Wow, another macabre little entry... Not exactly my thing, and the pee aka lemonade, and the bird were a bit offputting, but well done, regardless.

I was not on the ball with the V.O. I found it a bit discombobulating, especially at first.
I tend to agree that it should come in the former of a sinister Narrator (like Dave said.)

Iinventive for sure.
Good job.

People didn't love this but they didn't hate it either, which overall I'm happy about.

My first draft had no dialogue at all or VO and it just felt empty. I added dialogue but all the characters where saying obvious stuff like, "Who is responsible for these elf pranks?" so I added the VO to make it sound like a kid reciting a Christmas carol which seemed to work. I left one line of dialogue in which didn't work at all.

As for the ending, well all the family has been naughty in their own way, it's just dad is the most obvious naughty one. So they all get turned into elves and become a fun, elf family. Not obvious I know, but I wanted an ending that wasn't obvious and made people think.

Thanks for the comments, as always they point me in the direction of writing a much better draft for competitions!