Looks like I'm probably going against the grain (again) as this one didn't really do anything for me. Have to say that by page 4 I was kind of over the 'LATER's and the story, for me, was too plain and simple. I didn't really get 'into' it.

I can see that a lot of effort has gone into this though and that you do possess many writing skills, I commend you for that. Good effort.

Renee

Some amusing lines of dialogue.... nice bloody scene toward the end... however, I felt it was too confined to one location.  I also grew tired pretty quickly with all of the auditioning stuff.  Felt like I had to slug through it.

Writer,

I kinda liked this. But right off the bat this isn't really horror. The set up has us waiting forever to get to the end, though the end was good. All in all, not bad but not within the challenge criteria of a horror script. But a nice effort nevertheless!

Congrats on finishing!

Steve

Highly entertaining and an imaginative take on the witch challenge. Very thin on story, and without any backstory or subtext to speak of, this is so self-contained I can't imagine what the rest of the world is like. It comes off as a bit meta, like the writer is exorcising a personal demon for a bad audition experience. I didn't buy the witches doing him in like that with so little provocation and there's nothing sympathetic about them, so it's just about a terrible man getting what's coming to him.

A decent short that could have been a couple of pages shorter or given us some depth.

Wow, this script was nothing short of magic!  I loved it.  Great dialogue, writing, story.  The title fooled me, so I was pleasantly surprised.

The Director really steals the show here, from beginning to end.  Part of me wished the director was more venomous, but it's a solid alignment of ideas.

Good job!

Johnny

This was a very clever idea and ripe for comedy what with the three witches playing it straight against the Director's antics. Some of the jokes fell flat for me but others were pretty sharp. The balance between the two was good enough where I more or less enjoyed myself throughout.

I'd double-check some of the Director's word choices though. You describe him as a "snobbish older British dandy" so I read him with Jeremy Irons' voice. Not that Jeremy Irons is snobbish or dandy but I think the man behind Dead Ringers could play it rather well. That said, some of the dialogue didn't sound right coming out of this particular guy. Some of it not very British, some of it not very snobbish and or dandy. Can't put my finger on it. Maybe Jeremy Irons was just a bad choice to go with on voice.

The ending didn't quite fit. I mean, obviously, these witches were going to put him in his place. I liked the audience dimension as well. But it was extremely grim and sort of went against the rest of the script's tone somehow. It also came off as sort of mean-spirited. Guy was pretty shitty but somehow, I don't think he deserved this.

As far as OWC guidelines... yeah. Not horror... again. A pack of jokers, you SimplyScripts folks, huh?

Anyway, kudos on the idea. Execution wasn't bad. A total bust as an OWC entry. Not so much as its own thing.

Though I enjoyed a couple of funny lines, I thought the director talked way more than necessary. We get that he was basically a dick to everyone. Pare it down to a few of the funnier lines and it should be fine, otherwise I am just losing interest.

I liked "Wrong audition, my friend, the Addams Family casting is down the hall."

I didn't like "then I want to get on a broom stick myself and fly out of here."

Watch spelling and grammar. Lightening should be lightning. They levitate T(t)he Director off the floor.

I thought the lines of the witches were well done. Good effort.

Love the concept and the execution on this one!  

Decent writing too - although a bit heavy on the description in places it wasn't totally necessary.  

My only qualm...the ending just didn't really pay off, because of the unbelievability factor (even given the assumptions of reality for this OWC.)  They tear the Director to shreds and everything's hunky dory? But fine tune the ending, and this is a cute, neat sketch.  (IMHO) Kudos.

Weighted Matrix: https://docs.google.com/spread.....TTUE&usp=sharing

Producer's Notes: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NNGaVlrrpkjIfp-BRGjpTE03W1e5lZuRceJ3wQECYaI/edit?usp=sharing

13. ACT IV, SCENE 1 by Tres Wiches - Horror - When three real modern witches audition for the role of the Three Witches in a production of Macbeth, they must endure the Director's cruel criticism and rejection of countless performers - and ultimately themselves - until they are driven to unleash their gory revenge on the Director.

Brief - can't afford "A small mob of actors and actresses" + a "flood of people" + five principals.

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Comments  -  can't afford
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Modern Witches and/or Warlocks -
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Hadn't gotten to this one yet, probably because of the uninspired title, but when I saw it was attracting a lot of votes, thought I'd give it a go.  Quick, snappy, snipey dialogue from the director, but he does veer toward caricature.  But man, you made me hate that prick.  Good job on that.  The whole paring down of the cast process goes on a bit long.

The concept and tone of this sort of reminds me of Shadow of the Vampire, where the director slowly realizes that the star of his Nosferatu production is an actual vampire.  There were no real surprises here.  As soon as the three witches were introduced, we knew they were real, and of course this director was going to get his comeuppance.  A struggling actor's revenge fantasy.  I suppose the only thing that kind of took me aback was the sheer level of violence inflicted on the little d-bag.  I'm not complaining, as it was some hard core retribution, but it almost felt out of place given the snarky tone throughout.  A very solid effort for one week.