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First: Thanks to Pia and Michael for the excellent suggestion for an OWC.

Second: Thank you to everyone who took the challenge.  A week is not a long time and there were some good scripts and despite what some might think, I could tell that everyone took the challenge seriously.

Third: The Writer's Choices were (in no particular order)

ExtraTERRORestrial by Dena McKinnon (paleyellow)
One of God's Special Children by Jeff Bush (dreamscale)
The Ledger by Rene Claveau (renec)

I'm waiting on releases from several writers before I send the scripts over to iScript to select and audio perform one.


Who Wrote What

The Ledger by Rene Claveau (renec) - Short - When travelers take refuge from a hurricane, they learn not all shelters are safe havens. - pdf, format


Sacred Acceptance by Renee Joynson (bflywings) - Short - {no logline} - pdf, format


Lost in the Storm by Janet Clark (wonkavite) - Short - Brought together by a missing children's convention, three strangers bond over shared grief and loss.  But when a storm traps them in their hotel for the night, one of them finds their ordeal far from over. - pdf, format


Into The Eye by Bill Sarre (reef dreamer) - Short, drak comedy - When two storm chasers are forced by a hurricane to take refuge in an abandoned motel, they soon discover the locals are more challenging than the weather. - pdf, format


Super Inn by Khamanna Isdandarova (khamanna) - Short - A young woman must rekindle her supernatural powers to save her sister's life - pdf, format


Isidro by Darren James Seeley (darrenjamesseeley) - Short - A documentary crew and a couple find shelter in a laundry room of an abandoned motel during a hurricane. But is a werewolf after them? Or is it something else? - pdf, format


The Cycle by Mohammad Nawaz (nawazm11) - Short - After a seemingly crazy man takes shelter in the motel room of two siblings from the hurricane that rages outside, he begins claiming that a monster will kill them unless they leave the room immediately.  - pdf, format


Procella by Gage Eggleston (asteroidjuice) - Short - The tempest is here, its wrath is universally damning.  Its origins are dark and mysterious.  Can it be stopped? - pdf, format


Double or Nothing by Clabe R. Polk (trapper) - Short - {no logline} - pdf, format


ExtraTERRORestrial by Dena McKinnon (paleyellow) - Short - As a hurricane rages, an alien bent on revenge must fight two other enemy space travellers, who have chosen an abandoned motel on Earth as their battleground. - pdf, format


Corpus Christi by Mark Lyons (rc1107) - Short - A homeless man and his mother beg the owner of a lonely motel for shelter from an approaching storm. - pdf, format


Left or Right by Alex Sarris (alex_212) - Short - An eccentric lawyer takes refuge from a hurricane in an unusual beat-up hotel. His perception of good and evil is distorted, as everything is not as it seems. - pdf, format


House by Steve Cadieux - Short - needed refuge from the weather, she find a place, make a unexpected acquainted character, ho hide a dark mystery.  - pdf, format


The Final Trip by Thomas Pascal (Tommyp) - Short - A hurricane turns what could have been the ultimate road trip for two best friends into a real-life nightmare. The culprit? A cup of hot, steamy tea... - pdf, format


Deliver Us From Evil by L. Chambers - Short - A man's faith is tested as he attempts to evade an unknown assailant. - pdf, format


Damages by Kayla Minchew - Short - When a priest chooses an old motel as sanctuary from a hurricane, he must protect his entrusted companion from an unstable resident, the violent elements, and possibly, even himself. - pdf, format


Johnny by Dirk Visser (DV44) - Short -  On the brink of insanity, Johnny makes a life altering decision.  - pdf, format


One of God's Special Children by Jeff Bush (dreamscale) - Short - Hurricane Wilma battered the Florida Keys in October, 2005.  On a lonely Key, a young woman must make a decision that could affect the entire world. - pdf, format


The Tool of Morality by Ray Whitter (RayW) - Short - An strange couple takes refuge one night from a hurricane in a run down motel where decisions about morality create a constant flow of choices between good or evil and the survival of humanity. - pdf, format


Jericho by Will Ball (albinopenguin) - Short - A priest and a harlot take refuge in a desolate motel. - pdf, format


When God owns a motel by Mark Moore (irish eyes) - Short - In the most unlikely of places, one man gets another shot of redemption. Which path will he choose? - pdf, format


Room 107 by Reginald Beltran (kingcooky555) - Short - Bank robbers make a pit stop to a remote hotel on their way to Mexico. - pdf, format


A Light In Room Twelve by James Williams (jwent668 - Short - A couple seek refuge in a motel during a hurricane, despite the inn keeper's warnings. - pdf, format


Darkness by Arsenij Voitko (vaultman) - Short - A murderer refuses to follow his supernatural master's orders and leaves his victim to live, only to find himself as the new victim. - pdf, format


Cowboy Sam by Leon Aria (leon) - Short - A supernatural being, a friend, an enemy, a deviant. Cowboy Sam - pdf, format


Room 3 by Dan Ball (danball) - Short - A couple having an affair spend the night in a secluded motel and become involved in the affairs of other guests who are battling their own demons and demons from beyond. - pdf, format


A Dark and Stormy Weekend by Will Campbell (crookedowl) - Short - At a writers’ retreat, four writers are trapped in their motel with a raging hurricane outside and a killer inside. But worst of all, they have writer’s block. - pdf, format


Skitzo by  David M Troop (dtroop506) - Short - {no logline} - pdf, format


Blood Ties by Steve McDonell (stevie) - Short - As a hurricane bears down on the Texas coast, a man arrives at a remote motel, searching for his missing brother.  He soon uncovers a horrible secret, which threatens to release an ancient, primal power. Horror, 8 pages - pdf, format


Bad Juju by marnie mitchell lister (marnieml) - Short - When a hurricane approaches, residents of a flood prone homeless shelter seek refuge at The Hilltop Motel, but some will soon find out the storm isn't their greatest danger. - pdf, format 8)


Skiptrace by Sean Chipman (Mr. Blonde) - Short - When a bounty hunter takes shelter in a motel with a bail jumper, he finds out that maybe the bounty hunter was the one being sought. - pdf, format 8)


Those That Help Themselves by Mikos Zavros - Short - Two men and one woman on the way to their next music gig find a deserted motel and a free room in a hurricane. But is it luck that brought them here? - pdf, format 8)


Forgotten Faith by Steven Cooper - Short - A motel owner’s faith is put to the test. - pdf, format 8)


Ghosts of the Third Reich by Greg Baldwin (greg) - Short, Thriller - A nerdy ghost hunter must negotiate with a Nazi poltergeist in order to save his family or face a second Holocaust. - pdf, format 8)


Will the Real Demon Please Rise by Gary Kohatsu (Abe from LA) - Short - During a hurricane, a police officer responds to an incident at a motel, where among its inhabitants is a demon with a sexual appetite. - pdf, format 8)


Now Lie In It by Felipe Machado (cinemachado) - Short - A couple struggles with a tough choice after making a bad deal with the devil. - pdf, format 8)




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Well, I'll be damned.  Shoulda known Ray wrote The Tool of Morality.  Somehow it all fits.  And shockingly it turns out I had nothing to do with Cowboy Sam.
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Doh! How could we not see that Ray did TOM!

The drollness of it, the decapitations, the throw away carnage...not to mention the eating of hair pie.

Actually, it sounds more like...

Yo, Ray, have you been reading Jeff's diaries?  



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Congrats, everyone! I love seeing who wrote what script!


'Artist' is not a term you should use to refer to yourself. Let others, and your work, do it for you.
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I count 36...think they are all there
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Very interesting.

And special Congrats to Miss Dena!!!  WOOHOO!!!!!

Nice job!!!  
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Congrats to Jefff, Dena, and Rene. And don't forgot Leon.

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Thanks Jeff...congrats to you also
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Congrats Jeff and Dena! I have no idea what I'm doing in the mix, I figured middle-of-the-pack this time. So, thanks voters!


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You are right. I also noticed there were a couple I haven't read yet.


I think you missed my Damages script
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My apologies to Rene...I read it as in order, but now I see it isn't...

Congrats to all!  Pretty good turnout.
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There were some great scripts this OWC. Congrats Jeff, Dena and Rene.
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Congrats to Jeff and Rene - two solid scripts but I voted for Dena's.  Very well done!


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Congrats to Dena, Jeff and Rene.
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I actually read that one, but read it while away and only had my iPad or phone and I hate typing on those.  


Ahhh don't blame you...I can't even stand typing on a laptop keyboard muchless an ipad(if I had one of those) lol

Thanks again for the owc Pia.
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I think you missed my Damages script


I believe you mean Kayla Minchew's Damages...


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I believe you mean Kayla Minchew's Damages...


Felipe...

I only had Wednesday afternoon to write ...and after I wrote one...I couldn't help myself and so I wrote another one. Kayla is the vampire in the pic to the left (my avatar)....my daughter.

If it messed the contest up, I will gladly bow out. I voted for Jeff's script though. I didn't vote for myself.
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I know, haha. I was just making a joke


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I don't think what you did is unfair. In fact, it's very impressive. Either of your scripts could have won and one did!


'Artist' is not a term you should use to refer to yourself. Let others, and your work, do it for you.
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Felipe...

I only had Wednesday afternoon to write ...and after I wrote one...I couldn't help myself and so I wrote another one. Kayla is the vampire in the pic to the left (my avatar)....my daughter.

If it messed the contest up, I will gladly bow out. I voted for Jeff's script though. I didn't vote for myself.


The one you put your own name on is the one in the top three. Even if it wasn't the first one you entered (I'm assuming it was), I'd still call it valid. It's a friendly competition. Unless Kayla was actually the ghostwriter, then you should be ashamed of yourself and we should pummel you with pumpkins. Small ones.  


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OK   don't wanna be unfair

I just write like the wind. When I get started I cannot stop ...it's like a drug consuming my mind...my fingers...I don't even know what I'm typing and when it's all over...it's like an ultimate climax...and I sleep very well.

Yeah, I'm crazy
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The one you put your own name on is the one in the top three. Even if it wasn't the first one you entered (I'm assuming it was), I'd still call it valid. It's a friendly competition. Unless Kayla was actually the ghostwriter, then you should be ashamed of yourself and we should pummel you with pumpkins. Small ones.  


Punkins!!! I love punkins!!! Nah...my daughter doesn't write at all ...but she's digital on those computer games! LOL
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Congratz, Dena, Rene and Jeff.

I thought Stevie wrote One of God's Special Children, only because his name was in the properties.
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Jeff is crafty like that.


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I thought Stevie wrote One of God's Special Children, only because his name was in the properties.




One of my many attempts to conceal my identity, and make it look like someone else wrote it.

I also used parenthesis for my character descriptions, which I never do, and even went so far as to skip some commas early on.

I also used some crazy (for me, at least) descriptors, like "exactly what you'd expect - not much" and my favorite, "like Denzell in his prime".

HaHa...I was laughing my ass off about that one.

I was even wondering if peeps might suspect Michael Harrop, AKA Michael Alexander, for the religious angle.

And finally, I threw in 2 songs, 1 being The Beatles Yellow Submarine, to further incriminate Stevie.

Sorry, mate, I couldn't resist.

Thanks to all who voted and enjoyed it.

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Felipe...

I only had Wednesday afternoon to write ...and after I wrote one...I couldn't help myself and so I wrote another one. Kayla is the vampire in the pic to the left (my avatar)....my daughter.

If it messed the contest up, I will gladly bow out. I voted for Jeff's script though. I didn't vote for myself.


It is all good. If you can slip a second one by me, without me catching it, then it is a legit script.

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Yay Thanks Master Don Sir much happiness ....

I owe you a bottle of vino

I din't mean to be sneaky...I just love to write!
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You're a sneaky mime, you are!
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Hey, congrats guys. Looking forward to hearing the 'chosen one'.

And well done to everyone else, was definitely entertaining to read what people came up with.


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When can we submit for revisions?


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Quoted from DarrenJamesSeeley
When can we submit for revisions?


Please don't...  

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Please don't...  



If it's an effective method of interrogation for you  
you're darned right I'm putting it up.

Other than that, good job on cracking the top three.
Did I read you yet? No? Aw, shucks.

(I will though. When I'm sober stone cold drunk)


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Hey peeps, in all seriousness...

I'm very surprised so few have chimed in and/or taken credit for their work.

Looks like only a few provided ZERO reads, and we know who you are, so..get on it, damnit!

It only make sense to jump in and say a few words about your entry.  Peeps actually do want to know what you have to say and we are interested.

On a different note, it always does surprise me how many peeps want to immediate do a rewrite and re-post.  In all seriousness (damn, that's twice I've  said that), step back and take it all in before you worry about rewriting this or anything.

And when you do, lose the strict parameters that brought many an entry down.  Write it how you want to and don't worry about each and every requirement.

OWC's are great tools to learn how to write under the gun on subjects that may not thrill you.

I know I was harsh at times, and I apologize if anyone's feelings were seriously hurt.  Not my aim in any way.  Everyone who entered deserves a big pat on the back, and for the ladies, that could be a pat on the bum...  
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If it's an effective method of interrogation for you  
you're darned right I'm putting it up.

Other than that, good job on cracking the top three.
Did I read you yet? No? Aw, shucks.

(I will though. When I'm sober stone cold drunk)


I was kidding, Darren.

Don't break your streak now, bro.  I don't need any reads from you.  Keep your total at zero.  I like when peeps owe me something, and you, my friend, owe me about 14 or 15 reads.  

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You're a sneaky mime, you are!


This is your whole review of my owc last year(first one I ever wrote in my life)

Sorry, I'm out again in less than 3 passages.  Doesn't work as written at all, and this is so over written, as others have mentioned.

Congrats on completing an entry for the October OWC.  


So this year is a big leap for me...and you were actually 'soft' compared to normal Jeff!
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Who is in your consideration?  It fucking better be Cowboy Sam!!

And to all who didn't believe me about not writing Cowboy Sam, what do you have to say now?  Huh?  HUH?  

Leon, you rock, bro!!!  Amazing effort and I do actually really mean that.  Your script will live on forever, at least for me.

I was pretty sure Ryan had actually written it.  Then, I thought maybe Led had thrown it together on a bender Friday night.
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Maybe people are Halloweening tonight, Jeff. Not everyone sits home alone with a sad tray of snacks and light beers!!


Like me. I sit home alone with nothing because I can't afford snacks or light beer. Why do you have to make fun of me?!

*runs away, crying*


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This is your whole review of my owc last year(first one I ever wrote in my life)

Sorry, I'm out again in less than 3 passages.  Doesn't work as written at all, and this is so over written, as others have mentioned.

Congrats on completing an entry for the October OWC.  


So this year is a big leap for me...and you were actually 'soft' compared to normal Jeff!


Jeff is always soft. No wonder he can't get a root...

Cheers to all who read Blood Ties. It came out a bit different to how I imagined it, but I was happy with it.


Like all of my OWC entries, I won't be re- writing it. I have other things to work on.

Pia, feel free to do stuff with it if u like. Cornie gave it a good rap, as did Ray( sort of).

Congrats to the top three! I voted for Skiptrace but liked Jeff's; had no idea it was his, either.



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Yeah, I liked Skip[trace as well.  Thought sure it would make the top 3 or so.

Stevie, I'm not going to be soft for long....actually, I'm going to be long!  

yeah, I wish.  No Halloweening for me.  I need a mime or 2...
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Yeah, I liked Skip[trace as well.  Thought sure it would make the top 3 or so.


Funny thing is, reading your review, I think you've warmed up to it over time. Just a funny thing I noticed when I replied to Pia and Dan.


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Congrats to the winners.

Dena you're a legend, can you please email me a signed autograph, before you become famous. Hee Hee.

Sorry I didn't have enough time to read all the screenplays, as I was snowed under. I was stuck in a motel during a hurricane !!!!

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Funny thing is, reading your review, I think you've warmed up to it over time. Just a funny thing I noticed when I replied to Pia and Dan.


I think I was fairly positive about it, wasn't I?  Easily in the top 7 or 8 for me.

But peeps seemed to love it, so I assumed it would be a finalist.

Sean, as I've told you, I think you're a good writer and I wish more had, or will read your Christmas Story script.  It has lots going for it, and you know I rarely say that.

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Sorry I didn't have enough time to read all the screenplays, as I was snowed under. I was stuck in a motel during a hurricane !!!!


Did you comment on any, Alex?  I don't recall seeing you say anything, but I could be wrong.
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I'm going to be soft for a long time.  No Halloweenie for me.





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Who is in your consideration?


I concur! Please tell us, Pia.
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This contest taught me humility. I thought I'd crank out some magical, enchanted PDF and use all my prowess to make this amazing. Then, I got "Room 3" and it angered some (Ray) and confused the rest. Part ofme thinks its hilarious that it was that bad and part of me is sad that it didn't do better.

I liked this assignment because I really didn't like the premise, but that was the challenge. And making sure all the requirements got in there was a chore too. I couldn't even do that right. But it was SUPER nice to write something and turn it in. Sense of accomplishment: achieved. In the end, I'm not sure if I'll rewrite or just relish The experience and move on.


"I remember a time of chaos. Ruined dreams. This wasted land. But most of all, I remember The Road Warrior. The man we called 'Max'."

THE PINBALL WARRIOR (scifi, WIP, ~30 pg.)
A STAND AGAINST EVIL (short, 9 pg.)
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Who is in your consideration?  It fucking better be Cowboy Sam!!

And to all who didn't believe me about not writing Cowboy Sam, what do you have to say now?  Huh?  HUH?  

Leon, you rock, bro!!!  Amazing effort and I do actually really mean that.  Your script will live on forever, at least for me.

I was pretty sure Ryan had actually written it.  Then, I thought maybe Led had thrown it together on a bender Friday night.


I was positive that Jeff had written it, just given the nature of the script.  Oops.  Haven't seen Leon on these boards in awhile, so I hope he took the comments on Cowboy Sam in stride.  When I thought Jeff wrote it, I was sure it was a pizzer.  Now I'm not so sure.

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Congrats to the chosen scripts. I chose the Light under room 12.

Also, I apologize to all the Guns "N roses fans that I offended as I know realized after the fact. Welcome to Jungle was blasting on a friday night when I got to that point and should have realized singer does not equal guitarist.

Didn't have an ending in mind and I think it showed as people commented on how I didn't have a clear ending. It was definitely fun to write the superheroes as I didn't have to create names/backgrounds and could just rip off their banter.

Thanks for comments and let me know if I missed other entries and want me to quickly review.
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Congrats Jeff, Dena, and Rene for a jorb well done! This was a rough one.

Furthermore, I'm going to try to keep my eyes out for rewrites. Looking forward to em!


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Don't look for a rewrite from me.  I'm done with this one...moving on to bigger and better things.
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...moving on to bigger and better things.


Emphasis on better, I presume? =)


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BIGGER and better...hopefully.  
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Congrats to all. Will see if I can read the entries soon.

Gabe


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
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Congrats to everyone who entered, and a special congrats to the top three!  Glad I can spend my first OWC with you fine ladies and gentlemen.


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Congrats to Jeff, Dena, and Rene.

A big congrats and well done to everyone who entered and reviewed!!

Enjoyed my first ever OWC and am looking foreward to the next one. (February?)

Thanks to Pia and Michael for hosting a gruelingly fun contest.

Good luck with the film!!!
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BIGGER guys at the gym and they better go in dry and make me eat pillow...hopefully.  





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I love men...period.  I love all men, any size, small, medium, or large.  They can be hairy like a gorilla, or smooth like a young pre-teen

What can I say?  When I see a man, I get all hard. I just can't help it.


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Please note that any quotes attributed to stevie are in fact the wishes, dreams and wild fantasies of Jeff Bush. This is clearly evident in the recent OWC in which he pretended his script was written by me, with vague Beatles refs and supplanted PDF names. Perhaps his plan backfired and his script got a shitload of votes because the SS crew thought I had written it...lol

He WANTS to be me...but he can never BE me.


For a start he wouldn't look good in my denim cutoffs...



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  Funny shit, bro...funny shit.

I wish I had me a pair of those shorts.

Actually, I should send you a pic of me wearing my old tiger striped spandex - OMG, those were the days.  To think that not only did I go out in public wearing those, I made a conscious decision to wear them, because I knew the chicks dug me in them.

Please God...bring back the BIG 80'S!!!!!!
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Good stuff bro!

Obviously the AZ birds weren't fussy back then.

I guess a lot of the younger ones grew up and now play on the Cards O line...

Gotta run and get the kids to school!



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When we all go to Pia's premier....Stevie's gotta wear his short jeans and Jeff has to wear his spandex haha

Two shows in one!
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When we all go to Pia's premier....Stevie's gotta wear his short jeans and Jeff has to wear his spandex haha

Two shows in one!


Part of me wouldn't fit in those beautiful Spandex!!!!  

I've got to find a picture...absolutely hilarious.  Of course, to make the outfit complete, I usually wore a wig as well.  Unreal...what was going through my peebrain?  I did look pretty fucking cool, though!  
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Like Richard Simmons haha
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Like Richard Simmons haha


No, more like Gene Simmons!!!!!
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YES PIA *high five*

Uh Jeff....din't Gene Simmons have a really L O N G uh....hmmm something he had was VERY long... oh yeah his tongue!
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Quoted from Dreamscale


No, more like Gene Simmons!!!!!


And with Gene Autry's saddlebags hangin' out the sides...




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Congrats to Rene and Dena, great to see both my number one and two scripts there although I did vote for "The Ledger" at the end of it all which I think has lots of potential.

How Jeff's script got in there over "Skiptrace" or a "A Light in Room Twelve" is beyond me? Must have been a sympathy vote.

Of course I'm kidding...good on you, Jeff for making the top three.

And well done to everybody who threw out a script on what was a difficult challenge for sure.

I do not envy Pia and Michael on this one. It seems like a difficult task to bring all this together for a feature. Good luck to you both and I wish you all the best.
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Congrats to everyone who submitted one!


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I think I forgot to say it, but congratulations, Dena!


"I remember a time of chaos. Ruined dreams. This wasted land. But most of all, I remember The Road Warrior. The man we called 'Max'."

THE PINBALL WARRIOR (scifi, WIP, ~30 pg.)
A STAND AGAINST EVIL (short, 9 pg.)
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Dunno how difficult it will be to bring all the shorts together.  Have you guys never seen a decent horror anthology?


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I think I forgot to say it, but congratulations, Dena!


Thanks Dan and everyone else ...been a long hard road since last year when it all started!

I OWE IT ALL TO YOU HERE....so the CONGRATS is to all of you! I'm forever grateful for all of the help and encouragement over the year

A shout out to Jeff Bush and Brett! Babz too! And a special thanks to Kev!

To everyone who entered...there were a lot of good ones imo. Great stuff...and a hard challenge.

Love to all!
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Dunno how difficult it will be to bring all the shorts together.  Have you guys never seen a decent horror anthology?


Yeah, but how many good ones were there and you have to look at what made them good?


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I'm counting 100% on Michael! He's the one with the brains!!  


Yeah, maybe, but you're the one with the...uh...  

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Wow.

Congratulations, in no particular order to Dena, Jeff, and Rene.
And a personal nod of appreciation to David M Troop, dtroop506.
Nice writing, people.
Very nicely well done.



Quoted from Ryan1
Has the writer of The Tool of Morality stepped forward yet?  Kinda curious who penned that one.

Whoever the sick bastard is needs his head examined!


LOL!

Quoted from Ryan1
Well, I'll be damned.  Shoulda known Ray wrote The Tool of Morality.  Somehow it all fits.

Well... why should you have known that?!



Quoted from stevie
Doh! How could we not see that Ray did TOM!

The drollness of it, the decapitations, the throw away carnage...not to mention the eating of hair pie.

Actually, it sounds more like...

Yo, Ray, have you been reading Jeff's diaries?  

Dispassionate carnage. Got it in spades.
So, THAT'S whose diaries I've been reading! Hmmp. Who knew?



Quoted from rc1107
Technically, Ray might feel a little used.  Afterall, he has already done all your pre-production work for you.  

This is a neat idea, though, Pia and Michael.

No. I don't feel used in the least little bit.
I ran through my own evaluation process to maintain context throughout the challenge to give my own grades for the purpose given: To produce a low budget + one location short.
I didn't select the prettiest literature in screenplay format, a personal pet peeve of mine regarding how what seems like many votes were cast for this go round. Is that how you vote for government positions? The candidate "whose personality you like the most" and with no regard to the economy and social issues?
Loathesome.

Honestly, I believe this gang-bang approach should be employed more often and consciously.
Pia & Michael have PLENTY of work cut out for them.
What I did was just provide a single faux-producer's cursory analysis.
When Pia gets the time to toss up her estimated production cost breakdown you guys will develop an even better idea of how someone who's paying for something views things differently than someone just making sh!t up outta their heads.

World-O-difference.



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Big reveal time here! Here is the reason for the October 2012 OWC and it is also the reason why I could not submit my entry.

A while ago, on a Friday night, I was chatting with Michael Cornetto on Skype. As usual, like a good friend, he sat through and listened to my drunken ramblings and I don't remember exactly how this came about, but that is when we came up with this idea. I had just finished shooting TTD and I swore that I would never shoot another film again. mostly because I really hate the production part of it. especially pre-production. we came up with this idea, that maybe we could coproduce a film. Michael would do most of the stuff that I hate and I would shoot the film here in Florida. We came up with the idea of asking people from SS to write short stories that we would weave together into a feature.  Then we came up with the idea of doing it in a rundown motel. after having some issues with the difficult locations I had chosen for TTD, I wanted it to be in a contained area where I could have better control over the environment. especially sound and lighting. since I am also funding this myself, it had to be rather low budget. We asked Don what he thought and he thought it was a great idea. So, there you have it.

Brilliant.
I wish every OWC had this pragmatic approach to it.

Best of luck weaving some of these together.
They're all over the place.
Maybe the V/H/S film could serve as some sort of laticework for quilting a few of these together.
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt2105044/

I look forward to the product... whenever it's hot off the DVD press.




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Congrats Dena, Jeff and Rene. I voted for The Ledger of course - so I'm glad it got through.
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Congrats to the winners.  My fave three even though I just voted for Extra.  


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