Not gonna lie, the story made me go "Lolwut?" a little...and then I read it.
Instantly I began wondering why I was chanting the Star Wars theme along with thinking I was imagining Genisis and Revelations as Jedi's.
"God be with you" - What I was thinking.
Already on Page 8. I love it so far. It's kinda funny, but Im afriad to say so incase it's actually meant to be a serious script.
Page 8: When they're being all "Yo whats up Kings!" (Genesis and Revelations are both "Greatings, Kings") how about you do:
"GENESIS AND REVELATIONS:
Greatings, Kings!"
This way, instead of them doing it individually, it's less-clutters up the script.
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Again, with Kings and "Lammy" how about you do the same thing?
Im sorry, but this is like Bibical Star-Wars...and that's a cool
Im reading on...
Alright. I skimmed through it.
Few things I want to clear up:
I liked it. However, the only thing annoying me a little was the writing.
Writing was good, albeit...if it's bibical, shouldn't they be using bibical words like "thy" and "therefore"?
It should be less American-Slang and instead more bibical and "old-world" I call it.
The plot was a little baffling, mind, but I thought it was worth a read.
I wasn't sure if it was being a serious script, if it was, it was good. I liked it.
When people are talking, could you have it in normal? Instead of being in BOLD?
I found that distracting a little.
Overall, I thought it was worth a read. I liked it, and I'll give it 5 out of 10.
Entertaining and good-fun.