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Well, there's not much else than the high concept premise yet. I wrote a perfect opening but then, I found the same problems as you did here, slasher or long run. It's simply not my genre I guess. I really really want to write although I cannot feel true substance in suffering, which Horror is imo. You could make me learn. I appreciate your work.
There are vague ideas of mine to go forward albeit I'm simply not secure. There's something missing. You wouldn't want to join me, would you? Write me.
That's that.
I read the opening. I think it's a solid setup. You've taken what I thought might be unmarketable (anthology based on owned IP) and given it a twist that could be interesting in its own right.
Apologies but I haven't got time to co-write. I would suggest they each tell a stories that somehow link the women together in ways they didn't realise. So they're all their for the same reason of revenge, perhaps.
I read the opening. I think it's a solid setup. You've taken what I thought might be unmarketable (anthology based on owned IP) and given it a twist that could be interesting in its own right.
Yeah, I know, then, so far it's nothing but smoke and mirrors.
I would suggest they each tell a stories that somehow link the women together in ways they didn't realise. So they're all their for the same reason of revenge, perhaps. Good luck with it.
Thanks for checking it out. The sentence I underlined from your message is very interesting. Haven't seen it from that side. My first idea was, as you see in the logline, that the pictures are connected to a personal guilt of each of them. Then, as I thought about your words, it might be that there's something they "don't know", something that happened to them which they originally found was clear but in thruth is connected to the responsibility of another woman in that room.
And the curator plots that knowledge he got against them.
However, there's nothing more than this short setup yet. I'll talk to Kham how she see things and hope she's in as a co.
The only thing I hate about this is that we didn't get a notification message or email. I only fiund out about this today. A writer who loses a headstart of 3 weeks should be my first vignette.
Well, I for one am going to try. I am facing two problems, though.
One: I'm completely out of my element with the genre. That's fine so long it becomes a learning experience for me, and the script doesn't cause any serious injury to readers.
Two: As I get my ideas into writing, they're taking up fewer pages than I expected.
The second point is partly due to not having any experience writing for suspense.
I'm sure two actors and a director can make this action work:
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The couple proceeds down the sidewalk, with Thomas casually scanning for a nice place to eat and Liz glancing nervously at each window she passes.
The male is oblivious to any danger, the female is worried sick, and the director could drag this out for as much screen time as necessary. But it reads fast and takes up virtually no space on the page.
How does one occasionally cut away to an observer without completely messing up the flow of the foreground scene?
For context, there is a group of characters being watched over the course of several scenes. The primary action involves those characters, but I want to indicate that the observer is doodling a sketch of them. Each scene might have one or two glimpses at this sketch without revealing more than the observer's hand.
Using INTERCUT or formally switching scenes back and forth seems like overkill.
I may be wrong but I'm assuming these are related questions? I'd say the best thing to do is study some pro scripts that use this effectively. The Conversation comes to mind. I recall the opening is a really long, complex back and forth between a couple walking and an observer.
I'm not seeing the script on google for some reason. I can send you it if you want.
I may be wrong but I'm assuming these are related questions? I'd say the best thing to do is study some pro scripts that use this effectively. The Conversation comes to mind. I recall the opening is a really long, complex back and forth between a couple walking and an observer.
I'm not seeing the script on google for some reason. I can send you it if you want.
That would be super helpful.
These two bits are not in the same vignette, but yes they are both in the 7WC I'm trying to bring together.
These two bits are not in the same vignette, but yes they are both in the 7WC I'm trying to bring together.
I sent you an email. Detective/thrillers are probably more likely to have lots of scenes of people observing from different vantage points. Speaking of vantage point... the movie Vantage Point!
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