The Flash Future Menace by Jake Katalay - Sci Fi, Fantasy, Comedy, Coming-of-Age, Action - Barry Allen is a young man with a life full of death and sorrow. He works as a forensic scientist in the Central City Police Department, his mother was murdered when he was young, his father was charged for the murder, and he spends every hour of his time trying to free his father. Despite all of this, he manages to stay optimistic. One day, the impossible happens and Barry is struck by a lightning bolt that grants him the abilities of lightning speed. While Barry uses these abilities to help people, an evil force from the future suddenly appears, threatening to harm everyone Barry loves. 128 pages

production: The tone of the film shifts towards the end as it starts to get darker. The one present tone that stays mostly consistent is comedy. The film is mainly a comedy with dark, almost horror like moments. - pdf, format

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The logline is way too long. You need to get that down to a sentence or two.

Quoted Text EXT. ALLEN HOUSEHOLD - NIGHT The lights in the house are on. The silhouettes of the two people inside can be seen. Outside, the wind howls, fall leaves ruffling down the streets. A couple can be heard talking inside the house. Scratch that. Arguing. These are the Allens. HENRY Allen and NORA Allen.

For better clarity, I would start with the environment outside the house before what's going on inside the house. And you don't need to say "Outside" when your scene heading already tells us that. Also - you are outside the house so the view of the lights should not be "in. Something like:"

EXT. ALLEN HOUSEHOLD - NIGHT

The wind howls, fall leaves ruffle down the streets.

The silhouettes of the two PEOPLE fill a well lit window.

Quoted Text Talking inside the house. Scratch that. Arguing.

Not a fan of the above. Unneeded.

No need to bold character names.

Quoted Text The lights in the street lights and lamp posts outside all BURST open at the same time, darkening the block. Nora and Henry stop talking

Again - you don't need to say outside. The scene heading is ext.