Thanks for the read.

I agree this needs some expansion to tie up problems and loose ends.  I'll put it on my list.

What i really want(ed) to do, was have Marshall be a little freaked out about what he heard on the phone, but not really think anything of it until sharon starts messing with him more and he finally figures out that she's not going to let up until he helps her.

I only did it in flashes with him seeing the paper changed, and catching her in the mirror.

The thing with the phone number and even the conversation itself is somewhat related to Sharon's manipulation.  What he was hearing wasn't necessarily taking place in real time.  It seems kinda weird when I think about it now since he actually did have a conversation with the man, but that's the gist of what I was trying to get across.

The telemarketer line, as well as the couple lines that followed were really difficult for me to put in.  I could swear that I actually took out the "You're my hero" line and left it at "You're much more than that", but I guess I didn't.  I agree it's cheesy.

Thanks again.

Hey Mike,

I think I enjoyed this more than most, judging from some of your previous posts.  I'm not really into excessive violence so this was a little more up my alley but I can understand the luke-warm reaction from others.

Just to touch on some previous comments:

I like how it opened with him in his apartment.  I could see what you're doing here - establishing him as a sort of plain, unassuming guy.  He lives alone and his life is fairly routine.  That worked for me.

I also liked that this has sort of become an obsession for him - finding this girl.  It might help if he uncovers a picture of her - so he can put a face to his quest (not the scared-up version that appears to him).

The revenge aspect towards the end with Marshall setting the boat on fire didn't quite work for me.  It kind of removed the good-will I was feeling up to that point.  I think it would play better if the killer were to die somhow in the struggle - more accidental or in self-defense.

I'm not sure if this was cliched or not.  It felt fresh and unique enough to me but maybe I don't watch as many movies as some.

I'll agree with you that this would work better as a feature.  I think some things still need to be fleshed out.  All-in-all though - good job.