*spoilers*

I'll agree with the others, this must've been a blast to write! Definitely in the spirit of RHPS, Forbidden Zone, Little Shop of Horrors, and Phantom of the Paradise. I still get goosebumps when I see Winslow Leech drag his bloody ass across the deck as the party continues over his defeat.

What I dig about musicals is the moments of honesty the characters share with us amongst the complete craziness of their world. Dr. Flash was so obsessed to meet this chick - only to reveal his true, shallow nature - hell is always served with honesty. Fun stuff.

Writer,

I think this one has a lot of potential. Very different, edgy... Given more time this one could be much better. I think your lyrics worked in places, other times not. Great imagery, stylish writing.

Fav line:

Descending from the portal is ELECTRIC QUEEN, 20s, entranced
goddess, menacing beauty, killer bust. Her skin glows a neon
teal, her eyes ablaze with fire.

DR. FLASH
YEAAAA!

Yeah, I think if I was Dr. Flash I'd be saying that.

One thing I think brought this down was...

He dissed her because she had a zit? Wow. Pretty shallow, even for Dr. Flash. You might think he'd look past the zit, what with that killer bust and all!

Regardless, I liked it very much even though it didn't really fit the parameters of the challenge. But good luck with this! It seems like this can be stretched into -- drum roll -- a feature perhaps? Haven't had a good twisted musical in a while.

Steve

"Twigs Meows" is a great line.

"An image of a hot, devilish HORNED WOMAN, 20s, burns beside
him. Dr. Flash appraises her with his own pelvic thrusts." My sides.

Okay, I have to say, I absolutely loved this. I mean, really loved this, it's special in every sense of the word special. It's got a lot going for it, enough so that it's actually struck inspiration in me for a few scripts of my own. The effort that goes into crafting lyrics but keeping the same pace as a normal feature in musicals always baffles me, but you do it really well here. I might have a clue about the writer, but I'd rather not embarrass myself. Will be interesting to see who wrote this, one of my favourite scripts for the past few OWCs.

Definitely like a few of the suggestions made by Dan too.

Whoever likes this may appreciate Simeli Mountain by Kyle Patric Johnson.
It's on MP:
http://moviepoet.com/script.aspx?scriptid=1372

Really great stuff. And the writer I'm sure will like Kyle's as well.

I'm a fan!! of both of you. ))

This is most certainly a serious effort, from a competent author.  Descriptions such as this are not found in a script where someone is just farting around:

Quoted from script ...a spindrift of funky, demonic forces...

Love it.  Word choice is perfect throughout -- and written with affection for past films that have tread similar territory, RHPS clearly amongst that short list.  Perhaps a dash of Dr. Horrible.

I am at a total loss to name a potential author here.  This almost feels like Shelton, for those who know him, but I doubt he is participating.

The only weak link for me is the zit.  Perhaps a smile -- revealing rotten teeth -- would be better -- or something a bit more off-putting than a single blemish, at any rate.

But high praise from me for this effort.  I do so hope it is an author who is active in this OWC.  I hate it when I really like a script from a slacker.

This was great.  Cool character names, awesome visuals, and I loved all the lyrics.

I didn't enter the OWC, so I don't feel obligated to read all the entries, but out of the few that I  checked out, this one is my favorite so far.

Whoever wrote this...great stuff, man.  You nailed it.

#1 Pick, by far!

13.  Halloween Baby! by The Other Purple One - A hip scientist invents a way to summon his dream girl from hell, but is she everything he's dreamed of?

Alright, I’m not “really” reading your screenplay, I’m going to “watch” this short horror-fantasy film and just make comments as I “watch.”

With a title like ‘Halloween Baby!’ I’m expecting something fun!
Grinning in anticipation at the opening moments.
This is great. Like a RHPS+Nightmare Before Christmas mashup! Luv it!
Absolutely FANTASTIC!
Loved it. Great show. Delightfully entertaining. Thank you.
I hope you can cobble together enough material to write a feature and then get this produced. Good luck!

Suggested construct alternatives:
- None.

Impressive for just one week! Damn! Of course I'm the idiot that makes a one week challenge a two day challenge by procrastinating...anyway, I think this covers horror as far as genres go even if it's a musical. The guy's face is half ripped off, people! Excellent.

While musicals and such are not my thing, this one was a super fast read. Just a fun time at the SS rest stop.  Not much I can add, but I know I could never in a century write something so off the hook as this. Nowhere near what I would expect, but that's what creativity is all about. Thanks for saving the cat.

Still, very nice.  

Nice work. This was one of my considers. I gave it a consider and not a recommend because I feel the lyrics will need working on for quite some time to perfect. A week is nowhere near long enough to pull a script like this off to perfection.

I bet my mate would love this script. He's a music producer and has access to composers, singers and whatever. For a script like this the music would need to be produced from the ground up.

I think another expense with this would be animation. But I don't think it needs to be animation. We have a VFX guy that would probably love to get stuck into something like this.

Another thing is, I honestly think this would smash it at festivals. Especially those held close to autumn. You have to be remembered somehow and/or make people laugh. This script does both. It deserves a budget of several K, but could be done for less depending on resources. Good luck.

I can't believe you didn't divulge this info at the orgy!!

I'm gonna' resonate what everyone else is saying here. Fantastic, creative, huge shiny script man! ...was a favorite by far, and for obvious reasons... I'm jealous as hell that you pulled this off! Lol

I say that because I mulled over (for about 36 hours) a similar concept, but just couldn't figure out the logistics of it. I had a V.O. going on with my main character, but then realized it was against the theme rules, so I had to scrap it... eh, maybe in the days ahead I'll get something out.  Anyways, I was 110% on board with a vote to bring this in, congrats amigo, well done!

Hey all, thanks for every kind comment and having an open mind. Didn't really think this would live up to the high standards here, so I'm kinda shocked. I really thought it would divide opinions - which in a way it did - but I'm stoked that even though it wasn't up some readers' alley, it was still considered worthwhile.

Inspired by Purple Rain, Dr. Horrible, and some others that were in my "selfie" comment (RHPS a big one) I grew up on this stuff. I always wanted to do a musical, and hit me instantly when the challenge was announced. I was hoping to learn about correct formatting of musicals, maybe some pointers. The lyrics were an issue - I'm looking to fix that. I'm not much of a songwriter, hopefully I can get some help with that.

@ Darren

Thanks for the notes regarding cadence and puncuation. I didn't realize it until you said somthing. Also, looking over some other musical scripts, the sung part is italized, so I just switched them when we was kinda talking out the rhyme and when he sang it.

@ Rick

You totally blew my mind when you dropped Phantom of the Paradise. It too is one of my all time favs, bro.

@ Dan & Bert

Great suggestions! Mind if I use them? Lol!

@ Mo

Super stoked that I inspired you. Don't know what to say.

@ Marnie & Khamanna

Thanks for the orgy. I'm so glad you didn't know this was mine, part of the reason I left a comment on this. I felt the heat! Haha! Khamanna is psychic, you should ask her next time you're trying to figure me out.

Overwhelmed by this! Thanks everyone.