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A different kind of musical. Lots of great visual fodder.
Ole Dr. Flash is one odd dude...  
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I actually looked up “Halloween Baby! song” since the opening lines suggest that we should be familiar with its tune…Let’s just say the search yielded “no results”.

You should know that screenwriting 101 will tell you that your protagonist may kill as many people as they want but under no circumstance must they murder animals, particularly cats and dogs! Dr. Flash had lost me by the end of page 1! Joking of course, on the contrary, I liked the surprise snapping of feline vertebra.

I also liked Dr. Flash’s caressing of the machine’s switchboard panel buttons before he presses them, a nice off-kilter touch.

Not much of a story here but I get that’s not the point, the lyrics/dialogue were amusing and inventive in parts and I have to give credit for something I wouldn't even attempt to write.

Plus, and most importantly, you saved the cat!

Col.


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@ KPM & Col,

Thanks for the read. When I finished this, Twigs the cat was a goner for sure. Before I submitted it, I thought that bringing the cat back to life would win some folks over.

Like any musical, I wanted the weight of the story to fall on the lyrics, so yeah - not really too much narrative going on with it. Looking over it, some of the lyrics don't add up. I wrote the lyrics first and then tweaked them to fit the visuals. Needs more tweaking...
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