I quite liked this, Eric, love how you implement this broad fantasy or even sci-fi angle into a script set to (mostly) a single location. There's this script bought by Scott Free Productions a few years back called Ion, written by this fellow named Will Dunn, I got a lot of similar vibes here. You should check it out. A solid effort, mate.

One of my two faves. GREAT JOB!!!!!

Intriguing, from beginning to end.
So well written. Grabbed me immediately. An easy read.
Curious how Rick got Petra, but not essential...  

Eric

Love the title.

How did Petra unscrew all four bed legs from the floor if she was chained to the bedpost? Would Rick have allowed that much slack in it?

“THUNDER RUMBLES. A beat passes. LIGHTNING FLASHES again.
Petra counts again.

"One"..."Two"..."Thr-"

- Instantly reminded me of Poltergeist. I half expected a mischievous tree to come bursting through the window at any minute and try to consume her

RICK
(shouting)
Alright, you can have her back! On
one condition!

- Really, you’re going to try and bargain with this thing? The subsequent rail spike through his neck confirmed my thinking that this wasn't a very smart way to approach the situation.

Some great stuff in here, you gave us a tantalizing taster off the mythology with the trophy cabinet, photo and intriguing plaque inscription. I really wanted to learn more about how Rick came to acquire Petra in the first place but I get why you couldn't.

I dug the set up , locale and tornado-as-wrath-of-[insert E.T here] metaphor. Left me with many questions though but the fact that I’m genuinely curious about them shows it worked for what it was.

Good job.

Col.

Thanks colkurtz, kpm and everyone who read and reviewed. I meant to post something earlier (something more extensive), but never got around to it.

Kudos to dbm for sussing out the inspiration for this one. I just happened to be listening to a lot of Neko Case when the challenge came and was enjoying that song's idea of a tornado representing destructive love. I was thinking about the circumstances someone would have to be in to actually welcome such affection, and also trying to figure out how it could fit the challenge.

The one person dialogue gave me pause, but once I came up with Rick severing Petra's vocal chords things got easier, as Petra was someone who wanted to talk, but couldn't. As for why, it was so she couldn't cry out for help. I imagine she was abducted covertly so Rick wouldn't have to deal directly with the Warrior.

As for how someone as simple as Rick would be included in this clandestine interdimensional safari group... nepotism. Sure Rick's a dunce, but he's Bob's cousin. And we all owe Bob don't we? Just give him the mystical blood vial. What's the worst that can happen?

Other than that, things are either self-explanatory or intentionally ambiguous. Thanks again to everyone.

Congrats on winning this.

I could see why lol. Are you planning to expand on this? Or revise it? Lol. You have a lot of material to cover. Not saying it's a bad thing. You just got me intrigued.

Other than that, I got nothing. Lol.

Gabe