There was some very immersive and atmospheric parts in this script, and some wonderful colourful characters.  But there were three different stories here in such a small space, and felt like three disparate pieces, I think it was too much for such a short script.

I didn't quiet get what was happening, I think it was a place for the dead to get revenge on he living.  But found it ambiguous to exactly what happened to Father James or his relationship with Edward.

Still really enjoyed this one, probably my favourite so far.

This is a pretty good entry, and I think a good start to something bigger. Yes, there is too much story packed into the tight page restriction, but again, once the challenge is over you can break out.

I thought the start of the script was the strongest.  The priest's story was interesting.  Each succeeding story worked less well for me.

the writing is very good. You are one of the few writers who understands that writing decades (as in '70s), requireis no apostrophe.  Excellent!

I would definitely change the Ophelia, Amelia name confusion.

In the Amelia scene, there are a couple of instances where you tell us what is going on internally.  Easy fixes and for the most part, you follow with an action or reaction that taps into her memory.

Your story feels like an anthology and that it is meant to go big.  I can see the characters crossing paths in the story, early on, to give everything a connection.  Overall, I liked what I read.  Preferred the priest story, but was into the set up.  Do a rewrite and go wider, my friend.

I agree with most comments here.

Good writing, very clear and crisp, but the story I was confused about and I think you would have been able to make it a lot better with 20 pages or so.

Good stuff, shame about the limitations. Rewrite coming soon I hope.

Hey everybody, thanks for the great feedback, it's spot-on.

I use these challenges to try new things, but I bit off more than I could chew this time with three separate stories. I wanted more of a vignette-style but the stories didn't gel as well as I'd first thought, probably because of the rushed edit I had to do.

Ray's budget breakdown opened my eyes for sure. I had a different idea of micro-budget when I wrote this, I know some producers who consider $1000-per-minute to be micro-budget. By that reasoning I came in under budget with the $7k-$9k Ray estimated, but seeing what others were able to come up with for a fraction of that budget put me to shame. I'll keep that in mind for the future.

I like the concept here and plan on giving this the rewrite it needs, with better budget control.

Good job man

Congrats, Rene.

Not my fave, as you saw from my feedback, but it's the popular vote that counts and you excelled there.

You definitely went big and I give you Kudos for that.

It's interesting with the staggered release of scripts. Sometimes, the first batch gets the most reads, while other times, once they drop off the portal, they get buried down there.

I think you had enough good word of mouth to keep your script up, so new readers got a chance to give it a ride.

Great job, man!!