I'm guessing the romantic obstacle is, neither knows if the other's gay, and they don't want to give away their own gayness, hence they have to talk around the subject and feel each other out. I don't think it succeeded. They never got a verbal commitment. One moment they were talking, the next they were fooling around. Maybe this is the way it goes in reality, I wouldn't know. But I never got a feeling of rising sexual tension.

Also, give us a bit more description of how a blind is laid out and how they fit in and move around each other for those of us who have no idea what it's like. What does it sound like? Is it cold, or warm and steamy? Give us a bit of atmosphere.

For the rest, the character descriptions were a bit sketchy, I didn't appreciate the humor, the song was more of a bawdy ballad, and I have to say, it's one of my least favorite entries.

It felt to me that you were trying to go out and do the nasty with this one.

And I think it was interesting from a "what if" perspective. What if
I portray these gay guys as rough hunters, who are typically not
gay material.

Kind of felt like it was done on a lark.

Sandra

My bad on this one folks.  A Friday evening entry.

This one was chuckled at by a few and (understandably so) scorned by the rest. I think the reviews by Sandra E. and M. Cornetto were spot on.

Gary

Quoted from grademan My bad on this one folks.  A Friday evening entry. This one was chuckled at by a few and (understandably so) scorned by the rest. I think the reviews by Sandra E. and M. Cornetto were spot on. Gary

I think there is a reason you wrote this. I loved how you pushed the edge. The "limits" that we understand in reality, even apparent moral limits, are given to us and I think our whole awareness might happen when we "challenge" them and get some kind of "feeling" afterwards.

It might be an "I bucked the system" feeling. Or an "I did "the right thing" feeling. But it's always some kind of calculation that resides within our own personal will. Or, what we perceive as our personal will.

Pushing the edge, is something Anne Rice did very well in "Lasher". There's a conflict of forces.

And to add a bit more:

A great quote from Spiderman Comics

It echoes words from the Bible :

"For God has not given us a spirit of fear, but of power and of love and of a sound mind."

All obstacles, are actually blessings in disguise; they are sweetened like a bitter fruit is sweetened.

Some people might find this script revolting, but I believe within my heart, that the impure forces are necessary and good, as strange and unbelievable as that might sound.

Sandra