The beginning doesn't appear to take place in July 2013.  Or maybe it's a place void of time?  Not sure.

There was a lot going on here.  I liked some of it but have to admit I did get lost in some parts.  

Interesting idea for this challenge. I wouldn't think the Pacific NW would inspire and Adam & Eve story so I wonder if it's been floating around in your head for a while.

The writing itself was good, it just sort of went over my head.

I was going along with the story, enjoying the interpretation of the Garden of Eden, but it suddenly got a little too literal for me.  And a a little preachy.  I think for this story to work, you need to be moreimaginative than this.  The forbidden tree was meant to be a quest for knowledge, IIRC.  Instead of an apple, use a book.  Or a computer.  Or something.

I'd make Adam and Eve a little older than what you have them.  Especially if you're going to show them naked.


Hope this helps.


Phil

I thought this was fairly solid. The conflict in it is fine.

Perhaps it overdoes the use of Garden of Eden mythology, since we probably need an explanation of some of this stuff.

I see a few comments that this isn’t set in July 2013, but from my reading of it I thought it was.