the challenge of the OWC. And to be honest I don't really knock those that wander off the OWC path, as along as they are sound and decent.

I have learned so much from this competition and this forum, I just feel grateful to take part.


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I think it's safe to say that everyone who enters the OWC is at different stages when it comes to learning the craft. Some struggle with format, others with OTN dialogue, some may have figured out both but have a hard time writing an engaging story. The OWC can be brutal for some but it's the sole reason my writing has improved from the time I joined S.S. to now. I agree it's never fun to see people bail on your work early or to see harsh comments regarding something you wrote but remember you can't satisfy everyone. Write a script that pushes the envelope than the peeps who are sensitive will be offended, if you write about puppy dogs and ice cream than the hard core action writers will be bored with the script and probably will be out before they hit the second page. It's trying to find the median between the two that's the challenge for me and I hope anyone who feels bad after this OWC doesn't take the harsh comments and give up. Continue to learn the craft, correct the mistakes and come back to the next OWC ready to kick some ass.

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I'm surprised others who purposefully ignored challenge parameters didn't follow the trend of the 1 pager and withdraw from challenge for the vote. Even though that was a strong 1 page they still withdrew.  I assume, now, it would have got some votes for best overall.

It seems the pissers will get votes for best overall entry that could have went to non rule breakers.

Shouldn't the pissheads remove themselves? Maybe I'm confused on how this works? I'm not trying to start something though.  Get me? Hehehe.  Jokes, eh.

Just sayin... otherwise why not have a Freestyle OWC with no parameters?


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LF: In all the time of the OWC that I've been around 'Pissers' never even rate in the serious voting. They're just a lark.

And the voting that's up at the moment for everyone who read, (even if they didn't enter), is not the serious voting, so I wouldn't fret.


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The pisser voting is in :

1. Up from the Depths 2

2. Jail Bait




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...remember you can't satisfy everyone. Write a script that pushes the envelope than the peeps who are sensitive will be offended, if you write about puppy dogs and ice cream than the hard core action writers will be bored with the script and probably will be out before they hit the second page.


Oh, how true.  One of the best things a writer can learn (along with growing a very thick skin) is that *no* script will be universally loved.  People simply have very different tastes.  The script that goes for subtlety will bore some.  A specific action scene may thrill certain people, and elict yawns from others.  It doesn't matter where you are in your craft; that will always be true.

Which is not to say that one can't learn and gain oodles from reviews - both pro and con.  For instance, if 7 out of 10 people say your script was confusing or overwritten... well, you really should check it out.  And one review may be itself be "wrong" on two points (or at least arbitrary) and totally right on point three.  These OWCs are great things.  But one shouldn't take a single (or even a few) negative reviews to heart.  Those reviewers may simply have different tastes than the audience you're shooting for.  (Though, any writer who thinks they're perfect and doesn't keep an open mind does so to their own disservice.)

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The pisser voting is in :

1. Up from the Depths 2

2. Jail Bait




Mark


Up From the Depths 2 was my pick for the pissers.


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I voited for my favorte script and it was far from a pisser...buty...I did give 2 pissers a recommend.

Imagine the zaniness of  everyone could submit a  bit old hairy piss?
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Imagine the zaniness of  everyone could submit a  bit old hairy p*ss?


I have no idea what this means. Reminds me of talking to a man from deepest Kerry. He had a neck thicker than Tyson's and an accent to match.

I think he was talking about sheep. Are you talking about sheep?

If so, why are you talking about sheep? At least the man from Kerry had some. I hope so, anyway.

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It always cracks me up whrn peeps don't see such telltale signs of a big old giant aquirt of urine in to the pond.


You are talking about sheep!


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You are talking about sheep!


I did have lamb chops for dinner tonight...does that count?

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No. They're lambs. That's like saying you're going to turn up on a big horse and instead turn up on the back of a pert but tiny ass. Steady.

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Ren, the good news is that your Jowls somehow got 3 votes!  Really?  You get me?

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I have no idea what this means. Is this something to do with the sheep again?


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I have no idea what this means. Is this something to do with the sheep again?


Yes...of course...sheep...sleep...sheet...erm...uh...sure...

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# It's one of the toughest, brutal, yet honest, script competitions you can experience - at the end you often feel you have survived something.



I don't believe that 'honest' is correct. Other writers are the worst people to get advice on your work from... there may be the odd one we connect with. Often I find the advice of other writers is damaging. Which is why I stay away from directing other writers where I believe they should take their work. I may offer up an example, but it's never a serious proposition.

There are some writers that are good at that... not saying there isn't. For the most part though, other writers are crap at giving advice on where a story should go. It's not like they wouldn't have a heap of drafts to do with their work too.

Working with producers is a different thing entirely. Producer comments are designed to encourage... but I prefer to read the analyst notes straight. Analysts will write different notes for producers than they will the writer. You get it raw when they think they're writing for a producer who is going to pass along the notes in a more friendlier format.

Writers comments should be taken for what they are worth... a pinch of salt. Most of them won't be worth listening to.
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Since the names are being revealed tomorrow, are we going to put in our guesses on who wrote what?  It took a little research, but I'm pretty sure I figured out one of them.


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Since the names are being revealed tomorrow, are we going to put in our guesses on who wrote what?  It took a little research, but I'm pretty sure I figured out one of them.


Hmmm. I can take an educated guess with some, I think I know which ones were done by Rick, Jeff, maybe Janet(although I still have doubts)...and of course yours.
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Yours was the one I figured out Johnny. Had to go back a few OWC's to find my review where I pretty much echoed my words from this one.


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Yours was the one I figured out Johnny. Had to go back a few OWC's to find my review where I pretty much echoed my words from this one.


Lol. Don't be too sure of yourself I have a gut feeling you're going to be in for a little shocker...
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Are you trying to say you wrote Jowls? LOL


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I thought YOU wrote Jowls LOL!
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Two recommends.
Two considers.



Oh, and I updated both the notes and spreadsheet to:

  • denote pissers
  • that they were comedies (IDK why I didn't consider that before)
  • the corresponding scores
  • notable high scores
  • the four submissions I'd like to first offer to animate in some form or fashion for the 2015 animated short film festival circuit.



EDIT: And Ren, I'm still gonna animate yours whether you like it or not! LOL!




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'Lord Laughs at the Wicked' writer (which I'm/we're all pretty sure is Silverback/Nick),

You've got a great scene here, even if it totally thumbs it's nose at the OWC.
(Whatever, I really don't care - in a healthy, good way of course, FWIW.)

Re our spat: Water under the bridge. Moooooving right along.

The technical demands to execute this scene are easy.
I could do this in a day or two just fer shitzengiggles, knowing there'd honestly be very little point or purpose to doing it.
There's no commercial value to it whatsoever.
It's JUST a funny scene.
It'd almost be an exercise, proving no real point since it's technical demands I already understand quite well.

"Look! We did this! He wrote it and I animated it! LOLOLOLOL!" like a couple of idiots.

Off the top of my head I can't think of much of anything I'd wanna change.
You wanna do the voice?  

If you're pretty sure you've got nothing better to do with this story I'd like to get in touch with you to discuss what my animation technical limitations are and how we can just make a goofy blip of a short.
A short-let!  

If you feel it's appropriate to hold onto this for a while, shop it around to more credentialed entities, then by all means gopherit!

Just know that this open offer is here, now and for down the road.


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Even though I din't write one this time...I swear I din't...I read them all ...don't feel like posting all the notes since it's a done deal but if any of you want feedback, just pm me. Looks like most scripts got adequate reads this go around.
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Knew The Ordeal was written by Kev from the first paragraph. I'm very certain that Jeff wrote The Lagoon, the classic stilettos from Current Events can only be written by Pia. Up From the Depths is also by Jeff, but I doubt he put his real name on it. I had a few more, but can't remember them off the top of my head.
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Jeff never crossed my mind during Lagoon due to the story, but it seems upon closer inspection of the sentence structure, it does appear his fingerprints are there. It's a solid guess.
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I have my suspicions about who did what. But I shall keep them in my closet.

That way I don't look a fool and can pretend to be all wise after the event.

I might go in there later. I've lost the TV remote again. It's not where it usually is - in the fridge. Or the toilet. It might be with my spatula. I haven't seen it for a while either. Nor numerous other items of cultery. I think they may....

Enough of this gay banter. On to the point -

Which is when are these names going to be revealed? There's more speculation on here than there is on the news.

When will the submissions bit be open again? There's no rush. I was just wondering as it prompts me to write stuff.

Now. I'm going looking for the remote as some inane bint on the telly is trying to get me to buy a dress. It's not even the right colour for me.

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the classic stilettos from Current Events can only be written by Pia.

I didn't enter anything. I read a few, but I've been busy. Nice to be thought of as someone who uses classic stilettos in their scripts though.  


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Funny...no,,,no Lagoon for this kid.  I didn't say anything, but I always check the doc properties before I start and I was shocked to see P. Cook for Up from the Depths 2.

Maybe I wrote Jail Bait/Shark Bait?

Ren wrote Jowls, that much I know.

I'm very curious which one Johnny wrote, though.

My guess for Sentient is Asfarasiam or whtever the name is (Sorry, bro...can't think of it right now).

Dena probably wrote the rest of them.  
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Funny...no,,,no Lagoon for this kid.


Someone out there loves your style, and word selection.
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I always check the doc properties before I start and I was shocked to see P. Cook for Up from the Depths 2.

Weird Jeff. I just checked it and that's what it says, but I did not enter anything. If I had, I would've read and commented on all of them by now.

I hope it's written by someone with the same initials. If not, someone is trying to be funny. Don will know.  


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Funny...no,,,no Lagoon for this kid.



Quoted from oJOHNNYoNUTSo
Someone out there loves your style, and word selection.


It definitely wasn't me either, then.

Dreamscale's will have sheep in it. Either them or a similar subservient beast.

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My guess for Sentient is Asfarasiam...


I pretty sure Rick didn't write that one. His other entries look similar on the page, but his stories and prose are structured way differently. My best guess is he wrote The Nauticca Knot.

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The only one I'm pretty sure about is which one Johnny wrote...it was my fave. And I think I have Dustin's pegged...mayyyybe. Feeding an American to the sharks.


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The only one I'm pretty sure about is which one Johnny wrote...it was my fave.


You keep saying that, but again, I'm not so sure you have this one pinned down as well as you might think.    Maybe like a twist ending you never saw comin'...

PS -- you've got a great eye for diamonds in the rough

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How am I supposed to sleep tonight with that kind of cliff hanger!!??


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I'm sure there's a joke here about sheep and counting and Jeff and that being not all he does, but I can't quite manage it. I have a tv remote to find.

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Ok, so I was correct about Ren, since he's completely avoiding my guess.

No clue about ASfarasiam, but still a wierd hunch.

Wierd about that P. Cook showing up, when she says she didn't write it...I seem to remember 1 time Stevie's name showed up on a script he didn't write, as well.  Is someone messin' round?

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Ren wrote my favourite entry? Haven't read anything from him so it's probably not a surprise.

And Pia didn't write Current Events? Also a surprise. Will be nice to see who wrote what hopefully soon.
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DS,

As I said about the remote I avoid speculation about authors. Particularly as the voting is not yet closed. Note I'm taking the moral high ground in some type of desperate tatical ploy designed to bewilder. Hang on, explaining it isn't helping. Moving on...

To confirm or deny such wild stabs in the dark is to justify them. Which obviously wouldn't suit.

Anyway, I suspect you're just diverting attention away from the sheep.

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I wrote the 1 pager

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No. I did.

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No... Keyser Soze!

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I'm Brian!

And so's my wife.

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It's a curious thing. I just wandered into this post, and see someone talking about all these artifacts that went missing from their life lately, and all I could think was it's probably that creepy little Mischievous Entity from the Knot Clan;

KNOT - M.E.  (Not Me)

He is, after all, the scapegoat that has taken the fall many o' times in my house whenever I ask my kids who took all my cell phone chargers...

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Quoted from mmmarnie
The only one I'm pretty sure about is which one Johnny wrote...it was my fave. And I think I have Dustin's pegged...mayyyybe. Feeding an American to the sharks.


You're correct. I thought mine was a little too obvious this time. I had yours down as To Catch a Predator... but I'm probably wrong. The assumption is based purely off how little the action blocks start with a character name... even to the extent of using a past tense word at the beginning.

If that is you, then congratulations. It's a great story.
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I wrote the one about the shark.


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Quoted from MarkRenshaw
I wrote the one about the shark.

Someone actually put a shark in their rogue shark attack story?

Novel idea!




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So, like... with four pissers out of thirty submissions, 13%, suggesting that others likely considered not only writing a pisser but also submitting it, when are you guys gonna get around to a April Fool's Day Pisser OWC?

I've brought this up before, and obviously not only do writers seem to enjoy writing them, and readers seem to enjoy reading them, but you guys actually vote that you like them!
(HEY! WhereTH did that poll thread goto? Poofs-ville?)

So, what's the hold up?
What's the beef, the ob-stackle, the prob?
Why can't ya'll do this?



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